[Denied]Phoenix-Masters 2Nd App

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Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name: DeadlyEnderman

How old are you?: 13

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Canada

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: My main language is English but you can expect a few mistakes

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: Im very active Male I like sports Soccer in particular and I love minecraft ALSO am very helpful

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: In the summer 5-6 days a week during school year everyday after school

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: Role-playing refers to the changing of one's behaviour to assume a role, either unconsciously to fill a social role, or consciously to act out an adopted role

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: I have much experience In roleplaying I have played Other games that are RPG Wow Runescape Etc...

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is: metagaming is when players use knowledge that is not available to their character in order to Give themselves an advantage

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Emoting is: Power-Emoting Is Forcing the results of ones actions onto another player

In your own Words, define what Out of Character (OOC) is:

Out Of Character. A term used in roleplay when a person wants to step outside of their character for a minute and speak as themselves.

In your own Words, define what In Character (IC) is: Roleplaying being the character that You created someone else

What do you expect this server will be like?: Very good From what my friends say

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: i have played on some but I dont remember the names but the reason I left was because NOT one person took it seriously!

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules: Yes i have read and agree to all rules and laws

How did you hear about us?: a friend

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?: yes here http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/65423-1st-application-by-phoenix-master/

In-Character:

Character Name: Catradon

What Race are you? (You may only be Human, Orc, Elf or Dwarf!) : Human

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race): Northerner

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.): Catradon being a human Grew up in asulon but he was living with his Mother And step Father. Even at the age of 18 he stil wasnt over what happend 14 years ago. On a very special day It was july 31st 1998

the day of his fathers big expedition he was a miner a very good one he was maybe one of the best. He left that day far across asulon not to Return for 1 year but he promised to write a letter to me every week. After 1 month he suddenly stopped writing. I waited for a week to see if he wrote again but he didnt I assumed he had just run out of charcoal to write with but then 3 days later

one of my fathers mining buddies showed up at the door. The first thing i noticed Was his limp his broken arm and his bloody leg. My mom started to panic I started to worry he came in and said in a soft whisper "Your....your fathers dead. My Mom started to cry I ran into the room and got his letters I ran back out and Screamed "HOW!" he replied in a rough voice The....the...Ceiling...it caved....

I quickly ran to the table and spread out the letters on one of his letters my father mentioned the walls seeming like they were hollow I thought for a second and said "It was no accident" He replied in a confused voice "How would you know?" I pointed to the letter he read it and his expression was wiped off of his face And he replied "You....You think the shadow society had something to do with this?

I replied "I dont know But I Will find out Who did this and avenge him!" And this is where my adventure started. I now look like my father when he left I wear his old armour and i have his eye colour. My personality has never been the same since that day now My soul Is just a bitter prescense of rage...........

What are your Character's ambitions?: To find who Klled his father and avenge him

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc): Pickaxe

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?Very good miner I take this Skill from my father but am very skilled with a sword

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format, if you do not know how to acquire one, copy and paste this link into your browser: ( http://tinyurl.com/Lotcscreenshot ):

Other Information about your Character: If brought to the point he will break the law to find more clues about the death of his father

Open-Response-Questions

Each and every question must be answered with a minimum of a single full paragraph and entirely in RP.

While traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond? As I walk out of the Cloud Temple and notice the warriors harassing the Halfling.

Catradon: Hey! What do you think you are doing?

*The warriors ignore Catradon. Catradon begins to get angry with these warriors.*

Catradon: Hey! You listen to me right now! Leave the halfling alone or else.

Warrior 1: What could you do to us?

Catradon: This! *catradon readys his sword and swings at the warriors wrist it glides through and the warrior screams in pain*

Warrior 2: But thats against the law! you would to break the law just to save this halfings minas?

Catradon: *Confident Smile* Yup...

Warrior 2: cocky

Warrior 1: *In a Screech of pain* Kill him!!

*Warrior 2 charges at Catradon. Catradon quickly dodges, And swings his sword Decapitating the warrior*

Halfling: Thankyou very much kind sir!*

*Catradon notices the halfling and backs down.*

Catradon: its Alright, I'll be off now.

Halfling: What? Thee are just going to back down now? but You saved me! Your such a hero!

Catradon: *agitated* I said I will be off now...

Halfling: Ok... very mature, see you later Hero!

*Catradon walks off as the warriors blood runs down the hill.*

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

I would place my coin purse on the counter and ask him of whats for sale.

Catradon: Hello sir.....

Merchant: Hello. How can I help you?

Catradon: I was wondering what armor or weapons you have for sale.

Merchant: Good choice we have some armor for sale.

Catradon: Ok any leather?

Merchant: *Goes into his chest and takes out some Leather boots and pants. Along with an iron helmet.* This be what I've got. Anything catch your fancy?

Catradon: *Picks up the leather boots and rubs hand along surface of it. Looks closely at every stitch in it....and finds his fathers initials in it*...Where did you get this!? *holding a Sword to his throat*

Merchant: *Ponders on it a bit.* I'll cut you a deal.

Catradon: *the only thing being cut will be your throat if you dont answer me...*Goes to take the armor*

Merchant: *....a trading camp up north.....

*Catradon picks up the armor and takes his sword away from the merchants throat. *then quickly puts the armor in his backpack and heads out of town.*

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

I would barely notice the hut in the first place. But if for some reason I did notice it as I Pressed through the woods, I would not even look through the chest. I would throw a blanket on the ground and and take a nap. I would sleep till I was satisfied or it was noonish. As I awaken, I would take my blanket roll it up and and be on my way once more.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

To be noble I would greet them in the normal way.

Catradon: Good Day, All.

*One trader comes up to Catradon*

Trader: who are you?

*Catradon: I am catradon Good sir and you are?*

Trader: *Grins* romarr Kid.

Catradon: *Annoyed with the Traders tone* I'm not a kid!!

Romarr: *Takes out a Sword* I can give you a "Test" for free. *with a grin*

Catradon: *wielding his fathers trusty blade" Why dont you try it...

*Romarr then Laughs then Walks away.*

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

*Hearing this Catradon would Grin and grab the nearest sword. He would then walk to the path to meet with the guards*

Catradon: can I come help?

Guard: sorry kid guards only.

Catradon: 1 Im not a Kid!! 2 im going anyway!!

Guard: Just be careful.

Catradon: ok... *Puts his armor on and runs out to the path. Everyone gawking at him as he slams the door shut.*

Anything else you would like to say?:

I just really hope you accept me im really exited to play on your server!

[Dante 206]

Denied.

Your biography had a good sense of dynamic writing in real time, though it was extremely hurtful to our lore. Your character's concept is for him to find revenge on people who do not exist in-game, so therefore you are setting an impossible goal for him, which cannot really be role played out.

Another note you should be aware of is the creation of the Shadow Society, which obviously does not exist in-game. That is the formulation of a large scale event, and that is an extremely poor aspect to give to your application. Create your character around events and groups that already exist to your knowledge. It impresses the app team member, and shows you know what you're talking about.

Finally with your biography, you should probably not include the year 1998, because not even in Aegis were we close to that year. I'd think about 500's at most.

*Warrior 2 charges at Catradon. Catradon quickly dodges, And swings his sword Decapitating the warrior*

Power-Emoting Is Forcing the results of ones actions onto another player

By instantly decapitating a character is power-gaming, as they have literally no chance to react to the loss of their head. Understand your concepts.

One more note is to fix your grammar up. The little things are what impresses us app team as well.

Please wait 24 hours before re applying.

[Dante 206]

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