Cookie_Slap's Application Third Try

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Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name:

cookie_slap

How old are you?:

13, 14 in November

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

Paignton, united kingdom, +0 GMT

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

yes.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

I am kind and i try to be funny. I really enjoy MMOs and RPGs. I LOVE to roleplay and have power over people.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

0-50 hours

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:

Roleplaying is where you lose yourself in playing a different character which is made up by you and is played by you. It is wonderful.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:

I've played on small servers that do a bit of roleplaying and i've done roleplaying forum chats.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:

Meta gaming is where you take info that you found out IRL, say someone said i can get a free sword in a chatroom then i used this info ingame to my advantage by going the to get a free sword, when my ingame character wouldn't of known i could get it.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is:

Power gaming is basicaly where you take control of the game and steer what you are doing to what you want for example: Bill:Stop theif. Jack:*throws a punch a Bll*. Bill: *catchs the punch, crushing Jack's hand, sending him to the ground.He then keeps him pinned while the guards come*.

What do you expect this server will be like?:

I expect it will be friendly and fun to play on, with allot of people who actually want to play and not mess around.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

i've played on servers like imdeity and RPGminecraft but i left them because it is the same a normal minecraft and just gets boring.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

yes.

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:

Yes, i promise to abide by the rules for everything.

How did you hear about us?:

I saw a video on YouTube where you talked about guards that can be bribed and mounts then i saw you highly rated on server lists.

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?:Yes-

my first app

my second app

Have you posted this application on our minecraft forum thread yet? If not, just finish it up on here and then copy + paste is over there. (http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-%E2%96%91%E2%96%92%E2%96%93-the-lord-of-the-craft-%E2%96%93%E2%96%92%E2%96%91-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r/):

No, but i will.

In-Character:

Character Name:

Zancicous Sabretooth

What Race are you?:

Orc

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

Nomad Orc

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

My character is a tall, not to fat Orc. He LOVES to fight, drink and ruin people's lives. He has thick, rough, green skin that arrows can barely penetrate and that fists merely bounce off. He has a think leather hide tide around his body hiding the 'sensitive' places.His favorite thing to do is kill, doesnt matter what it is.now to the more history side,When he was a young cub his parents didn't like him too much and liked his sister, Percerpia sabretooth more,which made his life difficult because his parents never helped him.He was glad that when he was strong enough,about 7,he could move out and survive in the wilderness.this contributed to the fact he likes nature and knows quite abit about survival. At the age of twelve he met an explorer who he liked, as he didn't understand how perfetic humans were until later, and this explorer taught him abit about redstone. At 15 he traveled back to the Orc ugz and learnt about history, like how the Dwarves used to be enemys with the Orc and how humans are perfetic. He regrets making friends with that human a bit and despises of Orcs who live with the Humans. Now he is eighteen and is ready to continue his journey through life.

"Ug me nam be Zancicous ut yu can name mi Zan. Wen i be smal i be cuby an wek but nou i be mity an tal. But stil al da fites i winned!Dat be wen i were wek, nou i be master at kiling wit me fists.I be ousin fist gooder dan sord!Me perent be ot in da wurld.Me? i be wit da rex. Maybe Zan be wargoth wun day! I be Wargoth den i wil kil ol da umans wue com ner me."

What is your Character's ambitions?:

He would like to rule over some Orcs.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):

"Me tul is me fist i kil wit me fist i is Nomad."

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?

It is an impressive sight when he beats up a giant with his fists, while drinking some fine ale.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):

Other Information about your Character:

nothing other than the fact that he values cookies allot

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

Zancicous walks slowly up to the warriors and punchs one with his great fist,nocking him away, before grabbling the other one giving the halfling a chance to run."Hey! What did you do that for he has the jewles!" The warrior would respond angryly. "o,i be reely sori." He would mumble before paying 1000000 minas so they could buy new jewles.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

Zan would slowly turn his head towards the table to see what the merchant has on offer "o,o, da cookie!" He would exclaim loudly, with his eyes burning brightly with joy,"ou mut or da cookie?". "20 minas." the merchant would reply. Zan would ****** 4 up throwing 83 minas at the man before running away cradling the cookies in his arms."cep da sper minas."

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

Hmm. Zan would think."i hav nup eus or da sord,i cood av a it o irn."He would mumble to himself before taking half of the iron. As he turns around he finds himself staring at a small elven warrior who is pointing a sword at his head. "Put the iron down mr." "yup yup alrite." Zan would say before quickly kicking the elf away and sprinting for his life. "Hey come back 'ere!" he could here the elf shouting but he wouldn't stop untill he got back to the ugz.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

As he was tired his speech was worse than usual,"ive e da ood an ater, i eed ed wel!"He would bark at the villagers while they stood confused at him, trying to work out what he said. Zancicous stepped forward, the villagers stepped back. Looking at them closely he picked up a piece of bread and took a bite. Although it was stale Zan's teeth easily sliced it. He then took a deep breath at muttered "W-W-w or t or?" one of the villagers stepped forwards handed him a bottle before stepping quickly back again. Zan took a swig then passed the bottle back before carrying on to look for a town or inn. "enk ue" he shouted over his shoulder.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

upon hearing this he would smile,"i be good fiter i kil goodly." The leader, making out what he said would smile and offer a sword."Nup, i gooder wit me fists." "Ok the leader would reply before sending him of into a room where he could rest before tomorrow,which is when the fight would take place. At the first sign of sunlight they set off to the camp when they got there they found the bandits had fled overnight. "Well then,"said the leader," guess they've gone, thanks for the help by the way."with that he turned around just to feel a hand grab his head and spin him to look a the Orc, Zan brought the leader to his face. "pey,nou."Zan demanded. "Ok,ok here."The leader squirmed pushing 50 mina into Zans hand,"now drop me." Zan did that and set of to look for something else to do.

[James Undercroft 129]

I am very sorry, but your application has been moved to the denied section of the forums. There are numerous reasons for this, all of which I have included in my feedback below this message. In the mean time there is an abundant source of information, stories, guides and other helpful tips to get you on your way to being accepted; all you need to do is look around. I would suggest the lord of the craft wiki and application submissions section of the forums to start off your little quest to make the best application. Good luck!

The sections that need improvement are:

Roleplaying is where you lose yourself in playing a different character which is made up by you and is played by you. It is wonderful.

Currently you have a one sentence definition. I would like you to go into much greater detail as to what roleplaying is.

I've played on small servers that do a bit of roleplaying and i've done roleplaying forum chats.

Again this is rather small, please expand on this. What type of roleplaying was it? How long ago? Etc. Get a bit more specific.

Your biography has a lot of errors.

I feel you are lacking knowledge on the orcs. While what you know is mostly correct, you have some information which contradicts that of Orcish lore. Orcs are one of the most complex races to play, and as such have a lot of material to learn from. I would start with this link: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/24133-orc-important-threads/

You have not included any (or much) lore from the world of Asulon or the lore you did include contradicts that of Asulon. I recommend that you do a lot of research as to what you race is and how they act, as well as towns and places that you could use in your biography. I would also like to note that the entire server escaped from Aegis about 25 in game years ago to move to Asulon, I suggest you do some research on this point. Do note this is not Skyrim or Lord of the Rings, we have our own universe with our own races. For ideas and lore you can look on the Lord of the Craft wiki (link on the main page), the Role-play or History sections of the forums or better yet; talk to the people themselves. Just join in our Team Speak channel and ask around! We welcome new people :)

You need to complete the entire biography, detailing all your characters history, age, personality and description. We also like to see little role-play quirks such as habits like the constant brushing back of a fringe, or the scratching of an itchy palm.

Every single thing in your application must have a justification. For example:

John’s father taught him swordsman ship and the lay of the land. X BAD

John’s father was a retired swordsman in the Oren military, after the undead attacks and the moving to Asulon he decided it was time that he lay down the sword for more important matters, family. Now days John’s father teaches John the way of the sword, not so that he can join any particular military, but so that he can defend himself for future experiences to come.

√GOOD

Your ambitions are underdeveloped.

You need to show some advanced thought processes. What would your character like to do in the near and distant futures? What is your character planning? You also need to justify your decisions. Why does your character want to do this? Things such as planning to kill all bandits, orcs, humans etc. are unacceptable ambitions as this would require a villainous activity.

"Me tul is me fist i kil wit me fist i is Nomad."

There is a bit of language which you do not yet understand, but you'll get the hang of it eventually. Here is an orcish dictonary: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/13396-orc-dictionary/

While I do like the fact you answered IC for this question, I would like to see as well an OOC answer. So something along the lines of:

"A quote from your character ICly here."

A detailed description here.

You need to remember: You need to justify why you have chosen the choices you have. It is all well and good that your character can run really fast, or is light on their feet; but why?

Zancicous walks slowly up to the warriors and punchs one with his great fist,nocking him away, before grabbling the other one giving the halfling a chance to run."Hey! What did you do that for he has the jewles!" The warrior would respond angryly. "o,i be reely sori." He would mumble before paying 1000000 minas so they could buy new jewles.

Not only is this unrealistic (which I shall explain in further detail later one), but it is a very immature answer. We only want mature and responsible people on this server. Those who prove otherwise are either banned or prevented from joining the server. Please keep this in mind when creating your answers to the applications.

You powergamed and godmodded. One does not simply kill bandits. You need to write some REALISTIC rp. Chances are these bandits will kill YOU/knock YOU unconscious. Bandits are players and are very powerful characters. If you are by yourself in-game and you try to just kill bandits you will be banned for no-rp killing (read the rules) or at the very least completely destroyed by the bandits whom have had a lot of combat experience since they are BANDITS. We encourage RP pvp on this server, which means each party will demonstrate their actions through emotes. When responding to this situation you need to write DETAILED and DESCRIPTIVE responses. This means no "slices through the bandits neck" but write what your character aimed for, how much force he put in, what weapon he was using, how the bandits responded, what tools they are using, how they used them, how they blocked/parried/dodged, their skills and abilities. You have so much to write, this is what we expect of you.

This is the BEST roleplaying minecrat server and as such you need to be on par with the rest of the server in terms of RP skill. Those who display sub-standard RP skills should not be allowed onto the server lest they make everyone else's minecraft experience bad.

I did like your answers to the rest of your questions however. Some were quite funny ^_^

If you have any questions about my feedback, or would like to create some constructive criticism about the way I give feedback (I.E am I being TOO blunt, or am I coming across rude) then please send me a message! I take all questions, none are stupid! :) You are not allowed to apply again for a full 24 hours.

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum