[Denied]Dwarf Silence7301

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[Princeton 396]

 

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- Unfortunately, I am going to have to deny this -

 

Firstly, you seem unsure of your definitions. Please add examples to prove you understand their meanings.

 

Secondly, your biography was clouded with unofficial lore. Several of the holds and keeps you mentioned have never existed in LoTC. I suggest re-reading the wiki and adding things that have actually existed in LoTC.

 

Another thing you do not seem to understand is seasons. One season equals 7 real life years. If your character was said 500 seasons, then he would be 3,500 years old. Dwarves do not live that long, so I suggest editing that part out. If you wish to be an old dwarf, you must add in detail his travels from Aegis, to Asulon, to Elysium, to Kalos, and then to Anthos.

 

I also suggest where your father learned blacksmithing and how he taught you. This would include method of training and how long you trained for.

 

Lastly, I have some issues with your last ORQ. It seems rather short and under-detailed. I suggest adding more dialogue and detailed actions to prove you can role-play out a simple situation.

 

All in all, not a bad application. Just a few minor things and you'll be good to go!

 

Please wait 24 hours after this post to reapply. Feel free to PM me with any questions or concerns!

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