[Denied][Elf] Infamousgermans Application For Whitelist

[InfamousGerman 1553]

Out of game Information
 

IGN: InfamousGerman
Age:14

Time-zone: Eastern coast of USA

Have you read understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes

What previous experiences have you had role-playing?: 3 minecraft RP Server
How did you hear about lord of the craft?: PMC

Link any applications you have made for the
server:http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/83450-lotc-whitelist-application/#entry720021

Have you made and application on the mincraft forums? No

Have you read the Elven lore and followed it in your biography?:Yes

 

Definitions

Role-play: The act of taking on a character and acting out their life

Meta-gaming:The act of using out of game information that your player would not know or how to do it

Power-emoting:The act of using words to do an action that cannot be stopped

 

In-character Information

Full Name: Glorinel Kalelyn

Age:21 (Elvish years)

Sub-race: High elf

History and Past: When Glorinel was a baby he was very sleepy. This likely affacted his brain growth. Throughout school he was very smart. He knew answers to questions and respected his teachers. During Middle and High school he devolped a knack for peacekeeping. When bullying occured he was there to stop it.

One day coming back from school Glorinel found a nasty suprise. His father was badly wounded. He was informed that his father was wounded by bandits while on patrol.That day forward he vowed to avenge his father

 

Ambitions:Find a wife and join the Elvish Army

Personality: Respectful, Intelligent, peaceful, friendly,stealthy and fast but serious when the time calls for it

Appearence:C:\Users\Miskofamily\AppData\Roaming\.minecraft\screenshots

 

Open response questions

(minimum one paragraph and be desciptive and not break lore)

 

1. As you walk through the deep forests you hear the sound
of whispering and snickering. Upon inspection you realize that a group of High
Elves are mocking a small Wood Elf child. How do you react?

 

Glorinel comes up and puts his hand on the High elves shoulders.The high elves look up in horror as the wood elf is saved.

"I see there is a probelm here" "Now what where you doing?" The high elves, caught red handed started to speak but no words came out. At last a high elf spoke "We were mocking him" He said eyes filled with tears. "Well im glad you were honest with me" " Thats still doesnt make it okay" "Sorry sir" "Well good im gald you learned your lesson, does anyone want snacks? The boys ate the snacks and then Glorinel escorted them home

 

 

2. Whilst wandering through the Elven forests you come
across a frail old man with a walking stick. He collapses in front of you,
falling to the ground with a sharp thud. Out of his pocket falls a small pouch
of gold coins, which hits the ground and splits open spreading coins across the
pathway. The man lies there, defenseless - what do you do?

 

Glorinel sprints full force picking up the gold. When he return the gold the man is grateful for his services. When they were walking Glorinel realizes  the man is gushing blood. "Sir your bleeding!" The old man stares lifelessly and falls to the ground. "guards guards!" Guards come rushing over and carry the old man off. The Warden leans to Glorinel and whispers "You may have saved his life" Glorinel walks off sastified by helping the old men, but worried on the inside.

 

 

3. Whilst traversing the Elven Woodlands, you come across a
small clearing in which a colored carriage sits. A trader stands outside of it
and calls you over, telling you of his wares. He points out that his carriage
sells just about everything, and that he's willing for you to haggle for a
price. What does your character do? (Please include:- item, haggling for prices
and the discussion involved).

 

Glorinel inspects the wagon, nothing catches his eye. At the back of the wagon some shiny catches his attention. "Wow, its a cracked steel sword" Glorinel says this without much intrest "I can fine something better" Glorinel looks at pocket and sees 20 Minas. He quickly looks and the price tag. "23 Minas!" he exclaims. The shopkeeper comes over to look at it

"Yeah, that product hasn't caught many peoples attention" "Well then certainly you could lower it" The shopkeeper think and says "Fine, 15 Minas" "For that piece? Seems overpriced" "Look im trying to make a profit" "your not making anything overpricing it" "FINE, 12 Minas,but thats final" "I dont know" Glorinel says "How about 10" "How about no" "Well its losing value everyday" The shopkeeper thinks for a couple minutes and says "Fine 10 Minas" Glorinel pays the Minas and walks off with it. Later that day at a training ground, a employee informs him that its an old elvish blade worth around 500 Minas.

 

[Roxforbraynz 251]

 

 

1.  Please expand upon all of your definitions and add examples to meta-gaming and power-emoting.

 

2.  Your biography is very short and generic and doesn't include any lore. Please expand upon your biography greatly and include things such as places and events which you can find on the Wiki. If you're going to be a High Elf, I also suggest reading about their culture on their Wiki page.

 

3.  Your Open Response Questions need some more work. Make them read like short stories or roleplay scenarios with detailed actions and better dialogue. Your current dialogue is rather choppy and it's a little hard to tell who's speaking.

 

4.  Broken/Missing skin screenshot. To include a screenshot, go to Imgur, drag your screenshot onto the home page and then click "Upload" when the new user interface pops up. When it finishes, right-click the image and select "Copy Image", then come back to your application and paste it in.

 

 

Please wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post before posting your next attempt. If you have any questions, please feel free to send me a message. I'd be happy to help!

Good luck with your next application!

[Roxforbraynz 251]

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