[Denied]Westsidegeckos Apply

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Out-Of-Character Details

Minecraft Account Name:WestSideGeckos

How old are you?:17

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:Slovenia

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?:Quite good :)

Have you had any previous experience in roleplaying?:Nope :( sadly thats why i want to play on LOTC

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?:Ofcourse!

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?:Searching for rp servers :)

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft:

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here: http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r-100-unique-gameplay/! :I Posted it :).

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is:Roleplaying is that you play your own certain character in an unreal world.

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is:That someone talks in ooc without typing ooc (like hi there, mr. John(and he and John didnt even introduce)) Ya know what im sayin?Well if not soz im not really a good definer :P.

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is:That someone says stuff like he's the most powerful and that he's a god or something, and he just started to play.

In-Character Details

Character Name:Rudsan Kalgaoria

Character Race:Human.

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary:

Rudsan is a young man that doesnt have alot of money, he lives in a poor house.He has really tattered clothes and he is a good person.He was old 15 years, when his family died.Now he is 25. He wants to revenge his family.He heard someone screaming HELP! HELP!.He followed the sound and seen 2 bandits trying to rob a small kid.Then he yelled: Stop it!They say get out and tell noone that this is happening or we will kill you and this kid!He had no weapons and he saw a guard.He was pretending that he is going to tell noone, then he telled this to the guard.The guard and him tried to sneak behind them, but they heard them the guard hit the first bandit but he had some armor, so he just cut his hand off.His sword fell down and Rudsan tried to pick the sword up.The second bandit put his sword above Rudsan's head.He said: Put your weapon or the kid and that stupid man will die!Rudsan was really sad.The guard was quiet, but he did throw the weapon down.The first bandit was crying becouse of pain.The guard said leave the kid and this man alone, or your friend will bleed to death.I know how to stop his bleed.The first bandit was yelling PLEASE, LET HIM STOP THE BLEED!So the other bandit said that he will leave the kid and the man survive.But only if they stop the friend bleeding.So thats what happened.Guard stopped the bleeding and bandits had to go to jail.I, Rudsan was really happy then, so i became a newbie warrior.I didnt get any armor just some clothes, and a sword.

What are your characters ambitions?:That his family would survive in some way and that he could revenge them.

Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here:

http://i.imgur.com/GBdpk.png

Is there anything else you would like to say about your character:

Nope

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response?

Rudsan passes by a little dwarf, that is poor and tries to sell his wears.He looks really sad but he thinks this is what he needs to do.He wants to sell the clothes to get some food, but Rudsan tries to stop him.Rudsan goes to him and says: Stop selling your wears.You will not be really proud of you!You need to stop!I will give you some money to buy food if thats what you need.The dwarf became happy and thanked him for giving him some money.He bought food and he waved to Rudsan everytime he saw him.But they didnt see each other alot.

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?Rudsan goes to stop the large Orc andis really mad.The dwarf reminds him of his old friend that tried to sell his clothes.But it was not him.Rudsan went to save that poor little dwarf.He pulled out the sword and said that Orc must stop.The orc has started laughing and said: What are you gonna do?EH?You are just a little human that cant do anything to me!

Rudsan said:Im going to kill you if you dont stop.The Orc didnt have any weapons but he had large muscles.Rudsan and Orc fought, Orc broken Rudsan's hand so he was really angry and started to go aggressive.He made the Orc never do this again.But Rudsan went to the hospital, and his hand was good soon.

Whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins spill out, you peer down at the defenceless man. What does your character do?:Rudsan helps the old man and gets his minas back to the bag. (OOC: sorry forgot that money was actually minas)And so he hears someone quietly coming from behind.He turned around and saw a thief that wanted to backstab him.He pulled the sword out quickly and defended himself and the old man.He killed the thief, then he got the old man into a hospital.

[Taiga 764]

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Role Play:

Missing Biography [ ]

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Insufficient Information in OOC [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Metagaming Definition [X]

-Insufficient Information in Powergaming Definition [X]

-Insufficient Knowledge on Role Play [ ]

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Incorrect Lore / Other-Worldly Lore [ ]

-Fabricated Places/Large-Scale Events [ ]

-Unreal Scenarios [ ]

Bouts of Powergaming [ ]

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Requires a Villain Application [ ]

Open Ended Responses Require Elaboration [ ]

Did not post on MinecraftForums [ ]

Form:

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Confusing Wordplay [ ]

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Plagiarized [ ]

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Skin:

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-Incorrect Skin Format [ ]

-Unloreful Skin [ ]

Other Comments:

I'm sorry to deny your application, as this is your first attempt at a roleplay community, but do not be deterred by this first trial! Many have been where you stand right now, and many of them have passed onto be excellent roleplayers!

Now, firstly, your definitions of metagaming and powergaming are inaccurate/incorrect in accordance to our server's adage. Please use the link below to obtain accurate definitions of metagaming and powergaming. In your next application, be sure to put it in your own words. Knowing these terms is necessary for success!

Secondly, your application is missing any indication about knowledge of the server's lore. Pleasse remember, it is a necessary and integral part of your application. This tells us that you have read and understood the server's setting, our background lore, and gives your character the necessary information. It is not necessary to read everything about the server— simply read anything that may pertain to your character's race, background, and any additional tidbits you may want to add to deepen your character's background. Suggestions include names of large cities, some information about the move to Asulon [if your character is of the right age], large events, and knowledge about notable landmarks.

Here are some useful links:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/wikka.php?wakka=HomePage

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/?page_id=10

This is to ensure that you know where and when you will be roleplaying. Get a feel for the great experiences to be had!

After that, I would suggest copy/pasting your Biography and ORQs into something with a spelling/grammar check. Just fix the issues that appear with the included spell-checker. This will help eliminate the clutter, so we can have a better understanding of what you mean to say.

And lastly, try adding some dialogue and speech! It really helps personify your character better; giving him a personality and tone.

I wish you the best of luck on your next application!

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If you have any Questions or concerns, feel free to send a Private Message to my account!

Make an introduction here: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/forum/174-the-introduction-forum/ Make some friends, or even enlist some help from the community!

Noteworthy Hints and Resources:

You come to Asulon to Develop a Character, not have one Developed already

Just because you play RPG's, doesn't mean you have RPed before.

Don't post another application in a period of one (1) day. It clogs up the applications section, and doesn't prove to us that you have improved upon your application.

Definition of Metagaming and Powergaming : http://sm-rp.forumotion.com/t32-powergaming-metagaming-ic-and-ooc

Definition of Power-Emoting: http://www.wowwiki.com/Power-emoting

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