[Denied]My 2nd application

[Trevormurray 0]

Out-Of-Character Details

Minecraft Account Name: trevormurray

How old are you?: 16

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: GMT Alaska, United States

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?: Yes I do have a good grip on English grammar and the English language.

Have you had any previous experience in roleplaying?: Yes I love to role-play and I look forward to role-playing on the number one minecraft role-playing server!

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?: Yes i have read and agreed to them and i think they are very good rules.

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?: I chanced upon it while watching youtube videos and immediately fell in love with it.

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft: previous app.txt

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here:http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r-100-unique-gameplay/!: Not yet

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is: The act of role-playing is essentially becoming one with your character, for example thinking like him and basing your actions off of what your character knows. Which creates a great gaming environment and server.

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is: Meta-gaming is using knowledge that your character wouldn't of known, for example using OOC to find stuff out or Skype and then using that to your advantage.

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is: Power emoting is being absolute with your emotes for example *Trevimli slashes the orc across the chest* instead of saying *Trevimli jumps forward attempting to slash the orc across the chest* which leaves it open to chance.

In-Character Details

Character Name: Trevimli_Stronghammer

Character Race: Mountain Dwarf

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary: Trevimli_Stronghammer was brought up on a poor dwarven farm outside of Kal'Dwain. He saw solders countless times throughout his childhood which gave him the dream of one day becoming the fiercest warrior in all of Asulon. His parents found a baby dwarf in the woods when he was but a babe himself and they were raised together. He grew very fond of his foster brother Gunthar_Stronghammer and now at the age of three seasons they both are setting out on an adventure together. Growing up with Gunthar taught Trevimli just how much you can accomplish with other people to help, so he is always looking for more friends.

Trevimli is a very curious dwarf at the age of three seasons there is much he does not yet know. Growing up on the farm he learned how to make an honest living and will have nothing to do with any sort of trickery or evil. He has always felt at home around the forge and crafts the best tools. After countless long nights of sneaking out and fighting with Gunthar with sticks, he has become quite proficient in combat. He longs to be able to prove his metal in battle and one day start up a clan of his own. He has acquired a natural hatred of orcs escpecially after traveling to Kal'Alras with his family and seeing a burned down village with orc footprints everywhere, and dead dwarfs scattered across the village.

Longing to prove himself he sets out on an adventure with Gunthar at his side. They hope to find many friends in there travels and Learn everything they can. Their hope is to eventually start up there own clan but they are far to young, for now. They are in search of the Hidden scrolls and will not rest til they find them. The only problem is Trevimli can be quite the spender when he sees stuff he likes, but being resourceful him and Gunthar should have no problems at all.

What are your characters ambitions?: To go on a Grand adventure with Gunthar, find many friends, perhaps serve a clan for awhile, and then start up my own clan.

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Is there anything else you would like to say about your character: That he longs to roam Asulon with Gunthar_Stronghammer (who is also applying).

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response? Strolling into the grand City of Arethor I notice a poor ragged dwarf in a shabby little shop crying out desperately for someone to buy his wares so that he might not go hungry tonight. I walk over and greet the dwarf who sighs with relief to see one of his own kin. We share stories until I grow fond of him so i ask if he'd like to join our adventure. I hand him a couple minas and ask where the local tavern is. Excitedly he reaches out and grasps the minas exclaiming all manner of thanks and directing me to the tavern. I tell him to meet me tommorow in the tavern if he wishes to accompany me.

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do? Marching over I step right in between the two with my heart racing. Holding back the fire that is sweltering in my veins I choose to find out what the commotion is about before I lop of anyone's head. The dwarf tells me this orc demands his minas or he shall die. As vivid flashes of the pillaged village race through my mind I grasp my axe tightly ready for any attack from the looming orc who stands at the ready. Half way through me giving the orc his last chance to go away, he lunges forward trying to plunge his sword through my breastplate. I knew full well the attack was coming so by the time his sword passed by me his head bounced off the ground.

Whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins spill out, you peer down at the defenceless man. What does your character do?: I rush over to the downed man, slowly helping him to his feet I ask who he is. After making small talk I offer my own walking stick to the old man who's needs for it are far greater then my own. Still talking to him I gather the minas for him and return it, not wanting to pry into his personal information, I choose not to ask about how he got all that minas. He thanks me very gratefully and hands me a good amount of minas, joyfully i take it from his outstretched hand and thank him full heartily. We both are going separate ways so i wish him well and i'm off down the road once again.

[LeRenardNoir 413]

You were denied for the following reasons:

Your Open Response Questions could use some dialogue. I would also request that you use a different Dwarf skin as the one you're using is rather overused. Another thing I might suggest would be to add actions to your Open Response Questions, don't be so general. You don't have much more to fix other than that. Good luck on your next application!

Please wait 24 hours before re-applying.

PM me if you would like further explanation/help.

While you wait…Go and vote for the server to support it!

We all would really appreciate it.

[LeRenardNoir 413]

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