[Denied]MA573rMiND's Application *OUTDATED*

[MA573rMiND 0]

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Out-Of-Character:

-Minecraft Account Name: MA573rMiND

-How old are you?: 16 (but I've been mistaken for 18)

-Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Mountain/Canada

-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes

-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I have an IQ of about 125-130, but it's sometimes a slow-acting mind. I've been a gamer and artist ever since I was little, although my occupation is a janitor/busboy at a trucking company. I recently built my own PC and completed a Computer Maintenance and Repair course with 95%. I work out (occasionally) and talk in a low voice as not to become a nerd.

-How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 5-15

-How long have you played minecraft?: Over a year, since about 1.3, registered on 1.7.

-What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: I know it's definition and use. Although I've had little practice in it and I'm glad to do more. In the past, my role-playing was putting myself into someone else's mindset as to understand their life, solve problems, and to get myself to settle down (for the past 10 minutes I've been using it to 'set' my mind as an intellectual as so that my words may be clear and accepted).

-What do you expect this server will be like?: The best one I've ever been on.

-What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: MysticalCraft, still playing as an architectural artist (although it's been down for a while); and ybgames.us.to, banned for accidentally letting a griefer out of a hole/prison (I had believed he fell through the hole in the glass roof, although I am now truly sorry).

-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: Yes I agree and submit to all the laws and rules. As for the Lore, I understand and love the story of the Lore; but I don't know what this 'lore' is, is it just the name of the story or an object?

-Name the 4 races on this server. Human, Elf, Dwarf, Orc.

-How did you hear about us?: Minecraftforum.net searching for servers.

-Did you vote?: Many times, yes.

-What was your favourite Law?: No Griefing.

-What was your least favourite Law?: The non-existent one about having to kill someone to get whitelisted (meaning: "I love and accept them all. None are unnecessary or harsh in any way."

-What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name? MA573rMiND

In-Character:

-Character Name: Brandon

-What is your Race?: Human

-Lordofthecraft.net/forum forum account: www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/user/24650-ma573rmind/

-Biography: {EDITED, 3 times} Brandon was born in a lovely, small village in the heart of the forest wilderness. His mother died soon after childbirth though, she had the plague and was pushing herself to last long enough for him to be born. Luckily the disease hadn't passed on to any of the other family members. The village he lived in might've been small, but everyone knew each other well. Brandon's father raised him until the age of 5, when a group of undead came out of the forest and attacked the little village. He had been told by his father to go to his uncle in the city Oren, where he might be safe. Brandon's father died defending the village later that night and the village had gotten burnt down. Upon reaching Aegis, Brandon asked around for where his uncle lived. As it turned out, his uncle was a swordsmith. Finding him was easy. His uncle raised him from then on, at times a friend and at times a parent. But he trained young Brandon in the ways of the swordsman and Brandon was a willing student. It started with teaching Brandon to make his own sword. He trained day after day, using dummies made of wood. His uncle thought it a nice way to get the wood chopped in the cooler seasons. And when slicing wood dummies became too easy, he would go on short camping trips with his uncle, hunting with his blade. After 5 years of training, at age 12, Brandon knew his sword as well he knew his own arm. It became an extension of his body. Eventually, Brandon was going solo on his own short treks into forests and mountains, memorizing the lay of the land and gathering materials for upgrading his blade. He pledged to himself that with the perfect sword he would one day rid all the land of all its evils. At age 15 he fought a dragon he found while exploring a random forest. It left his eye forever scarred and discolored. Currently, at the young age 16, he has taken over his old uncle's smith, and is spending his spare time ever searching for rumored enchanted and magic materials to remake his rusty old sword into the best blade that ever was. And with it he will kill every undead, every dragon, and every other evil creature.

-Character Age: 16

-Character Appearance: Tough skin, messy brown hair, blade almost always in hand (favors iron), never wearing helmet, strong muscles in small package (meaning not short but that the muscles are only that of the average sword-fighter), he has a scar over his right eye, his right eye is a slightly different color than the other.

-Character Personality: Sober (serious), ambitious, strong spirit, loves adventuring, constantly traveling (and getting lost).

-Your ambitions: Rid the land of evil, preach truth to all the world, and make the world's only perfect enchanted blade.

-Can your character read or write?: He found a friendly traveling scribe upon one of his journeys and decided to join him as a bodyguard, although mostly just for the heck of it. The scribe taught him to read and write until Brandon had enough skills to read a letter and, albeit sloppily, write a decent response.

-Can your character mine?: He gets lost easily, but yes. Although it's more of just using the end of his sword's hilt to smash off bits that stick out in plain view. When he gets the chance he sometimes purchases an iron pick. He prefers starting in the high mountains to gather coal for his smithy, and works his way into the seemingly maze-like caves deep within the Oren mountains. When he gets lost, he may just dig up until he surfaces, then look about 'till he sees the town. This way, even with a terrible sense of direction he is always able to find his way back.

-Are you a capable builder? Brandon rebuilt his uncle's smithy, so yes, he is a fairly decent builder. He'd decided that the old stone structure looked far too old and was too cold in the winter. He build the new shop out of planks, wool floors, a fascinating wood frame in his bedroom, and multiple decorative stones that were too weak or too flawed to be used in smithing.

-Can you wield a sword?: Nothing but. After all, he grew up with one.

-Enjoy Farming?: Never knew it, and not interested enough to try. Although Brandon plants the occasional watermelon when sales get too low.

-Does your character have any special skills? Blademaster, architectural art, as explained previously in the biography and above questions.

-A screenshot of your skin: I have one for this server: and one I use elsewhere:

-Other information: I have an IQ of around 130 and a good facts memory (but a terrible name memory, being why I dislike history class and don't mention any names or places in my char biography). I look forward to being whitelisted as so that I may no longer be a wandering soul but a citizen of the best server ever! Attached is the file for my skin for whenever I role-play. This skin was taken from the official LOTC skins site, although I have edited only the hairline and eyes as well as taken away the hood (if I were able to flip the hood on/off I'd keep it). I also decided to add a sword onto the back, seemed fit as Brandon is never without a blade. The world is from a custom map called 'Through the Gate'

EDIT: I'm sorry for how extremely long this post is, but I am simply answering all the questions on the application form that was posted on LOTC's minecraftforum.net page as well as the tips given in my first denial. I have now read this site's lore page and understand and love it. The skin is also different than the 3rd person picture I posted because I had added a sword to the skin and couldn't retake the photo (due to the world file being deleted).

[Alurid 99]

This is quite a good amount of work! Well done!

[MA573rMiND 0]

*removed*

[MA573rMiND 0]

OK. Now I've edited those links that were cut short.

[Alurid 99]

OK. Now I've edited those links that were cut short.

Ah. Still, wonderful job!

[MA573rMiND 0]

And I should be putting a lot of work into it... I've been a wandering soul for more than a month! I'm the oldest ghost on the server.

[Haldon 72]

Denied

Points to improve:

- First of all, in the first line of your biography you mentioned 'the ring'. This is not a follow-on from the lord of the rings. Please fix this and pay more attention to the lore.

- Aegis is the world. Not a region.

- Please try to keep the rp feel in the biography. Those () were not really nessesary as you can include that information without jumping out of the story.

- Please expand more on those last few questions. Include things such as how and where he learned those skils.

Other notes:

You seem to think that this is a lotr server. It is not.

This server is completely different from that story, with it's own lore an history. Please re-read and pay more attention to the lore.

Also Ansh98, don't comment on other people's applications please.

[MA573rMiND 0]

Sorry. I read the lore on the minecraftforum post and I couldn't tell weather it was a story or an item. Thanks for clarifying, I'll do some research and re-edit later.

Oh, and by the way, not to sound cocky but I've never used a planned method when it comes to short stories. I always develop the story as I go and was hoping to do so by playing. And this Brandon character in my story is one that I've had in my mind for ages, and I find it difficult to just instantly come up with a full background story on the spot for such a person.

Anyway, I'll see what I can do.

EDIT: So I've read the official lore page. I love it! Better yet, I finally understand it! I have re-edited my post.