[Denied][Human] Bostofan7754's Application Ii

[Jared Frisner 1]

Out-Of-Character Information
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: Bostonfan7754

How old are you?: 14

Time-Zone: EST

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: Kinda, GTA: SA rp.

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: From a friend

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/85757-human-bostofan7754s-application/

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): Yes

Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Taking role of a character in game and playing as them.
Meta-gaming: Taking info from out of game and putting it in game.

A friend tells you to meet somewhere irl, but not your character, and you go and meet.

Power-emoting: Doing an emote that does not give the other person time to react.

Cutting someones legs off with out swinging your sword.

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Harrold Rivers
Current Age: 25
Sub-race (if any): None
Past / History Harrold Rivers is a human who has been raised in all his life. He was raised with a father and mother and two brothers in. He is the oldest of the three. He was educated and is able to both read and write. His father owned a successful tavern the city and his mother helped with the tavern. His father has pushed him to become a bartender and work at a tavern. His father is deadly sick and out of work with his mother being barely able to support his father,. His two brothers are attending university and do not have jobs. He is in desperate need of a job to help keep his father alive and his mother from folding under all the stress.. His father's tavern was closed and Harrold is looking for a new one to work at. 

Ambitions for the Future: Harrold wants to one day own a successful tavern run by him and have enough money to support him, his father, a potential wife, and potential children.

Personality: Harrold is a humorous person, knowing the right time to make the right jokes. He can cheer someone up with the right joke in a matter of seconds. He is a huge smart alek, but the good kind. He is very sarcastic. He is confident in what he says and does and doesn't look in to future consequences. He is very upfront and is not quick to judge or make assumptions. He is kind and compassionate to others, but can get mean if he needs to.

Skills: He is good at finding lies and exposing them. He is good at negotiation and bartering. He has mild skill with a sword and hand to hand combat.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): http://minecraft.nov...86228/BarTender

Any other details you wish to share about your character: 

Open-Response-Questions
Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.
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1. Whilst in the mighty human capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?

Answer:
Me: Hello sir, what are you up to this fine evening?
Him: I'm visiting the palace to see and old friend
Me: Really? How do you know him?
Him:That is none of your business! Now begone! Leave me be!
Me: There is no need to be rude sir. I was simply asking a question.

Him: What did I say!? BEGONE! 

*Fast walks towards the castle looking back occasionally*

Me: There is a darked clothed man heading towards the palace. You might want to keep an eye on him.
Guard: Thank you, we'll watch for him.


2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?

Answer:
Me: Hello gentlemen, are you giving this old man trouble?
Bandits: Get out of here! We won't hesitate to hurt you!
*Old man is scared looking and his facial expression is pleading for help*

Me: Alright! Alright! I'll leave. 

Bandits: Now if you tell anyone, you're dead!

Me: Its safe with me.

*Walks away and hides in bushes. Finds a rock and throws it into the bushes to make a distraction* 

*Both bandits turn and old man looks around and sees me.*

*I make motion to run away and he gets up to move away*

*Bandits turn around and see the old man*

Me: *Draws sword* Come and get me! *Runs away*

*Old man is gone now*

Bandits: $*!t! Get him!

*I barely manage to escape*

 

3. You are standing within the mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).

Answer:
Me: Hello! I see you're selling some items! How much are these beautiful mugs?
Man: Ah! Hello sir. Name a price.
Me: Is (random number) 50 ok?
Man: Sure!
Me: How about 45?
Man: That works.
Me: How many do you have?
Man: I've got three sets.
Me: Is 120 good for all three sets?
Man: Sure!
*Exchanges money for mugs*
Me: Thank you sir!
Man: Its my pleasure, come back anytime!

[Roxforbraynz 251]

 

 

You did not wait a full twenty four hours from your previous denial. This is instant denial. Please wait a full twenty four hours as of your denial to post your next attempt.

 

 

Additionally:

 

1.  I'd like you to expand upon all your definitions. Right now they're vague. We need to know that you understand these definitions as they are very important.

 

2.  Your biography is very general and lacks any server lore. You may find lore to add to your biography on the Wiki. And try adding more detail so your backstory isn't so general.

 

3.  Please expand upon your open response questions. Make them read like short stories with detailed actions as well as dialogue between characters. Dialogue only will not do.

 

4.  I saw a few grammatical errors in your application. I suggest going over it a few times and correcting these errors.

 

 

As stated above, wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post before posting your next attempt. If you have any questions, feel free to send me a message. Good luck with your next application.

[Roxforbraynz 251]

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