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[MonkeyCoffee 516]

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Hello! After reading through your application, I've decided to deny it for the following reasons:

 

 

First of all, your meta-gaming and power-emoting definitons are incorrect. I suggest searching the definitions on the internet. But remember, don't plagiarise, write it in your own words.

 

Secondly, I found your biography to be very cliché. Parents being killed by bandits, that has been used many, many times before. I'm sure you can think of something creative that hasn't been used before! 

 

Then, I found no lore in your biography. Here is a link to the wiki to help you! http://www.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?/external/wiki

 

Some more stuff with your biography. "He didn't know to hide, run, climb a tree or fight. So he tried to reason with them.And as you may guess,That didn't work.So he ran" Apparently, your character didn't know how to run, but ran away. Why didn't he do that in the first place?

 

In the question where you describe your skills, your character seems to be good at some things, but you didn't explain that in your biography. I think that, by explaining how and when he learned those things, you could make your biography longer and more detailed. Also, add some weaknesses, your character seems like someone very over-powered.

 

All of your Open Response Questions need to be expanded greatly. Your first two Open Response Questions need dialogue and more actions, whilst you third one needs more actions.

 

For your first two Open Response Questions, you describe that you kill someone. You need a Villain Application for this, which you can make after you have been accepted to the server for more than a week. Also, you say "kill him" and "kill them". That is very heavy powergaming, as you give no chance for the other person to respond. Describe how your character attacks, but of course, this isn't allowed, unless they provoke you.

 

 

I know that this may sound like a lot, but I'm sure you can do this!

 

Please re-apply in 24 hours from this post's edit (seen below) or face instant denial. If you have any questions, feel free to pop me a PM!

Edited April 26, 2013 by MonkeyCoffee

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