[Denied]Maxgemini's Second App [Alt]

[iris1612 1780]

[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Main Account Name: stewartev
Alternate Account Name: MaxGemini (I am planning to make MaxGemini my main account soon.)
How old are you?: 12
Time-Zone: PST.
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: 3 years of D&D and a few good months of LotC

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Role-playing is the act of assuming the role of another person, fictional or nonfictional, usually for entertainment of yourself or others.
Meta-gaming: Meta gaming is using 
Power-emoting:

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:
 By the way, this is an existing character, so you will see writing that is the same.
Full Name: Amuel Sano
Current Age: 26
Race: Human
Sub-race (if any): Southerner.
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): was shocked by the cruelty of the world at a relatively young age. When he was 15, he left his home as a builder to get money for his parents. Along the way, he met a High Elf named Equinox. The two became friends, and traveled together. Equinox caught a fever, but fortunately, they were found by a nice-seeming group called the White Rose. (you all know how this will end) The White Rose Troops refused to let them in and Equinox insulted one of them. They decided to kill him, and Amuel barely escaped with Equinox, but he died of a fever a few days later. Equinox's last words were “Always put the happiness and safety of others, before your own.”

Amuel moved on, and found friends in Clan Ishikawa. He grew increasingly loyal to them, to the point where he would obey any command given by one of the Higher-ranking officers. One day, he was looking for his Drill Sergeant, Satomi(Yopplwasupxxx) walked in carrying his dead son in his arms. Even though he never knew Satomi's son, his death still struck him deep. He had been killed, nobody knew why. It struck Amuel as really unfair, to be killed like that. Then, a few days later, the final blow was struck, both to Satomi, and to Amuel. An acquaintance of Amuel's, Fujiwara, was executed. Amuel will go to any measure to protect an 'innocent' or one of his freinds. (Accepted VA for 2a and 4b)
Ambitions for the Future: He wants to forget and to serve. He wants to forget his past, forget everything, and live in his new life as Amuel Sano, the Ashigeru in House Ishikawa. He is effectively brainwashing himself.
Personality: Amuel is polite and soft-spoken, always careful, but sometimes he can get upset quickly, generally when he has had a bad day.
Skills: He is a mediocre swordsman, but he is incredible with the bow. He considers himself to be a master at the art of the Yumi bow. He is not as good as  he thinks, however, since he has had limited life experience. 

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): http://www.minecraftskins.com/skin/1259698/amuel-sano/
Any other details you wish to share about your character: N/A

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your alt application has been denied. Here are some things that need to be improved if you are wanting to reapply.

 

You didn't fill out your meta-gaming and power-emoting definitions. Make sure you do this, it is a very important part of the application.

 

Your biography is pretty vague, though it does include some server lore more could be added. Being already accepted onto the server this shouldn't be hard for you. You could put things such as towns or notable events pertaining to your race.

 

You could describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

[cruzazul 2815]

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