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[evantheman13 0]

this is not a copy paste application he(iamsparta)told me to add stuff then comment on the post but since it was an application i couldnt so 48 hours later i reposted ok thank you for you time

Minecraft Account Name:

evantheman13

Did you attend minecon and sign up at the LOTC booth?:

No wish i did

How old are you?:

15

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

Louisiana USA I just moved here but I think its central time?

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

Yes I was raised in an English speaking house

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

I always thought low of myself I believe as a form of attention but now I have discovered that I am smart funny sociable and excitable

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

Varies from 10-30 hours

What do you know about Roleplaying? What is it?:

Roleplaying for me Is a second life to do anything. Where you are someone else with their own problems relationship and skills.

In your own Words, describe what Metagaming and Powergaming are.

Metagaming and powergaming are the acts of playing to win and not roleplaying at all or properly

What do you expect this server will be like?:

AN epic world full of endless exploration

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

Lancecraft: Unfair moderation- My own server: Greif

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

Yea

How did you hear about us?:

Forums

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus?

Yes I promise I didn’t see any number please don’t make me wait 24 hours to vote again and find it

What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?:evantheman

In-Character: I want to live not very well decided lets see where aegis takes me

Character Name: Aven

What is your Race?:I am an elf

Biography(This should include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

HISTORY

when I was 7 I was on top of the world whatever I wanted when I want food toys everything and then. . . . . . my parents got divorced my dad was in the army of my village and my mother couldn’t take the unstable life of a soldiers wife so when they got divorced my dad took me due to the fact that she disappeared the day after this was said. so I grew up on the road and fought in battle I learned everything about an army and the wilderness I could single handily march a 100 foot army by age twelve. Also I wasn’t the only child in the army so I had normal teenage years from 13-15 that’s when all the battles started we were attack every day and schooling turn purely into war training I was taught to use a bow since I’m an elf. The humans were taught with a sword orcs and dwarves axes of course this was quiet racist but I liked the bow the most luckily. so when I we had an attack when I was training I was shocked by my ability to kill I had probly killed like 7 people. My father proud for the first time I was so happy I was always referred to as skah killer by all the orcs which apparently my father didn’t approve of. The wars ended when I was 15 a week before my birth day and the day of my birth day was the best day of my life. I was given my first and my first true Elven bow it started out I woke up and was woken by my father saying good morning my young man which I found quiet embarrassing because all my friends were there I then had a party with the best cake every afterwards everyone was sitting around and then a fine soldier with a coat full of metals of valor handed me a golden helm he said my mother sent it to the army base who forwarded it to your father who asked me to present it to you to mark you coming of manhood. . .then my dad said Aven you deserve this handing me a bow with golden details and redwood that appeared to be super compact he said give it a try so I picked it up and fired it went through a small tree I fell silent with excitement the party slowly died down I then went to sleep When I woke up I told my dad that I wish to go back to the home land and learn other skills to better my life he approved and I did the first thing was to learn how to fight with my bow better because I wanted to be strong I went hunting every night I eventually made friends on land and had a good life going for 8 months then I felt it the call for war I tracked down my fathers army and joined the battle again I fought alongside him and was happy until we saw the enemies undead.

Appearance

Dark red hair elven skinny???

Your character walks up to a shop in the middle of Al'Khazar.

"Hello, my good sir!" says the shop owner. "What may I help you with today?" How does your character answer? Ok I don’t have time for this sir what do you have

A screenshot of your skin:

Click link and its the elves alternative outfits =) http://s1095.photobu...an13/MINECRAFT/

Other Information: I am very convincing and clever

I might donate on christmas i was wondering if things like alivar stealing my money will every happen again?

[Haldon 72]

Denied.

Points to improve:

- Pleaes re-do the 'What are metagaming and powergaming?' question. This time write a seperate explination for each, as they are both different things. If you aren't sure what they are then do some reaserch on them. It is important that we all avoid meta and powergaming, and to do that, you must have a clear picture of what they are.

- Your biography could use some more work. I suggest trying to make it more RP-like (for example, try to avoid using phrases such as :

I had probly killed like 7 people. ( the key word here being like. ) et cetera. People in the time period Aegis is in wouldn't speak like that.

- Give a good description of what he looks like, this can include things such as his hair colour his complexion, and even things such as any scars or birthmarks.

- Please put more detail into the scenario at the bottom, explain thing such as how the conversation went, and even what your character was doing during it.

- Your skin link doesn't work. Please fix this.

[Auvreaeath 263]

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