tronan's application #2 first one got denied

[Tronan 4]

Out-Of-Character:

-Minecraft Account Name: tronan999

-How old are you?:18

-Time-Zone/Country of Residence:United States

-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:yes

-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:I like to hang out with friends, I play basketball and football,and I like to play minecraft

-How much time could you be on the server weekly?:mostly everyday if i'm not busy from 1:00-5:00

-How long have you played Minecraft?:I've played minecraft since it first came out

-What do you know about Roleplaying? What is it?:role playing is creating or being a character who does things differently than you would do in real life in a fiction al based world.

-What do you expect this server will be like?:I think the server will be a great RP experience.

-What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:I've left multiple servers because of griefers and they really didn't get the role playing experience all it really was was just a bunch of people building bases and trying to kill each other no role play whatsoever.

-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:yes

-Name the 4 races on this server:elf,human,dwarf,and orc

-How did you hear about us?:I heard about the lord of the craft from friends on the server and from minecraft forums.

-What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?: tronan999

In-Character:

-Character Name: john wainflet

-What is your Race?: human

-Biography: john was born during the war with the undead, his family didn't have a lot of money because of their father at war and high taxes for the war effort but they still managed

john and his brothers couldn't go to school so their mother taught them the basics of writing and reading,while not working they would help with the small bakery their family owned,at about age 16 his father returned and everything went back to normal they started gaining more money until one day a gang of raiders came to our village and started to rob everybody they killed anybody who resisted they even killed the mayor of our town they finally came to our house my father grabbed his sword and fought back he killed at least a dozen of them before they finally struck him down john wanted to go and help punched the lead raider then the raider knocks him out, when john regained his senses he see's his family all murdered his brother tried to run but they just shot him with arrows, then john tried to follow them but they were long gone john went to the Great Kingdom of Oren to plead to get guards to track down the bandits but they couldn't they were busy rebuilding all of the destroyed settlements, and john couldn't track them down so john now living by his own one ran into a bunch of orc thugs then he got into a fight with one of them and they soon beat him up pretty badly he awoke in some person's house he tried to escape but he was in to much pain then a strange man walked towards him he told him that he would take care of him know and that he has been watching john for some time the man was the kingdoms blacksmith so he taught john how to forge an iron sword and other various items, when they had free time the man would teach john how to fight eventually john became very good with a sword and he told the man about his village and why he wanted to track down the raiders which by now were probably long gone so for the next 7 years they lived in peace until a thief broke into the shop who apparently stole some diamonds and killed the man who took care of him for 7 years before he died john asked him his name the man said his name was

Jesben and then passed away john angry with fear took off after the thief and killed him, now john decided to move away from the city to a small village not to far away, john started drinking a lot because of the loss of his family and Jesben and one day decides he wants to try and track down the raiders who killed his family after a week or so with no luck he returned to the village, every night longs to avenge his family and friends who died during the raider attack and one day he will find them.

-Character Age:23

-Character Appearance:he likes to wear his fathers old armor to remember his family,brown eyes,and a big scar from a raider who slashed his back pretty good.

-Character Personality: loyal,caring,will help people in need,and hates raiders for what they did to his family,and heavy drinker(cause of loss of his family)

-Your ambitions:to one day catch up to the raiders who killed his family and protect the people of the kingdom of oren.

-Can your character read or write?: his mother taught him the basics of reading and writing.

-Can your character mine?: no

-Are you a capable builder?: he can build small wooden houses

-Can you wield a sword?:yes he trained when he had free time

-Enjoy Farming?: no has absolutely no patience towards farming

-Does your character have any special skills?:

-A screenshot of your skin:

-Other Information:

[Whitebeard 126]

Common reasons people are denied:

-It has bad grammar or Punctuation.

-Your biography was too short.

-Your Biography didn't link to the lore of Aegis.

-You obviously didn't read the lore.

-Fix the layout: This could be from having bolds everywhere or simply being hard to read.

-It lacked effort.

-Your skin isn't RP.

-Needed an actual picture of your skin.

-You didn't include a skin link or it didn't work.

-Your application was too short.

These are just some of the reasons it could have been

I encourage you too check out the following link if you are struggling to write an application.

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/1035-read-first-chevaliers-guide-to-posting-a-good-application/