[Denied]Theoden's Application

[Theoden 1]

Out-Of-Character Details

Minecraft Account Name:tas1147How old are you?:13Time-Zone/Country of Residence:Central Time, U.S.A.Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?:YesHave you had any previous experience in roleplaying?:I have had some experience in roleplaying.Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?:YesHow did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?:I was browsing for RPG servers and came across it.Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft:http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/77513-d-theodens-application/Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here: http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r-100-unique-gameplay/! :Ok

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is:Roleplaying is when you are acting as a character that your not.In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is:Meta-gaming is when you add your experience and skills into a character in a game you're playing and add that knowledge that he doesn't know to him. Like I used to play a server when you pick a race then go in a town then act as a job for that town. (i.e. MassiveCraft)In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is:Power-emoting is when a character physically or emotionally does something to another character like Player 1 killed Player 3 with AIR. So it is basically saying what you or someone else is doing at that time.

In-Character Details

Character Name:Theoden IronaxeCharacter Race:(Mountain) Dwarf (Male)Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary:Theoden was just a regular mountain dwarf he has fiery red hair and a light skin complection and seemingly gentle blue eyes. Theoden is slightly armored with a dark red tunic and legs with a varying slight array of colors. Theoden has a dark side to him though like the caves he mines in he is starting to become darker he is unsatisfied and yearns for more he wants to rule but knows he can't and believes joining a darker cause may do it he believes evil will give him power but doesn't want to be just a petty thief. Theoden like most dwarves is as hard as a rock but he is an onyx in a group of crystals all who look at him know he differs from most dwarves or at least all willing to to talk to him may find out. Theoden is strict, strong, smart, cunning, and devious. Theoden wasn't always so mean back when he was a boy he had had an interesting childhood he was an adopted son of a noble family but sadly that family was human and wanted a human son so he never got the love he deserved but some of the servant dwarves that were their did care for him which made his life easier. By the time Theoden had turned 16 he was sick of this noble family so he devised a plan so that he could leave which was sadly murder. One night when Theoden's adopted parents were sleeping he came in their room and choked them to death then threw their body in a nearby river when he had told the servant dwarves what he had done they rejoiced btu a few days later started questioning his sanity and turned him in. For 2 years Theoden was locked away inside a molding jail with 4 other people that had commited man slaughter. But by the 2nd year Theoden was starting to feel angry so he and the other 4 companions busted out. On their 18th day of hiding they were all hungry and some of the nearby orc population were starting to be seen more and more when finally on the 25th day of hiding they confronted a small orc and the orc gave them information on there whereabouts saying that no onne was looking for them but right when they turned their back on the orc 5 orc popped out of nowhere and stabbed 2 of Theoden's companions and dragged one off into the distance the other one fought the orcs while Theoden ran away scarred by the sounds of piercing screams but of the screams of the orcs not of his dying friends when he realized why he was sad he turned around and attacked his friends and made friends with the orcs. Theoden spent 2 weeks with the orcs then headed out learning that he should go and spy on the mysterious dwarves so for 15 years now Theoden has been waiting for a symbol now a 33 year old dwarf which is still rather in his youth he is only willing to wait a small amount of time to get back to his old ways.

What are your characters ambitions?:My character dreams of becoming a Tyrant so that he can smite all that have smited him.Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here:Is there anything else you would like to say about your character:He fears only one thing and that is of finding his true parents and them hating him like his last parents.

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response?My character being the man he is would come up to the dwarf's shop and see how the dwarves doing and if he found out he was struggling he would spit at the dwarf's feet and slam the dwarf with the butt of his axe until the dwarf pled mercy then he would help him up and say "you say you struggle I murdered my best friends and family and have been shunned by my own race I should be the one with a shop I deserve better I DESERVE TO RULE!" then he would walk away as if nothing happened and walk into a nearby ally way to look for orcs to see when his signal will be if ever.

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?My character being devious and cunning waits in a nearby bush and when the fighting escalates he comes out and helps the orc loot the dwarf and says he has no love for troublemakers then takes part of the loot from the orc and goes on his merry way but right when the dwarf thinks he's ok he strolls back and asks if he's ok if the dwarf recognizes him he hits him on the head and tries again in 10 min and if the dwarf still remembers he just strolls off but if the dwarf doesn't remember he tells him a fake story how he saw a human come behind him slam his head and steal his money which is his way of making a propaganda against humans.

Whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins spill out, you peer down at the defenceless man. What does your character do?:Theoden walks up to the old man smirking and asks if the man has any magical capabilities since you should always help a user of magic whilst he put a curse on you or make you a wretched toad when the old man replies no he helps him up and brings him to the nearby tree now the man becomes oblivious of the minas all around the area he fell and when Theoden gets a branch from the tree and "tests it on the road out of the mans view now he goes and picks up all the minas brings back the walking stick to the old man then just walks away the old man completely oblivious to the dwarf now having the money.

[Hylian the Heretic 233]

Denied.

-Power-emoting definition is incorrect.

-Formatting needs work. (Also maybe split your bio into paragraphs or at least split it into parts.)

-Bio lacks server lore. Try adding a city or major event.

-Last part of bio and ORQs are mostly incoherent ._.

-First ORQ is borderline insanity, which requires a VA

-Second ORQ needs more detail and isn't really realistic. There's no one way these are supposed to play out, but this wouldn't really happen.

-Theft requires a VA

[Hylian the Heretic 233]

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