My First App

[BurntToast74 183]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name: burnttoast74

How old are you?: 14 years old

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Central time United States.

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

Yea i do very well in language arts, i am sure i have a good grip on my grammar.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a fan of any Lord of the rings game. I read all the lord of the rings books, also seen the movies a ton of times, i love the guitar and drums. I am also a Christian. My favorite game is Minecraft, but i'm looking for a good server for it, and this looks like a fun server, i seen it on youtube.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: I play a lot of Minecraft, and if this is a good server i will be on this server all the time. Monday: 3-4 hours

Tuesday: 3-4 hours

Wednesday : 1-3 hours

Thursday: 4-5 hours

Friday: 2-3 hours

Saturday: 5-6 hours

Sunday: 2-3 hours

About 24 hours all together.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: I know a lot about role playing, I know that roleplaying is about being your own character that you made up, you have to do everything that character would do, if you did anything besides that would be very unusual, people would think it would be you, because your supposed to on a roleplaying server to act like your own player, or person.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is: Meta-Gaming

is when you take information form the outside world and put inside the game, as in putting the information in your Rolplaying Character. Say that i get attacked by villains, then they kill me If i went to that same place and that i knew that they just attacked me, and if i went to go attack them i would be Meta-gaming, because i took information from outside world and put it in the game.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is: Power-Gaming is when you do something to a player without letting them to react to the action that you just did. For instance, lets say i attack someone without letting them give a reason for why they should be killing.

What do you expect this server will be like?: I think that Lord Of The Craft will be all for Roleplaying, and have good fair Admins. Lord of the craft seems it will be against Power-Gaming and Meta-Gmaing.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I played on a server called Battlecraft it was a Faction and Roleplaying server, the rules were not as tight as i wanted, there were to many people who would power game, even thought that it said on the rules that there is no power gaming allowed, so i left the server ,because i just kept getting power gamed.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes i looked at the rules very carefully.

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules: Yes i indeed trust the rules.

How did you hear about us?: I herd about this server from petrythegamernerds channel, on youtube.

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?: No i have not build any other app.

In-Character:

Character Name: Ronald_Fitz jr.

What Race are you?: Dwarf

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race): None

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.): Ronald_Fitz jr. a 52 year old dwarf that does not mine as much as his father does, people think of Ronald father as the hero who created mining ever since Ronald was a boy he has been working in farms, while his father stirred attention , about his mining skills. Ronald has 3 older brothers that are charming, warriors and least of all highly respected miners.

When ronald was a child he was working in the fields, and also hunting animals.

Although Ronald seems like a wimp, he's been the one that is the most popular and the person, everyone thinks is the party man, and the guy who saves, he is also a great warrior who has accompanied the kings knights through very dangerous roads infested by mobs. He's been a very respected person in his town. He is a very clever person who thinks of ways to get friends and family out of trouble. He wants to go out and help more then what he has, he wants to start help the government, he wants to be a leader, but his father is very depressed because his mother just died, so does not want to worry his father in becoming a leader, because his father hates being involved in government, so Ronald has been look for new places to live.

What is your Character's ambitions?: Ronald's ambitions are to become a leader, get a large house and grow a farm on the property, he wants to make new friends and become a highly respected person in the town.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc): Ronald's favorite tool is by far his hoe, still h never goes anywhere without his pickaxe, its his extinct to have his pickaxe near him at all times.

color="#00BFFF"]What is one of your Character's most skilled talents? Ronald's most skilled talents is his digging, but most of all his most skilled is his farming.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format): sorry i tried will this do.http://www.minecraftskins.info/viking.html

Other Information about your Character: Ronald's Mother died so he is a bit depressed because of that. Ronald has no intentions of hurting innocent people he wants to help those in need of help.

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

*Ronald comes out of the temple and sees the hobbit.

* Ronald puts his hand on his pickaxe,

"whats the meaning of this!"

" None of your business" The warrior saids.

" Its definitely apart of my business!" Ronald saids

* Ronald pulls his pickaxe and lunges it at the warrior head, his head gets stuck to the pickaxe, and his head falls off his neck.

* The other warrior right away runs.

" go hobbit next time go in groups and with your own kind.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

* Ronald walks up to the merchant.

* The merchant smiles and ronald smiles back with his scruffy beard.

" 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" The merchant saids.

" Immm looking for hoe repairs do you sir have any recommendation's good fella?" Ronald saids.

"sorry but umm i am not sure. The Man saids.

" thats fine mate, but err i will pay you if you know were they are?" Ronald saids.

" O, sorry did you say repairs there that way." the man saids.

* The man points to a path.

"why so kind of you." Ronald saids.

* Ronald fake smiles at the man, then put the money on his stand.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

* Ronald walks in to the house spots the ingots, and the sword.

*Ronald thinks for a minute.

* Then Ronald thinks of the law, and that you can take a good amount ,but not all of it in the chest.

* Ronald takes a bar of iron , then leaves.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

*Ronald walks up and glimpses for a bit of pork or bread.

* Ronald in the background he sees a little chunk of bread.

* He asks in a polite voice "can i please have that chunk of bread there.

* Ronald points to it.

"imm very veairy hungry." Ronald saids.

"uhhhh fine, take this."

* Ronald takes the bread then saids" thanks for your kindness."

*Then Ronald runs off, finds a place to eat, the bread and then eats it.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

*Ronald thinks to himself and remembers his goal of becoming a well respected.

*Ronald goes to the barracks and sigs up for the ordeal.

*Ronald meats up with the men, and introduces himself to them.

*One of the guards talks about getting the money, he saids. "Man i hope we getin our do on this money here."

* After hearing about the money , Ronald thinks of the things he can do with a good pay, he can make a bigger farm and he cant save up to get his dream house.

* During the fight Ronald fight for the money, and at the end gets the reward he's been waiting for.

[Brokencrowe 111]

Denied.

The application feels somewhat rushed. The grammar, spelling and word choices in some areas can be improved upon heavily.

Your definition of roleplaying leaves me slightly confused, I think I know what you mean, but more clarity would be much appreciated.

Your definition of power-gaming can certainly be expanded upon.

Your biography is mixed, and leaves me again slightly confused, you weren't very clear about certain events, and ideas about your character. You could also certainly add a bit of lore-based material into it.

Your open response questions albeit written in full roleplay, lack a certain amount of realism. You seem to be a bit over powered in the first one, and hobbits do not exist in Lord of the Craft. You can also improve upon the grammatical and spelling aspects here, as well. Your open response questions could do with some expansion as well.

You seem to be on the right track. Good job so far, we just need a bit more from you. Overall, your application lacks a lot of the fundamental elements that define you as a roleplayer and a storyteller; my advice: read over the lore and incorporate it into your application, as well as making your open response questions more fluid, and realistic.

You will be allowed to reapply in twenty four hours, if you have any questions regarding your application feel free to drop a PM in my inbox.

Good luck!

-Brokencrowe

[Brokencrowe 111]

Moved to Denied Forum