Orc App (Fixed)

[urukaresh 2]

Out-Of-Character:

out of character my name is josh toney i am 15 and still in school and live in Mt.pleasent MI but am an abid player and i love to RP with people even if i tend to slip up every once in awhile (but no ones perfect)

Minecraft Account Name:

urukaresh

Did you attend minecon and sign up at the LOTC booth?:

no

How old are you?:

15

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

us eastern USA

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

yes

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

i love to play minecraft and love to RP.i cant stand people who force me to deal with bad players and bad roleplayers.i cant wait to join the server .

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

5-40 hours a week

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you.:

i know that roleplaying is getting into character and haveing fun with the game. roleplaying to me means that u play not as yourself but as the character ur controling talking and acting like the character would

In your own Words, describe what Metagaming and Powergaming are.

metagameing is useing info gotten ooc and out of game to better yourself or anyone else.power gameing is role playing your character is as not to give someone a choice and forceing them to do something

What do you expect this server will be like?:

i expect it to be a fun and energetic sever with lots of interesting twists and turns

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

i havent played on anyother minecraft severs but i have play RP games before

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

yes

How did you hear about us?:

an old friend

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?

no but i will when i get to play on the sever and see what its like

What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?:

username:peanutx6 display name:urukaresh

In-Character:

in character i am a person who loves to see good RPs and i can tolerate bad RPs somewhat and just play it off but i can only deal with so much

Character Name:

urukaresh

What is your Race?:

orc

Biography(This should include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

urukaresh stands 9 feet tall is green with black hair and 300lbs.he was raise as all orcs are in the fires of combat he was the only one to reach adulthood out of his team of 4 all others were killed or set out into the desert which angered urukaresh made him wonder if the orc needed a new foundation a new leader but he was soon found to be a threat to his village with reason for he is quick tempered and violent when he found he wasthe only one to pass his final test and killed his own parents in a fit of rage earning him exile from that village but he soon joined a mechant caravan and leaned a crude version of the common langauge and soon forgot his orcish langauge but was soon set away for he had been angered by the other gaurd insulting him for his speech and he ripped them all to peices with his bare hands and then accidently smashed the caravan cart and cracked open the skull of the mechants son leaveing him where he is now an orc with an apparent lust for blood with a very good skill with all melee weapons a decent shot with a bow and a semi good shaman bloodline

Your characters ambitions:

to lead his own tribe and take over control of the orc war nation

Out in the Wilds, your character comes across a small cottage. Outside, there appears to be an elf struggling combat with two bandits. What does your character do?

he watches the elf to see if he is strong and worthy of an orc help or if he deserves to die but gets bored and charges head long into the battle axe reigning down blows left and right and then desides if the elf deserves to fall or return to his life and then desides to strike him down for one reason ............ he is an elf.

Your character walks up to a shop in a quiet market. "Hello, my good sir!" says the shop owner. "What may I help you with today?" How does your character answer?

(grunts) "me want shop uruk's axe brake when he smash bone-man's head. uruk need new one with sharper blade"

A screenshot of your skin:

http://www.planetminecraft.com/skin/orc-skin-v2/

Other Information:

please send feed back on anything that needs to be fixed

[James Undercroft 129]

Your application has been:

But don't lose hope! After two days you can re-apply which gives you plenty of time to fix up your application and plan it out, as well as use all the advice I am about to give you to make it spot on. Also check out the links at the bottom of this page, trust me they really help.

This is why:

There is an extreme lack of effort put into this application.

From the usage of the letter "u" in place of the word "you", to the lack of capitilization it just seems me that you do not care to make sure your application looks presentable. If you wish to be taken seriously, please fix this up.

Your definitions for metagaming and powergaming are unclear and require some work.

You need to be a lot more clear with your definitions. Space each one out from the other, add an example and make sure you have the correct definition by matching it up with the one of the wiki (just search for metagaming or powergaming while in the wiki), or join our Team Speak channel and ask around.

Your biography needs a lot of work.

First of all use sentences, do not just use a massive run-on sentence. Add some lore from the lord of the craft wiki such as names of towns, nations and people. Make it realistic and do not add things which do not fit in with the lore of Lord of the Craft.

Your RP questions need a lot of work.

You need to make it realistic. You cannot just run into battle and rain blows everywhere, you need to explain what kind of weapon you are using, which sorts of techniques you use and how the bandits respond. It would also be unlikely that even an orc could defeat two enemies in combat without the help of another. Also you cannot just kill someone for "being an elf" unless you are a villain with an accepted villain application (which you do not have).

Please embed a screenshot of your skin into your application, you can do this by following this tutorial:

1. Go in-game and press the “F5” button TWICE. (Not once as this will show the back of your character)

2. Take a screen shot by pressing the "PrntScr" button on a windows computer or press F2 on the keyboard, then go to start => Run and type in this: %appdata%/.minecraft/screenshots

3. Find the screenshot and open it in an image manipulation program such as Paint or Gimp.4. Crop the image so that only the area close to your skin (including the skin) remains.

5. Save the file and go to tinypic.com

6. Upload the file

7. Click ONCE on the text box underneath: "IMG Code for Forums & Message Boards"

8. Right click and copy the entire text

9. Paste in your new application

*Note* If you want a tutorial for Macs, please send me a message on the forums.

Do not post another application within 2 days or that application will be skipped.

Please do send a PM my way if you are having any trouble understanding the application process or my feedback, I would be glad to help you. :)

Good luck for your next application!

Here is some further reading material that can help you get accepted:

To understand the questions being asked better look here: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/34777-in-depth-analysis-of-the-application-form/

The guide of a Game Master to accepted server applications:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/13144-petyrs-guide-to-accepted-server-applications/

Tips to definitely include on your application:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/19145-tips-to-include-on-your-application/

A must-read guide to the world of aegis:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/9868-an-extensive-guide-to-the-world-of-aegis

How to avoid role-playing as a terrible character:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/27643-how-to-avoid-making-a-mary-suegary-stu/

All the lore of the world of Aegis:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/index.php?title=Main_Page

Information about the skills system:

http://lordofthecraft.net/wiki/index.php?title=Skill_Information

F.A.Q of Application submissions:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/30081-application-submissions-faq-proper-etiquette/

Your second Rp question is

[James Undercroft 129]

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