[Denied]Application For Gnarlan123

[gnarlan123 4]

Out-Of-Character Details

Minecraft Account Name:gnarlan123

How old are you?:14

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:Timezone is Pacific Standard Time and Country of Residence is London, United Kingdom.

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?:Yes I have a good grip on English grammar and the English language.

Have you had any previous experience in roleplaying?:Yes, I have played Dungeons and Dragons.

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?:I have read and agree to the rules of Lord of the Craft.

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?:I came across it on Youtube.

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft:I have made none.

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here: http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r-100-unique-gameplay/! :Yes I have posted it on the forum.

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is:Roleplaying is to take on the life of a person in a fantasy (sometimes fantasy world) world and to make actions and decisions using that character.

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is:Meta-Gaming is defined as any out of character action made by a player's character which makes use of knowledge that the character does not know.

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is:Power-Emoting is just an act when it takes the freedom of action away from the player being emoted on, like "I stab Bob" and Bob does not get to try to dodge my move or anything like that.

In-Character Details

He is a young Dwarf with a long shaggy beard and he is covered in dust from being in the mines.

Character Name:Gnarlan_Understone

Character Race:Dwarf

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary:Gnarlan_Understone grew up in a small Dwarven village. His parents were murdered when he was at the age of ten so a mid-aged stone miner named Rogdast took him in and raised him to be a strong and sturdy Dwarf. By the time he was fifteen he was already in the mines slamming his pick into the stone everyday. But then a couple of years later the mines collapsed and he lost Rogdast to the rubble of the mine.

He had moved into the Army and kept on renting a room at the Rusty Pick Inn. He had gone to war with the Orcs two times so far and only came back with a broken leg and a weak wooden walking stick. He had healed from his war wound in half a year and went back out into the battlefield for the third time. He came back to the Rusty Pick Inn with Orc skulls and Ork armour, a very precious but strong armour. When he was 20 he had become the leader of a platoon of Dwarves and went to fierce skirmishes with the Orks but he had survived three battles. He went away from the military for a year trying to find the mysterious man in a black suit of Human armour who had murdered his parents but after that slow slow year he returned to the military and now works there to this day.

What are your characters ambitions?:To work for the Dwarven army and adventure into the Human lands to find out why they had sent that black armoured man to his home village.

Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here:

Is there anything else you would like to say about your character:He is a great and fierce war-machine.

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response?I take a look at what he is selling. Inspecting the hardware. I give him a bread and a drink of water, then I wish him good luck. And i carry onward in my journey through the Human city of Arethor.

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?I sneak up to the quarrel and hide behind a bush nearby but not on the path. I hear what the Orc is saying and when they start to fight I jump out with whatever weapon I have and start slashing at the massive beast.

Whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins spill out, you peer down at the defenceless man. What does your character do?:I say to the old man in a worried voice "Are you ok?" then I will lift him up and return his broken bag of Minas.

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Additional Verdict(s): Banned from applying for 1 month.

Reason(s)Why Your Application Was Denied:

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Role Play:

Missing Biography [ ]

-Short Biography [ ]

Insufficient Information in OOC [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Metagaming Definition [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Powergaming Definition [ ]

-Insufficient Knowledge on Role Play [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge about the Lore [ ]

Incorrect Lore / Other-Worldly Lore [ ]

-Fabricated Places/Large-Scale Events [ ]

-Unreal Scenarios [ ]

Bouts of Powergaming [ ]

Bouts of Metagaming [ ]

Requires a Villain Application [ ]

Open Ended Responses Require Elaboration [ ]

Did not post on MinecraftForums [ ]

Form:

Missing Areas [ ]

Bad Spelling/Grammar [ ]

Breaking Rules [ ]

Plagiarized [X]

--Plagirism Source: Wikipedia.org

Skin:

Missing Skin [ ]

-Skin Doesn't Fit Character [ ]

-Incorrect Character Description [ ]

-Incorrect Skin Format [ ]

-Unloreful Skin [ ]

Other Comments:

Sadly, you have been denied for plagiarism. Your definition of Metagaming was taken from the Wiki, when it clearly stated to name it in your own words.

Now, in a month's time, you will be allowed to apply once more. Until then, lengthen your ORQ and make your Biography neater, including lore from our website!

Here are some useful links:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/wikka.php?wakka=HomePage

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/?page_id=10

Until then, good luck!

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If you have any Questions or concerns, feel free to send a Private Message to my account!

Noteworthy Hints and Resources:

You come to Asulon to Develop a Character, not have one Developed already

Just because you play RPG's, doesn't mean you have RPed before.

Don't post another application in a period of one (1) day. It clogs up the applications section, and doesn't prove to us that you have improved upon your application.

Definition of Metagaming and Powergaming : http://sm-rp.forumotion.com/t32-powergaming-metagaming-ic-and-ooc

Definition of Power-Emoting: http://www.wowwiki.com/Power-emoting

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