[Denied][Human] Mpcommander App #1

[mpcommander 5]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the following questions as accurately
as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.



Minecraft Account Name: mpcommander

How old are you?: 16

Time-Zone: EST

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes.

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I've played DnD before,
but there was little roleplaying involved in the games I played. This really
only meant talk to the NPCs.

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: Youtube.

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: (None)

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do
so (link above): Yes

Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and
follow it in your biography?: Yes



Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not
take any definitions from elsewhere!:



Role-playing: Roleplaying is pretending to be someone else. Pretending to be
someone else includes keeping in mind how they think, their personality, and
etc.

Meta-gaming: Metagaming is using OOC information to influence IC thoughts and
actions. An example would be addressing a character by name because you know it
OOC, even though your character would have no idea who that person is. 

Power-emoting:
Controlling another player's actions for your own gain. An example of this is
killing another player's character without their permission.



In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:



Full Name: Joseph Swiftfoot

Current Age: 24

Sub-race (if any): Northern

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): Joseph grew up in
the village of Ager. He led a simple life, his parents were peasants who farmed
a small patch of land. He was an only child and was used to his family paying
attention only to him. Joseph's father through sheer determination had learned
how to read. This was mostly done with the help of the town priest, for
Joseph's father was a pious man and always came to the church of Oren for his
problems. After his father learned to read and write, he taught Joseph. This
inspired Joseph to truly believe in the religion of the kingdom. Life went on,
and at the age of 20 his parents grew old and died, and John inherited the
farmland. He worked the land by himself for four years until something happened
that changed his life.

After his 24th birthday Joseph began to feel odd. He had this

strange pressure against the back of his skull and neck. He also started to
feel strange sensations in his hands and feet. Joseph sometimes began to shake
uncontrollably sometimes with an arm, sometimes his entire body convulsed. He
was confused and scared, so he went to the town priest for help. The priest
believed the sickness to be a demon hiding within Joseph and attempted an
exorcism. It did nothing. Joseph visited local doctors, and they attempted to
leach him, to get rid of the "bad blood". It did nothing. Slowly, as
Joseph tried to find treatment, he began to lose faith in the Oren's religion
until he had nothing but scorn for it. Joseph wasn't ready to give up yet
however. He sold his farm for a fair bit of minas and sought to journey the
world, seeking someone who could cure his illness. Joseph set out looking for a
sorcerer, believing that perhaps magic could heal him.

 

Ambitions for the Future: Get his illness
cured, if that fails experience everything he wanted too. Including, but not
limited to: visiting Kal'Azgoth, visiting Leumalin, and sail on the sea.

Personality: Joseph is a selfish
man, but he is also extremely determined. He also has a straightforward
attitude to solving problems. He won't go out of the way to help others. Joseph
pays lip service to the religion of Oren, but in truth doesn't believe in it at
all. Under his circumstances, he wants to see the world and do as much as he
can. Joseph is a cynic. Joseph is also rather curious. 

Skills: Joseph is good at
Farming, Fishing, and Hunting. Even though he is a peasant, he is somewhat
literate, although he doesn't understand most complex words, he can get by.  

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of
your skin): 

Any other details you wish
to share about your character: Joseph has a brain tumor. (Of course he lacks the
medical knowledge to know what it is beyond "sickness")



Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be
answered with a minimum of one
paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

____



1. Whilst in the mighty human
capital you notice a dark-clothed figure
stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within
shouting distance - what do you do?



Answer: Joseph sees the man,
and continues to go about his business. He justifies this to himself while
walking along the city streets. He thinks: "I have no idea who that man
is, perhaps he was also just going about his business, perhaps that man is
hiding from some corrupt decree, perhaps he is a heretic because he refused to
fall into Oren's dogma, perhaps..." He continuously rationalizes this
action to himself almost without end. Joseph ends up concluding that man
probably didn't matter anyways.

 

2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest
you come across a large clearing, in which sits a small
cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable
old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed
bandits - they appear to be
threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?



Answer: Joseph turns around
and runs. He isn't going to risk anything for some old man. He thinks to
himself that the old man tried to fight experienced killers, and kind of
deserved to get robbed. As he continues to run along the forest floor, he
continues to justify it to himself. Joseph doesn't stop running until he
reaches Ager.





3. You are standing within the
mighty human capital when you notice a small man
standing behind a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of
general goods - he says that he is selling just about
anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you
to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that
happens).



Answer: Joseph's attention
is drawn towards an iron hatchet, he thinks to himself that it will be a decent
weapon and a good tool. Joseph says while pointing to the hatchet:

"How
much do you want for this?"

The
shopkeeper replies: "It's in 'igh demand right now. I'm gonna 'ave ter ask
100 minas for it."

"I'll
buy for 25."

"I'm
gonna need a bit more than that. 75?"

"Let's
go for the middle road, 50 minas."

"60
is the lowest I'll go."

Joseph
frowns slightly and says: "Sorry that's too much."

The
merchant asks disappointingly: "Are yer sure?"

"Yes."

"Well,
sorry we couldn't make a deal. Anything else that interests ye?"

Joseph
takes one last look at the merchant's wares before saying: "No. Farewell
sir."

After
saying farewell, Joseph begins walking away.

The
merchant says: "Alrigh' farewell. If ye need anything next time in town,
you know where to look!"

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Below are suggestions I have listed that you should implement into your application before reapplying.

 

Though your biography has a decent amount of lore it is rather vague. Try to add more detail to the story of your character.

 

Describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Expand on your first and second ORQs and try to format your third one so it isn't in a long listed format.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial post before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

 

 

[cruzazul 2815]

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