Second App Vivinci

[Vivinci 0]

Sorry, My character is a semi villain character, and IDK if the colors turned out right....

Minecraft Account Name:Vivinci

How old are you?:16

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:Canada -7:00

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:Yes, currently in advanced english course at my highschool

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:I am a bit of a minecraft nerd, but not obsessive. I spend most of my time chasing my dog away from various morcels of forbidden treats. I am a competitive swimmer as well as I march in a World Class Marching showband. I own my own server as well, if you want to see it for proof, the ip is 208.122.48.50:25580 (not recruiting, only for proof)

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:Once a day, but might miss a few. At least 4-5 a week

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: I know how to do it, I am in drama, but i don't normally do much on minecraft, so I'd like to try it out

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: Not much, just IRL drama

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:More or less, thwarting the games system, using external aides, etc. Like coming out of roleplay extensively in order to win, IE a weak mage owning everything like a tank. Or poking someone in ts *Edit forgot to edit this part* Escaping the game, finding different ways to play the game, playing a game within a game sort of. One of those nasty terms to explain. finding ways to beat the system?

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is:Progress over Roleplay, kinda like mob grinding

What do you expect this server will be like?:Good roleplay, good fun, but also a chance to use my pvp skills, I play on alot of pvp servers, my server is pvp, so I'm pretty deadly

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I own my own, played on battlecraft for a while, but its numbers are going down. not spending much time on that server, tried out for herocraft but didnt like it as much

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yessir

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules: YEssir

How did you hear about us?: Friends really

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?: yes and 973 i think

In-Character:

Character Name: Vivinci (Just to keep it simple, i like that name)

What Race are you?:Elf

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

I am a hunter simply put, I am never at home without a bow and arrow. I feel contained below ground, so i spend most of my time up in the trees. I care not for lives of petty humans, orcs or dwarves. They might just be a source of money. I feel i am destined to become a ruler, not of a kingdom, but of a group of warriors. I can not wait for others to fear me.

I grew up in a small village, i dont remember it very much. All i know is that as a child i had floated down a river, and found myself on a river bank. From there, I just lived. I learned to be strong, to be tough, to not take anything from anyone. I lived like such untill the ripe age of about 1000 years oldish. I say oldish because i do not actually know how old i am, but for the hell of it, i was 1001 years old at the time. But anyways, i had build my first house, way up in a jungle tree, and it progressed into a procession of different houses. I dont know much of what else i can add, i am a bit of an economist, i wont go all out, but i enjoy luxury. I need windows in my houses, thats a must. I enjoy houses which are high up and near rivers. I am not completely involved in the military.

I currently take Assasination jobs for hire at the moment.

What is your Character's ambitions?:To be the leader of a group of archers

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):Bow/axe

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?Archery, leadership

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format): http://i42.tinypic.com/15dsb3m.png I hope that works

Other Information about your Character: Very straight forward, ruthless, but with a softer size

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond? Meh... Its a halfling, might decide to grab the money from the warriors though, depends what they have on them. Leave the halfling be. If i decided on the whim to attack the guards, i would eliminate one by distance, rush forwards and attack the other with an axe/sword. The halfling, presuming half elf half human, is neutral to me.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

Hmm... Here is a tricky one... "Show me to your collection of forestry supplies" Here it could get complicated, really depends on the mood i was in at the time, plus whether or not the area was protected or not. If i could, i would shoot them as soon as we were alone, but, since its a city, im 99% sure it'd be protected, so if theres something that appeals to me, i'd buy it

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

Loot is loot i guess, but then again this person might just be beginning, like myself, so i'd leave it. however, if i had to actually go through a "trial" to get the items, or if it was a richer person, i would probably take it. See, not all ruthless am i?

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

first, i would normally not let myself into such a situation unless i could help it. As well, it really just depends on who, and what they had. Orcs especially, i would steal from them, or especially be wary. I do realise however that unless i have a good sniping position i can not take down a full camp of people, so i would have to be stubborn. Unless by then i had assembled my small group of archers at the time

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

Depends, do i really feel an affinity to the town? If its one that i truly like, i pity the poor bandits. But normally, me+cities dont get along well, so chances are i would slip out of town with my belongings and join the bandits, maybe make a bit of loot out of it.

[James Undercroft 129]

Your application has been:

Denied

Do not worry though; this does not mean you cannot apply again, quite the contrary! After 24 hours you may apply again which gives you plenty of time to fix up your application, plan it out as well as use all of this advice which I have given you in this post to make your application one of the best. Please check the links at the bottom of this post, they will help you quite a bit.

You have been denied because:

Your definition for roleplaying is a little too short and unclear.

Roleplaying is far more than just a drama class, there is so much more to it. I want you to do some research on what roleplaying is, then write what it means to you.

Your definition of metagaming is incorrect.

You seem to have a couple of definitions all merged into one there, and a few of them are half right.

I would suggest starting over with your definition. Get a clean slate and do some more research on the subject. I suggest joining our Team Speak channel, googling the subject or looking on our wiki (Pro Tip: the last one I said is probably the best).

Your definition of powergaming is incorrect.

First if all it is rather short, secondly it is incorrect. I suggest reading my feedback for metagaming, as it is applicable for both metagaming and powergaming.

You need to re-write your biography.

At the moment it is sloppy, and doesn't contain much story other than you grew up in a village, and then you floated down a stream. The rest doesn't add anything to your story.

Re-write your story adding a lot about your characters past, its personality and description.

You cannot be an "assassin for hire" as that would require a villain application, something you can only get after being accepted for around a month or so.

You need to write more for the favourite tool/best skill questions.

At the moment all you have written is about a word or two, what is required is about two sentences detailing what you have selected and why.

You need to embedd the screenshot of your skin.

Please embed your screenshot into your application. While this may take an extra few minutes, what is a few minutes to the countless hours you could potentially spend on this server! It is so easy too. Here is how it is done...

1.Go to the link you have provided (you have given an ample screenshot, so we shall skip the "Getting the image" and "Uploading it" phases) and right click on the image, select "Copy Image Location"

2.Go to your new application and select "Insert Image". It should have the icon of a little tree in a photoframe, and will be next to the "Inset Link" button, and underneath the "Text Color" button.

3.Paste into the textbox (as you have copied the image's location).

4.Select "Insert Image" and voilà! You are done.

You need to re-write the open response answers.

You need to presume you are your character and you are in the situation happening as you detail your characters actions and thought processes.

I think you also need to learn "how to use these quotation marks", as they denote speach.

Please wait 24 hours or your application will be instantly denied.

This gives you a chance to have a cup of tea and read all of which I have provided, then give you a break and a fresh mind to re-write your application in the required areas.

Please do send a PM my way if you are having any trouble understanding the application process or my feedback, I would be glad to help you. :)

Good luck for your next application!

Here is some further reading material that can help you get accepted:

(Please do note, some of these may not be updated as of now, and rest assured I am working on getting newer links :) )

To understand the questions being asked better look here: <--- As if I wouldn't keep my own post updated ^_^

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/34777-in-depth-analysis-of-the-application-form/

The guide of a Game Master to accepted server applications: <--- Still as awesome as ever

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/13144-petyrs-guide-to-accepted-server-applications/

Tips to definitely include on your application: <--- A little outdated

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/19145-tips-to-include-on-your-application/

A must-read guide to the world of aegis: <--- Outdated

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/9868-an-extensive-guide-to-the-world-of-aegis

How to avoid role-playing as a terrible character: <-- Always applicable :)

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/27643-how-to-avoid-making-a-mary-suegary-stu/

All the lore of the world of Aegis and Asulon: <---- Mostly Updated

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/

Information about the skills system: <---- Not yet created

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/wikka.php?wakka=Skill_Information

F.A.Q of Application submissions: <-- Updated

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/30081-application-submissions-faq-proper-etiquette/

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum