[Denied][High Elf] Madeline12345's Application

[madeline12345 1]

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

Your application has been...

 

 

 

Hello! After reading through your application, I've decided to deny it for the following reasons:

 

 

First off, I want you to expand on your meta-gaming and roleplaying definitions. Make them longer, and also add an example to both.

 

Secondly, gold is not the official currency. The official currency is called Minas. It is minor, but it's just something good to know.

 

Then, another things, PVP is not something that people say in roleplay. Yes, people do it sometimes, but it's not a term that people actually say when roleplaying.

 

In the question where you describe your skills, you mention that you're good with swords, bows, hunting, farming and survival. I can understand that your character knows how to survive, but where did she learn how to fight with a sword or bow? Where did she learn how to hunt and farm? You could add this to your biography to make it longer!

 

Your skin, whilst good, has one major problem with it. High Elves have pale skin, the skin that you currently have looks more like a Wood Elf.

 

Please add some dialogue to your first and second Open Response Questions, we want to see your best roleplaying capabilities.

 

In your last Open Response Question, you describe that the Dwarf wants you to bury some crack. Crack is not a drug that exists in LoTC as far as I know, however, you could change it to Cactus Green, as that is the most common drug that exists in the world of Anthos.

 

Another thing with your last Open Response Question. You give the Dwarf an enchanted flower. How, exactly, did your character get one? Someone cannot simply get an enchanted flower, plus, I don't see the use of that anyway.

 

I know that this may sound like a lot, but I know that you can fix this! Also, if I come over as mean to you, then I'm sorry, that is not my purpose, I am only trying to help you.

 

 

Please re-apply in 24 hours from this post's edit (seen below) or face instant denial. If you have any questions, feel free to pop me a PM!

Edited April 22, 2013 by MonkeyCoffee

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

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