Hunter1023's Whitelist Application

[ZeEndermanKing 0]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name:hunter1023

How old are you?:12

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:Eastern u.s.

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:Yes.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:I am a 12 year old who likes games especially minecraft.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:2-5hours

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:

Where a player fits into what people are doing around him.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:No this is my first roleplaying server so i have no experience.

in you own words define what the act of power-emoting is:this is an action that is beyond you characters abilities

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:Meta gaming is when the player uses his knowladge that the character does not have.

color="#add8e6"]In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Emoting is:Power emoting is when a character does something they could not normally do example Elendil Shoots a bow and hits a bird that was sitting on top of the great tree in the elven kingdom.

What do you expect this server will be like?:Very good i have flew all around the elven kingdom.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:I have not played on any roleplaying servers this is my first.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:Yes

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:Yes.

How did you hear about us?:A Freind told me about the forums.

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?:In-Character:http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/64289-my-whitelist-application/page__p__501950__fromsearch__1#entry501950

Character Name:Eledin

What Race are you? (You may only be Human, Orc, Elf or Dwarf!) :Elf

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):Wood Elf

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

Eledin was a young and small boy at the age of nine. He was eating dinner with his parents and

they said son stay here we are going to buy some grain. Eledin heard a crash from his mothers window only seconds after his parents left. He went to see what the crash was and it was an ORC!. Eledin was scared he ran from his house into the blacksmith and his in the storage room in the back. The Orc was rampaging through the city destroying houses. Eledin oculd hear screams of his mother and father since all the warriors were in a war with the flay. No one was there to fight the Orc so Eledin ran toward the screams he saw a sharp peice of glass on the side of the path he grabbed it and started running again he ran to the Orc. The Orc was turning around but before it could Eledin jumped on its back and jabbed the sharp peice of glass into the orcs neck. The Orc screeched in pain and Threw Eledin off Who banged his head on the side of someones house and was knocked out. 1 day later Eledin woke up in his house with his parents watching over him. 9 Years later he was a lumberjack and he heard noises coming from the gate there was 4 orcs. Eledin was shocked he ran to a guard inside the tree in the center of the elf kingdom and said to the guard Orcs at the gate! the guard was shocked and alerted other guards. Eledin ran to his house grabbed his armour and sword. and ran back to the gate 3 guards and a sentinel were at the gate citizens his in their houses and the guards and sentinel asked what the orcs were doing here. One Orc grumbled in a deep voice we are here to deliver a message the flay has declared war.Then Eledin noticed These orcs must be members of the flay! Eledin had his sword at the ready but then The Orcs Were gone the sentinel told one gard to stay at the gate. Eledin went back to his house and put away his armour and sword and went back to chopping trees.

What are your Character's ambitions?:To Fight For The ELven Nation.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):Pickaxe.

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?Bows

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format, if you do not know how to acquire one, copy and paste this link into your browser: ( http://tinyurl.com/Lotcscreenshot ):

http://img651.imageshack.us/img651/1800/20120723133542.png

Other Information about your Character:He Is A Strong Wood Elf Who has a Very good shot.

Open-Response-QuestionsEach and every question must be answered with a minimum of a single full paragraph and entirely in RP.

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

"Elendin HEY! dont pick on a little kid" "armed warrior 1 go home Elendin you think you are so tough since that orc in the city 9 years ago " armed warrior 2 " ya go home " "Elendin No Put the swords down and stop taking money from children" "armed soldier 1 grabs the kid " " armed soldier 2 pulls out the kids pockets and pulls out 2 peices of silver "Eledin attempts to grab both of the warriors swords they knock him to the ground" "Eledin gets up and again reaches for a sword but only the left warriors because he was holding the child he managed to grab it but Eledin was back on the ground they dropped the young halfling and the other warrior held his sword up to Eledin" "warrior 1 drop the sword Eledin you know you cant handle that thing" "Eledin gets up and holds the sword up and the warrior slashed at him Eledin hits the warriors sword with his they clash" "warrior 1 drops his sword" "Eledin grabs warrior 1's sword and tells the kid to go home" "Eledin goes to a guard standing next to the gate gives him their swords and walks away.

["color=#add8e6]Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?"Eledin what do you have?" "Trader all types of things armour swords food anything" "Eledin any chance you have any male armour?" "Trader yes absolutely heavy armour or light armour?" "Eledin Light armour" "Trader ok that will be 75 minas" "Eledin pulls 75 minas from his satchel and buys the armour and puts it on what about a sword?" "Trader oh i have many swords "pulls out a light wieght sword but very sharp" "Eledin any other ones?" "Trader "pulls out 2 more sword one is very big but not sharp the other more like a dagger" "Eledin i will buy the first one" "Trader 80 minas" "Eledin thinks this is expensive but hopefully worth it pulls the money from his pocket 80 minas and buys the sword" "Trader says thank you for stopping by" "Eledin bye"

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:"Eledin thinks hard about if he should take this or not. He looks back at the chest with a golden sword and iron bars and thinks. I might just take 1 iron bar and grabs one and walks away. Then turns around and puts it back then he decides nevermind i should just take the 1 Eledin walks away.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond? "Eledin May i buy some bread?" "Trader ok how much?" "Eledin just 1 pound" "Trader that will be 5 minas" "Eledin reaches into his pocket and pulls out 5 minas with not much money left" "Trader "hands Him The Bread" "Eledin walks over to another tent and sees they have a map for sale" "Trader i see you are interseted in this map would you like to buy it?" "Eledin how much?" "Trader 10 minas" "Eledin pulls from his pocket 10 minas and buys the map" "Trader thank you" "Eledin no thank you Eledin thinks to himself i am not lost in the wilderness anymore"

[Taiga 764]

Your Application has been...

DENIED [X]

Put on PENDING [ ]

Reason(s)Why Your Application Was Denied:

[[X's mark the parts you need to rectify.]]

Out of Character:

Missing Areas [ ]

Bad Information [ ]

Role Play:

Missing Biography [ ]

-Short Biography [ ]

Insufficient Information in OOC [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Metagaming Definition [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Powergaming Definition [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge on Role Play [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge of the World [X]

Incorrect Lore / Other-Worldly Lore [X]

-Fabricated Places/Large-Scale Events [ ]

-Unreal Scenarios [X]

Bouts of Powergaming [X]

Bouts of Metagaming [ ]

Conflicting Answers [ ]

Character is Cliche [ ]

Requires a Villain Application [ ]

Open Ended Responses Require Elaboration [X]

-ORQ 1 is flawed [X]

-ORQ 2 is flawed [ ]

-ORQ 3 is flawed [X]

-ORQ 4 is flawed [ ]

-ORQ 5 is flawed [ ]

--All ORQs are flawed [ ]

Form:

Bad Spelling/Grammar [ ]

Missing Areas [ ]

Breaking Rules [ ]

Cliche [ ]

Plagiarized [ ]

Skin:

Missing Skin [ ]

-Skin Doesn't Fit Character [ ]

-Incorrect Character Description [ ]

-Incorrect Skin Format [ ]

-Unloreful Skin [ ]

Other Comments:

Primarily, your application was denied due to bad information in your biography. One Orc cannot ravage an entire city. One child cannot kill an Orc. This would be powergaming on both sides— none of them can do the actions described above!

Secondly, your first ORQ displays false lore. Silver is not a form of currency, guards are not stationed at the Cloud Temple, and one person cannot simply tackle and incapacitate two armed warriors. Furthermore, halflings are not always children. Their height, the age does not make.

Also, your third ORQ has little to no elaboration as to why he would rob a house of it's contents. Please add more dialogue and his thoughts.

Lastly, I would suggest improving your spelling and grammar. Your ORQs are severely flawed when it comes to dialogue and speech.

I wish you good luck on your next application.

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Just because you play RPG's, doesn't mean you have RPed before.

Don't post another application in a period of two (2) days. It ruins our organisation methods.

Definition of Metagaming and Powergaming : http://sm-rp.forumotion.com/t32-powergaming-metagaming-ic-and-ooc

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