Lu'inbal's App [Denied]

[Angel~ 34]

Minecraft Account Name:mas0n99

Character Name:Lu'Inbal

Gender:Female

Age:9

Appearence: Lu'Inbal Has a poorly made hoody with blue eyes , red belt , and has short greyish hair .

Personality: She can be shy with most people and can easly get frightened she often sits alone with no one to talk to but will talk from time to time and loves to play around with friends , Shes not very strong either but is very fast

Biography: Lu'Inbals parents abandoned her at a young age only to fend for herself with a small dagger , from time to time she'd explore close to the surface but never truly went to the surface . Raised alone only with her dagger and hunger she trys to find some positive about her life and will always try to fix thing so they don't go outta hand , She gets imprested with most things in life but always hides in the shadows. She often got into fights with other young mori's which resulted in her loseing and running off into hiding , She never could make a real friend the only friends she could get was when she feed some rats that came by for food . Her clothes are poorly made since she had to make them during spare time

Your characters ambitions: She would like to meet new people and explore the world outside and learn new things about herself.

===Roleplay Related Questions===

As your character wanders the back-streets of Menorcress, you sight a cloaked figure lurking in one of the shadowed nook behind the Brothel: a rustle of cloth is heard, and the figure ushers you in with a skeletal finger. The hooded figure imparts information involving a conspiracy to over-throw the House of Miiystra, and offers you a hefty sum of coin to partake in the planned attack. How does your character react?: She gets scared of the figure not knowing what to do she grabs her small dagger in defense and listens closely , She then finds a guard and tells him what shes heard . She then hopes for something like money or food but sometimes she gets nothing

Your character finds him/herself watching the Alure d'aphyon: the several fighters within the void maze wield only sticks as they prove their prowess as warriors by battling to the death. One of fighters happens to be a close companion of yours, and you witness him being strategically cornered by three of the other fighters and beaten to death. While the crowd cheers in celebration of the violence, and the death of your friend. How does your character react? : She see's her friend beaten to death and looks at the crowd cheering but says nothing to nervous to talk but inside she is mad and sad at what has come to her friend in the ring , She later try's to see her dead friend and gets mad at herself and later continues Sharpening and practices her dagger skills .

A screenshot of your skin: http://i1232.photobucket.com/albums/ff372/mas0n99/sketch15.png (Srry dont know how to post a screen shot of skin..hope this is ok..))

[Amethain 25]

Denied, I can barely even imagine this character, much less imagine it surviving in the Mori Culture.

~~ The appearance is one sentence long and not very descriptive.

(Please go into more detail about the appearance, try to write so I can visualize the character without even needing to see your skin. The Minecraft avatars can only be so detailed and descriptive, make it feel as if it were another living, breathing, thinking being rather than a blocky... thing.)

~~ Personality Section

(Its rather short. I would like you to describe who this character is now, not a blocky emotionless avatar, but a thinking, feeling, moving, creature. This will help define the character for you in your mind and make it even easier to play them out.)

~~ The character's age is 9 years old

(If you mean this in human years then the infant is scarcely more than a newborn baby. In Mori years the infant might just be teething at this point. Here is a list of years old relative to the characters maturity)

Infancy: 1 - 25

Childhood: 26 - 50 years

Adolescence: 51 - 119 years

Adulthood: 120 - 199 years

Middle Age: 200 - 299 years

Old: 300 - 369 years

Venerable: 370+ years

Death age/Maximun age: 600

~~ She is shy and easily frightened and she would like to meet new people and explore the world

(This does not make sense to me, she is shy and skittish therefore she wants to do outgoing and probably very frightening things.)

~~ The Biography

(It is a bit short for my liking, and the story is a bit confusing to me.

~~ She often got into fights with other Mori which caused her to recede into the shadows

(Women are essentially revered in Mori Society, it is not lightly she would get into fights unless with other females. Also, she is showing weakness by letting the bullies win and forcing her into solitude and silence.)

~~ The answer to the first of the two roleplay questions

(It is a bit short and non-descriptive, lengthening it and adding more detail would be very beneficial towards getting accepted)

~~ The second Roleplay questions answer

(This is actually a decent answer, though she has the feelings she masks them and does not let them show and is fueled by them. However, the fact that she cared so much about another is a bit rare in the Mori society, though not entirely impossible.)

In Summation I feel the character is rather shy and inhibited, tends to run from fights she cannot win on fair terms or outright fighting. Cares enough about others to feel grief when they die. She has a few Mori like traits, and even more Non-Mori like traits. I could not really grasp the character with so little about them. In short, make your answers longer, more descriptive and maybe make the character little less caring and less shy.

Appearence: Lu'Inbal Has a poorly made hoody with blue eyes , red belt , and has short greyish hair .

Personality: She can be shy with most people and can easly get frightened she often sits alone with no one to talk to but will talk from time to time and loves to play around with friends , Shes not very strong either but is very fast

Biography: Lu'Inbals parents abandoned her at a young age only to fend for herself with a small dagger , from time to time she'd explore close to the surface but never truly went to the surface . Raised alone only with her dagger and hunger she trys to find some positive about her life and will always try to fix thing so they don't go outta hand , She gets imprested with most things in life but always hides in the shadows. She often got into fights with other young mori's which resulted in her loseing and running off into hiding , She never could make a real friend the only friends she could get was when she feed some rats that came by for food . Her clothes are poorly made since she had to make them during spare time

Your characters ambitions: She would like to meet new people and explore the world outside and learn new things about herself.

===Roleplay Related Questions===

As your character wanders the back-streets of Menorcress, you sight a cloaked figure lurking in one of the shadowed nook behind the Brothel: a rustle of cloth is heard, and the figure ushers you in with a skeletal finger. The hooded figure imparts information involving a conspiracy to over-throw the House of Miiystra, and offers you a hefty sum of coin to partake in the planned attack. How does your character react?:

She gets scared of the figure not knowing what to do she grabs her small dagger in defense and listens closely , She then finds a guard and tells him what shes heard . She then hopes for something like money or food but sometimes she gets nothing

Your character finds him/herself watching the Alure d'aphyon: the several fighters within the void maze wield only sticks as they prove their prowess as warriors by battling to the death. One of fighters happens to be a close companion of yours, and you witness him being strategically cornered by three of the other fighters and beaten to death. While the crowd cheers in celebration of the violence, and the death of your friend. How does your character react? :

She see's her friend beaten to death and looks at the crowd cheering but says nothing to nervous to talk but inside she is mad and sad at what has come to her friend in the ring , She later try's to see her dead friend and gets mad at herself and later continues Sharpening and practices her dagger skills .

A screenshot of your skin: http://i1232.photobucket.com/albums/ff372/mas0n99/sketch15.png (Srry dont know how to post a screen shot of skin..hope this is ok..))

[Danny 2232]

Moved to the Great Library. It shall be sorted into appropriate category shortly.