[Denied]My 2Nd Application

[Rivk Zavadsky 700]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: Griff28

How old are you?:12

Time-Zone:Central time USA

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I roleplayed on a server called Calsky Island.

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?:My friends told me about it

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/80764-my-application/

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):no

Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?:yes

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing:You create your own character and act as you want him or her to b3

Meta-gaming:Meta gaming is out of game information.

Power-emoting: Using powerful weapons or and advantages. Example: John hits jake with a hammer in the head. Jake passes out* Jake takes a fist and kills him.

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name:Rick Felder

Current Age: 28

Sub-race (if any):

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): My Name is Rick Felder In lived in Salvus with my mom,dad,and my 2 brothers.My Dad wanted to become a leader of soilders for The Holy Oren empire but they didn't want him.My grandma and my moms sister died of the 37th year. When I was 5 I wanted to become a knight when I grew up. When I was 7 my mom became sick and died from a plague like disease.My father wanted me to stay away from other people incase I was sick.But a weeek later they discovered she ate something poisononous and got sick. I lived with my 2 brothers Marcus and Jonathan and my dad Zach. When I was 9 I was a very smart kid and loved the wilderness. When i was 13 my dad let me explore the wilderness with my brothers. One time we were walking and we saw a bandit killing a person we caught the bandit and handed him to the gaurds.

One day my dad was killed by some bandits.4 days later the bandits were caught dead in the river. My gandfather watched me and my brothers for 5 years. My grandfather adbandoned me when I was 20. My Brothers adventured and me well I explored the wilderness hunted learned to survive alone.My brothers told me that I was the best adventurer they've ever seen.When I was 23 I had a girlfriend but then she got sick with a disease that killed her in 9 days.I was lonely for the rest of my life but still was learning how to survive alone. When I was done I wanted to be a soilder and protect the land from any dangers.

Ambitions for the Future: Protect citizens and be a soilder

Personality: Hunt and fight against enemies

Skills: Sword,Bow,Mining,and fishing

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):http://imgur.com/5a4v2Hz

Any other details you wish to share about your character: no not really

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

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1. Whilst in the mighty human capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?

Answer: I would see what the Man would do if he does something bad come up to him stab his leg or kick his leg.If he would comeback at me id try to drag the gaurds attentions.If the bandit surrenders to me I would bring him to the gaurds. He broke away and I ran after him then tackled him.I brung him to the gaurds and he was setenced to death for what he was trying to do at the palace.

2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?

Answer: Id see if they'd start to fight if they do I'd come join in and help the guy fight.They guy got tired and then the bandit's sword struck my leg.I took out my bow and shot them both in the leg. The guy helped my leg and washed it. We then took the bandits and threw them in the river.

3. You are standing within the mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).

Answer: I'd give him about 10 minas for everything if they are bad stuff id get them for 3.If he doesnt agree I may give him 20 minas. If he says a price I'd give him the money.If I saw a diamond pick or something and I offered a trade he didn't accept it I would give him 60 Minas and a iron pickaxe.

[Peter Chivay 2494]

 

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Reasons for being denied:

 

1. Your power gaming definition is slightly off, as well as your meta gaming definition. Please refine them.

 

2. Your biography needs to be more refined, rather than just stating your family members and such. Even though you did include lore, try to make it more into your app, rather than just random splurts.

 

3. Please don't wear armor while you have your skin on, it blurs the view of the skin itself.

 

4. Expand on your ORQs. Make them flow more like an RP scenario, not a story.

[Peter Chivay 2494]

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