My Applicaton, 4Th.

xi0n · March 9, 2012

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name:

xi0n

How old are you?:

15

Country of Residence:

Israel.

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

I guess so, :D

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

My name is Segev, i'm 15 years old guy from ISR.

I'm a social person, friendly person, and absolutely loves to help people.

My hobbies are : Football, computer games, basketball, swimming in the pool :D

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

Weekly?

Honestly, around 15 hours.

I'd be able to play around 2 hours per day, roughly.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:

Well, roleplaying is to play as much as realistic you can, IN Game. ( ICLY,OOCLY aswell.)

Its just to play in a "virtual life".,

You are able to create your own character personality, to pretend that you are a drawf, human, blacksmith, such.... in a computer game.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:

I am playing in some SA-MP Roleplay servers, so I have experience.

I assume I know the rules perfect. ( PG, MG... )

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:

MetaGame is using OOC information IC. This is a rule breaking, which is not tolerated and forbidden. Basically, you find out In Character information by Out Of Character actions , such as talking in skype, with your friends whilst being in game, which is forbidden.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is:

Power Game is to use over-powered actions against another players witout letting them to response.

e.g, *extends his right arm and throwing his sword over towards XXX's head, killing him instantly.*- This leaves the player without any choice to do, absolutely unfair action.

What do you expect this server will be like?:

I expect this server to be a serious one which i'll be happy that I registered to here and I won't regret, I hope I won't.

As I can see, this is a serious server, funny one, and i'll be glad to be a part of it.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

Minecraft servers?

I haven't played in many RP servers, only one time which was my server, played with some friends.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

Yes, absolutely yes.

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:

Yes, I do.

How did you hear about us?:

Heared from "Los Santos Role Play" Community, in the "other games" section.

Some people recommended this server, so i'd like to check it by myself.

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?:

I guess, I google searched it and voted, will continue to vote.

In-Character:

Character Name:

Paul Barton

What Race are you?:

Human

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

N/A

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

Hello, my name is Paul Barton and i'm 26 years old.

I was born and raised in a middle village, to Ilana and Moti.

Since my father worked 12 hours a day as a blacksmith, my mother raised me alone.

We were a normally family, we weren't rich, although we weren't poor.

I have only one brother which is Alon, Alon is younger than me, he's only fourteen.

When I was twelve, Alon was born, he was so cute, we both were the most of the time in our house.

After four years, when I was sixteen, my father died.

My childhood affected alot during this situation, I became to be a closer boy.

My mother registered me to a high-school, the only one in our village.

She worked very hard to afford my high-school tuition,

Immediately upon graduating the high school, I met some new friends, I was eighteen already.

Now, i'm absolutely ready to learn how to be a blacksmith, same as my father was.

I want to keep his dream, to be a famous blacksmith, not only in our village.

I hope i'll wish this dream, i'm fully charged to do that.

What is your Character's ambitions?:

My ambitions are to be a famous blacksmith,

All over the country, so I can afford my family, and raise my childs normally.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):

Pickaxe and shovel are my favorite tools, Paul likes to find some new treasures.

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?

Smithing, same as my father skills.

Before he died, he teached me some new skills, such as how to smith.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):

Other Information about your Character:

My character has a red t-shirt, sharp and blue eyes, blue jeans and tan slacks.

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

Paul would stare at the warriors sharply, as he has a sadly facial expression on his face, mumbling to himself.

"****, a robbery - i've nothing to do, i'm unarmed!."

As his conscience disturbing him, that he didn't help the guy.

Keep walking in his way, getting out of the temple.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

Paul would try to develop a conversation, in attention to get some discounts.

Paul : "Grettings merchant, do you have any discounts today?"

Merchant : "I guess so, only 7 gold ingots for a kind of a special shovel, mhm."

Paul : "Wow, sounds great, may I see it?."

Merchant : "Sure buddy, sure. *slowly bends down over the bar, snatches the shovel as he holding it tightly, tossesing it over towards Paul, smirking.* -

Here it is, buddy, take a look."

Paul : "This shovel seems to be a great one, I would like to purchase it."

Merchant : "Great! pass me the money, sir."

....

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

Paul would strade slowly towards the chest, searching for any signs if there is anyone who lives in the hut, if he couldn't see anyone, he would pick it up and keep walk in his way.

"Wow, what a good day, rich guy!"

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

"Finally som..*coughs several times into his palm, sniffing.* - some people, mhm."

"C..can you help me to get some food?

I'll pay any amount of money, juss... just give me some food."

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

Paul would not help them since he isn't practiced how to attack properly.

Paul would run into a bush, hiding from the scene, glaring at the fight.

After a minute roughly, mumbling loudly to himself :

"Its not my place to interfere, it'll be better if I will hide."

James Undercroft · March 9, 2012

Your application has been:

Denied

Do not worry though; this does not mean you cannot apply again, quite the contrary! After 24 hours you may apply again which gives you plenty of time to fix up your application, plan it out as well as use all of this advice which I have given you in this post to make your application one of the best. Please check the links at the bottom of this post, they will help you quite a bit.

You have been denied because:

Your application in general lacked information.

Just add a bit more to everything, there is always more you can write to make your application more detailed and more pleasant to read.

You did not include your vote number, thus we cannot know that you have voted.

Please make sure you have voted as it is a requirement to join the server. The link to the website is here: http://www.minestatus.net/6317-the-lord-of-the-craft/vote

To find your vote number look at the total number of votes for this server, because you were the latest to vote, this number is your vote number. If you do not want to vote because you don’t know if the server is worth your vote or not, have a look at some videos, look around the forms and ask around on Team Speak, if you do not like what you see/hear don’t vote and don’t join.

Your biography needs to be re-written.

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

Note the bolded areas.

What you have written currently is a summary of events, and is not a "biography". Note that the definition of a biography according to dictionary.com is "

bi·og·ra·phy [bahy-og-ruh-fee, bee-]

noun,

a written account of another person's life: the biography of Byron by Marchand. "

It is a "written account", in other words a story. You need to make it flow like a story, develop your character, explain the scene.

I reccomend that you read a book or two before engaging in writing this biography once more, so you can get a good feel of what it means to write one. I can also reccomend that you read other people's biographies.

You have not included your characters description nor his personality; you need to rectify this.

Your character's skin does not fit our server.

We do not wear "T-Shirts", Jeans or Slacks. Try to find a more "medieval" type skin.

All of your open response questions need improvement.

Write a paragraph for each, not just a couple of "dot points". Also the style needs changing, instead of "John would not help them, as he is not apt at combat." write "John stands back from the crowd of people, blinking and muttering to himself. 'I can't help them, damnit... I am not use in a fight.' He taps his feet in the ground, looking for anyone he knows..."

See the difference?

Please wait 24 hours or your application will be instantly denied.

This gives you a chance to have a cup of tea and read all of which I have provided, then give you a break and a fresh mind to re-write your application in the required areas.

Please do send a PM my way if you are having any trouble understanding the application process or my feedback, I would be glad to help you. :)

Good luck for your next application!

Here is some further reading material that can help you get accepted:

(Please do note, some of these may not be updated as of now, and rest assured I am working on getting newer links :) )

To understand the questions being asked better look here: <--- As if I wouldn't keep my own post updated ^_^

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/34777-in-depth-analysis-of-the-application-form/

The guide of a Game Master to accepted server applications: <--- Still as awesome as ever

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/13144-petyrs-guide-to-accepted-server-applications/

Tips to definitely include on your application: <--- A little outdated

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/19145-tips-to-include-on-your-application/

A must-read guide to the world of aegis: <--- Outdated

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/9868-an-extensive-guide-to-the-world-of-aegis