Michael P App 3

[michael p 0]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name: tacobell99930

How old are you?:13

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: united states of America

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:yes

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a smart intelligent youth that receives many awards for academics and doing community services. As well as a kind humble individual.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:11 hours a week

what do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:acting as another person in a game so you can get away from your life for a little while

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:WOW and in my imagination

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is: using outside information to influence your gaming along the outside world to affect the game.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Emoting is: imposing your will on someone by doing something without letting them retaliate such as kill person to avoid power emoting try attempt to stab instead

What do you expect this server will be like?:a Middleville world like a cross between WOW and Eragon

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:no

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:yes

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:yes

How did you hear about us?: I looked up rp minecraft servers

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?: yes http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/61634-applicant/ and http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/61781-michael-p-app-2/page__p__483525__fromsearch__1#entry483525

In-Character:

Character Name:Ariana

What Race are you? (You may only be Human, Orc, Elf or Dwarf!) : Elf

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race): elf

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.): Ariana is a 472 year old female who is blonde and is and does not object to slavery. In fact she wishes she had one. Her life goal is to create an organization similar to the UN.

Arianna was born into a farming family and she has 3 siblings. Her life was a simple one of farming but in a battle between a dwarf clan and the elves and her home got burned down when she was 16 causing her family to have to move to another part of the world. She then had to learn to use resources sparingly as, even though her family was alive thankfully, they had lost everything. Over the next one hundred years she gained a will to spread peace so she began working on her diplomacy by settling arguments between her siblings.

When she was 123 years old she tried to become a guard for the town her families provided food for but got turned down on the fact that women should not be a guard and they were in a famine so farmers could not opt out of the task. Forty years later she found an opening for a judge at the local guard office but she got turned down because she was too young to be a judge. At 197 years old she managed to become head of the farming community she was in but when the treasurer lost all the money and Arianna got blamed causing her to lose her rank and stripped of all her money and her families’ meager wealth to try to compensate for the lost treasury money.

Then at 225 years old she was carrying food to a human town that was in a famine. When she was there, she got caught in the middle of a battle between the humans and the Orcs. Using the diplomatic skills she had learned as a youth, she negotiated a treaty between the two in under an hour of the war’s start. Seeing her diplomatic prowess the Holy Oren Empire called upon her to be their diplomat with the elves. She held that title for fifty years until she became so repulsed with the constant wars that she quit to move to the land of Alras to return to her farming roots to live and provide food for the area. At 300 years old she grew bored of the land where nothing ever happens and she and her family returned to her homeland.

She met her husband, Jane, during the festival of ale and they got married when she was 312 on red rose day thus they gave each other red roses on there wedding. At 324 years old she had a baby girl named Lorena. At 359 she had a baby boy named Aaron. At 416 years old she had another baby girl named Friona who loves nature’s boon. Then at 469 years old she had one last girl named Maddie and her family was still farming. When Arianna turned 471 years old Lorna had a boy named Seth but Seth would not live to be one year old because at 9 months old he and Lorena were in town went Christina attacked by spreading corruption though the humans and a battle broke out between the humans and the elves. Lorena lived through the battle but little Seth died. This incident made Arianna want to try to move away and make a kingdom whose sole purpose is to spread peace but, alas, she is still at her farm with all her kids.

What are your Character's ambitions?:to spread peace throuout the land

What is your character’s favorite tool? (Sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc): the word

what is one of your Character's most skilled talents? diplopic, farming and strategy

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format, if you do not know how to acquire one, copy and paste this link into your browser: ( http://tinyurl.com/Lotcscreenshot ): please go to first app i have not been able to atatch skin since

Other Information about your Character:

Open-Response-Questions

Each and every question must be answered with a minimum of a single full paragraph and entirely in RP.

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

She would try to talk them in to giving the child her money back (witch they will she’s negotiated treaties in an hour between two warring groups). If they refuse subdue them and bring them in to the officials. If that does not work she would inform the officials and compensate the Halflings stolen money if she is rich and I do not have enough money to pay her back contact other people and try to accumulate lots of money to give her./color]

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response? May I see your collection of seeds and plants I do not have enough money but I will give you this gold sword ((OOC: I get it in the next question (you never said these happen in order)))

whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?: Stay around a week and if no one shows up take the iron bars (not all just 10%) and if the sword is un damaged take it to sell where as the iron bars will be a hoe.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you in the common tongue, how do you respond? Hail them, ask to barrow a trading table to make bread because I have 60 wheat I was going to sell before I got lost, and ask for directions to the nearest town.

you hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guards have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering rewards for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:Ask the guard for diamond armor wear the diamond armor and stroll along the road wait to get attacked then have the guard come from behind a tree and rescue me from the attack. Then give the armor back and thank them for the reward.

Anything else you would like to say?: If there are any problems please give ideas to how to fix it. [/________________________________________

[Cappy 1599]

Reasons:

• Your spelling and grammar needs work.
  
• Your role-playing, metagaming and powergaming definitions could all be expanded.
  
• The UN does not exist in Asulon, to know about them would be metagaming.
  
• I liked your biography, but there are a few errors.
  -If your character is as old as they are, they would most certainly have experienced the Undead war and the escape to Asulon. They were major events, and would be a good idea to mention.
  -We have only been in Asulon for fifty years, and the Holy Oren Empire most certainly did not exist two hundred and fifty years ago
  -Lorena and Lorna are two characters that are fairly well known, at least in out-of-character. You would be suggested to use different names.
  -Your character's husband was named "Jane"?
  
• You need to supply a screenshot of your skin. There is a link in the question to a guide on how to get one.
  
• Your Open Response Questions need to be expanded. They are required to be at least one paragraph, and written in full role-play. Some ways to expand on them would be to explain in more detail what your character does, and also explain why they do it, and "what's going through their head" at the moment. You should also include both detailed actions and dialogue in your answers. You should not include "if"s in your response. You are narrating a scenario, not listing the possible courses of events.
  
• Powergaming in Open Response Questions. I'm not sure how you can talk two men into giving money they just robbed back, but I'm sure not going to buy it unless you can give me a detailed answer. And since when has your character been able to wear (heavy) full body armour? Why would she volunteer herself as a victim?
  
• I also want to know why your character, who wants to promote "peace", would take the belongings of another being under any circumstances.
  
• Did not use correct formatting.
  

Please use the correct formatting in your next application as it makes the application significantly easier to read. You can do that by finding the application format here, and copying everything inside the white box. Then paste it somewhere, and begin filling in your answers outside the tags, like so:

[b][color="#add8e6"]Minecraft Account Name:[/color][/b] <Your answer here>

Do not change the application format in any way.

Aside from that, your application was an interesting read, and you have an interesting character idea. Don't be discouraged, and I hope I've given you enough to work on for your next application.

If you have any queries relating to this application, please do not hesitate to PM me on the forums!

I'm not that scary and usually don't bite.

You may reapply in 24 hours from the time of this post.

Why not browse the forums or read up on some helpful guides while you wait?

[Cappy 1599]

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