Skulldood2's Application

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Minecraft Account Name:skulldood

How old are you?:I am 14

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:United states eastern Pacific time.

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:I have fairly good grammar. My first and only language is English.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:I am a fun loving boy.I like to be friendly and have a good time.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: 25-30 Hours.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:Roleplaying is like beginning a new and exiting life doing things that you couldn't even imagine in reality.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:My friends and I have role-played about random things. I also roleplay online.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:Using Knowledge you gained Out of Character (OOC) In Character (IC)information. To your own benefit.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is:Forcing your or another character to do something/Overpowering a character.

What do you expect this server will be like?: I expect it to be a vast server with many people that stay in character and love roleplaying as much as i do.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I have played on spookycraft and a2z they are my main servers i did not leave them i just enjoy playing on other servers.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: On my Honor

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules: Without a doubt

How did you hear about us?:I was looking on youtube for large Rpg servers.

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?:no

In-Character:

Character Name:Blade Goldrim

What Race are you?:Human

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.): I am Blade Goldrim, I am the age of 24.I was of 6 years old when I stumbled across a cave. I entered the cave and found a mighty sword. The moment I touched the sword and I felt unimaginable magic powers and abilities flow into me.One day coming home from farming at the age of 9 I saw my parents home Being burned down to the ground by a horde of Bandits My mother was be-headed while my father was hung in front of my own eyes I heard screaming and then a loud bang only to realize it was me who was screaming and causing the banging the sword i had found years ago appeared in my hand then there was a flash of bright light. About a day later i awoke in a crater with strange clothes on which seemed to have magic ability and the sword about a feet away from me. From then on i new my destiny was to defend the weak and helpless with my trusty sword who i have come to name LightRim. My appearance is a hooded cloak i have dark blonde hair i wear Armour under my white cloak at all times prepared for battle i am white. My personality includes A strong and fearless fighter who would pay any price to defend his love ones. But when not in battle or danger i have a friendly appealing attitude.

What is your Character's ambitions?: My characters ambitions is to make many friends and travel all across the land protecting the weak and slaying evil.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc): Blade's Favorite tool is his magic sword who he is unable to part with named LightRim

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?: My character is most skilled in hand to hand combat magic and agility.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):http://i1270.photobu...01035338526.png

Other Information about your Character:~~

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?: I would Jump into the battle defeat the warriors, get what was taken from the hafling and offer any help he/she might need.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?: I respond with "Im fine, And you?" and Wait for his response and see what he wants me interested in.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?: I do not touch the chest and i immediately leave the abandoned property.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?: I greet them back and politely ask for a little food.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?: I deny the reward and offer my assistance freely for good is its own reward.

[Thu'um 530]

Please reapply in 24 hours.

Your application was denied for:

- Your Application has a Weird Format

I'm not denying you for this, however try to fix your formatting on your application next time, as it is kind of hard to read as everything is blue.

- Your character cannot be skilled at Magic right away.

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?: My character is most skilled in hand to hand combat magic and agility.

In order to become a skilled, well-rounded mage, you must learn from a GM-Approved mage or be part of the mage guild. Also, you must know how to properly roleplay a mage, some of that might be--

1.) Mages when they cast spells have a certain repercussion when they cast a specific spell, or else they once again are powergaming.

2.) Mages take months to learn their abilities

3.) The problem we experience with most new characters trying to be a mage is that they powergame or perhaps they overpower their character, creating unfair roleplay for others.

4.) Combat Magic is very hard to be taught, as most new mages these days start off being healers.

I'd suggest having your character being something else then a mage-- You could write in your biography or character's ambitions that your character is an aspiring mage and wishes to learn magic, but they cannot be a mage right off the bat.

- Your Open Response Questions lack Detail and Effort.

Some of your ORQ's (Seen below) only have about one sentence or more. Try to expand these, and show us what your character does in the predefined scenarios, how he would react, -- have fun with it, experiment with your character and try to show his personality thru your responses.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?: I do not touch the chest and i immediately leave the abandoned property.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?: I greet them back and politely ask for a little food.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?: I deny the reward and offer my assistance freely for good is its own reward.

- Your Biography needs work and is very strange.

I had a hard time following your biography. Below I have responded to some of the occurrences or events that you described in it.

The moment I touched the sword and I felt unimaginable magic powers and abilities flow into me.

If you're trying to be a mage, there is no way your character would learn it this way. This is a slight hint that your character is some 'all-powerful' mage, which is not going to happen.

One day coming home from farming at the age of 9 I saw my parents home Being burned down to the ground by a horde of Bandits My mother was be-headed while my father was hung in front of my own eyes I heard screaming and then a loud bang only to realize it was me who was screaming and causing the banging the sword i had found years ago appeared in my hand then there was a flash of bright light

This the classic unoriginal story of your parents being killed by bandits, please make it more original -- be creative and incorporate concepts that reflect your character's abilities and personality.

My personality includes A strong and fearless fighter who would pay any price to defend his love ones.

Your character's personality would not be strong, or fearless.

About a day later i awoke in a crater with strange clothes on which seemed to have magic ability and the sword about a feet away from me.

It seems almost as if your biography were a Cinderella story of unheard of powerful qualities. Your character can not be an all-powerful mage who destroys everything in his path and kills his enemy with one swipe of a blade. You need to redo your biography, as it has some flaws.

~~ If you need help, do not hesitate to send me a private message. ~~

[Thu'um 530]

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