[Denied]My Human Application

[zachzilla1211 0]

[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name:Zachzilla1211
How old are you?:13
Time-Zone:Central
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?:Yes I have
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?:Not much but I role-played with people on a hack/mine server.
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?:Petridagamernerd
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/user/44159-zachzilla1211/
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-anthos-officially-t-h-e-1-roleplay-server/page__st__2800#entry21927435
Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?:Yes I will

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing:Playing as a character you created with his/her own history and to play as if you where them.
Meta-gaming: It's when someone makes a character but doesn't act like that character.
Power-emoting:
It's when someone will emote something that prevents someone from reacting to that emote.

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name:Hubrik
Current Age:37
Sub-race (if any):Northerner
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): Before he was born his parents went to Asulon. He lived in his parents inn most of his childhood. Many adventurers came to the inn and he loved their stories. He loved to see scholars and read their books. He would play the lute for all of the quests. His father died when he became 60. His mother went into a deep depression and he had to run the inn. Seven years passed and he had many offers to sell the inn. His mother died so he had to sell the inn.

     He bought a house in Nuremburg with the money he got from selling the inn and became a tailor. He stayed in business for six years. He went to Solace to get a better education. Five years had passed and he had traveled all over Asulon. After joining a caravan he sold his shop. His caravan was attacked by bandits and they stole almost all his money. He went to the cloud temple to become a healer. Using his tailoring skills he made a purple and green surcoat and bought armor. When he came to Anthos he went to the cloud temple to start his adventure.
Ambitions for the Future: Improving his swordsmanship skills and archery.[/b]
Personality: Always willing to do anything to get the job done and is very fierce and passionate about his beliefs.[/b]
Skills: Healing, Swordsmanship, Tailoring[/b]
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):He is bald, has blue eyes, and pale skin.http://www.tumblr.com/blog/theamethystking[/b]
Any other details you wish to share about your character:No[/b]

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. Whilst in the mighty human capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?[/b]

Answer: Slowly pick up my speed and walk in his direction. I start sprinting towards him and draw my sword." Guards there is an assassin in the keep!" I yell. The guards draw their swords and surround him. " Who are you?!" I demand from the figure. There is nothing but silence. " Answer!" Nothing. " Emperor what should we do?" Asks a guard. " Take him to the dungeon for questioning. And for you knight. You have done me a great service. One of my guards will reward you." And I would get my pay immediately and leave.


[b]2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?[/b]

Answer: I sprint towards and slash one across the chest and stab him in the gut. I spin around to dodge the others blow and slash his knee. I stab one through the neck killing him and stab the other through the chest. I knock the old mans blade from him and grab him by the neck." What do you have!" I kick the door down and open the chest." Please don't take my things." The old man pleads " Ok. I'll break them instead." I press down on a necklace with my foot." Have my money and leave me alone." " Much obliged sir." I say as I walk out.


[b]3. You are standing within the mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).[/b]

Answer: "Hello sir, what do you have to sell." " Everything on display." He says as I disregard his words I would like some purple dye for say, four Minas." Waiting for my offer to sink in. " Five Minas?" "No, only four it's only dye. I need it too keep my coat it's colour." " Fine, here's your dye." He says as we exchange the money and dye. " Thank you, sir." I say while pushing the dye in my back and walk off.

[IrishPerson 693]

~Under Review~

 

 

 

 

Sadly I have had to deny your application, the reasons are as follows:

 

 

• Your definitions are too short and they need examples too.
• Your past/history section is very broad. I would suggest adding some more detail to some parts of it.
• Your ORQ's lack detail. Also on your 2nd ORQ, you seem to be powergaming slightly, I would change this. You also destroy something that the man owns, and commit armed robbery, to do this you need a VA which you don't have thus you cannot do this. I would change this too.

 

Please wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post's edit (seen below) before posting your next attempt. If you have any questions, feel free to send me a message. Good luck with your next application.

Edited April 13, 2013 by MrGreene

[IrishPerson 693]

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