from the shadow part 3

[Reoigi 4]

He saw a zombie he shot at it. It must’ve had some steel on it because it set on fire. He ran forword and stabbed the zombie. it fell to the ground. Reoigi was right, he found 2 pieces of steel on it as well as more money. It sickened him but he took the money. He started back to the kingdom. It started to rain which was minor annoyance. He saw eight eyes glowing back at him. A spider lunged at him but he brought his sword up and stabbed it on its head sending it crashing. On it he found a cobweb some meat and more money. He used the cobweb to attach the two pieces of steel onto a stick. He now had a steel sword. He watched as the drops of water streamed off of it. It would have to do until he could get a black smith to forge the pieces together. He counted his money. 53 he counted. He went back to the kingdom. he navigated the streets and found a blacksmith who forged the 2 pieces of steel together. He said you got any minas. What Reoigi asked but it clicked in minas-money. Reoigi said yes. The blacksmith said 25 minas hand em over. He tossed the man 25 minas good enough he said and handed Reoigi the sword. It was sunny outside when Reoigi left the shop. The water had fallen between the stones. He found a book shop. Inside a man looked at Reoigi and gasped. Reoigi wondered why but the man was quick and handed Reoigi a book. He said this book contains important information about the undead. Read it then pass it on. He read it. One fact caught his attention. Undead government is as complicated as ours it is run by a king. The day was coming to an end. He asked the guards to open the gate. They asked name. Reoigi he said. Why do you wish to leave alkhazar. I wish to explore the woods Reoigi said. Fair enough they said. The gate opened. He left and went into the woods he climbed a tree and slept there. He awoke in the morning. He went back to the city. He found a man. He was a guard but he had pale skin and a red eye. He asked Reoigi of his strange attire. He seemed like a man who would understand but still it enraged Reoigi. He stormed but not too far before talking to the man again. He seemed like a friend after a few hours of conversation. But when they were about to part Reoigi remembered something. The book of the undead came to mind. He tossed the book to the man. He found it interesting. They proceeded to a more private place. They talked about it for an hour or so. In the end the 2 knew very important information.

[Khaene 1]

OOC: I read the three posts and think you have the start of something to work with but it needs some work. One thing missing is the why of all the things that are happening to Reiogi. Why could he not learn from his parents? Why does he wander through the wilderness? His motivations are very unclear and all this stuff just kinda happens to and around him. As a result it's hard as a reader to associate with the character and want to read more about his history and adventures. Maybe try hinting at some of his thoughts, motivations and reactions as the story progresses.

[Reoigi 4]

OOC: I read the three posts and think you have the start of something to work with but it needs some work. One thing missing is the why of all the things that are happening to Reiogi. Why could he not learn from his parents? Why does he wander through the wilderness? His motivations are very unclear and all this stuff just kinda happens to and around him. As a result it's hard as a reader to associate with the character and want to read more about his history and adventures. Maybe try hinting at some of his thoughts, motivations and reactions as the story progresses.

ahh i always forget the little details im sory ill try harder but the idea was he was so good not even his parents could teach him anything

[Reoigi 4]

also he is inspired by moy loc charachter and most of it is true

[Danny 2232]

Moved to the Great Library. It shall be sorted into appropriate category shortly.