[Denied]Ben127127's App. (Elf)

[jamesb 218]

[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

 

Minecraft Account Name: Ben127127

How old are you?: 15

Time-Zone: EST

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes.

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I have only played one other roleplaying server, but it was very fun.

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I looked up "Best RP Servers" and it came up.

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: None

Have you read the Elven lore, and shall you ensure you make us of it and follow it in your biography?:

 

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing: When you act like someone or something that your are not. When you play the role of something else.

Meta-gaming: Any out-of role act. (A disgrace if you ask me!)

Power-emoting:
An action that can be prevented, real, as in it could happen. Compared
to god emoting where it cannot be prevented. Expample of Power-Emoting:
"Joe kicks out at Bill" "Bill dodges kick" Example of God emoting: Joe
kicks out at bill" "Bill summons a dragon and eats everyone"

 

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:

 

Full Name: Drazel Meto

Current Age: 18

Sub-race (if any): None

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):
  I was born in the woods, with two happy parents to look after me. We
were rather poor, but we lived in the wilderness, and got our food by
picking apples and fruits off the trees. We never hunted. My mom,
Shalissa, was in love with animals. She would rather die than let me or
my father lay a hand on an animal. Every morning, me and my father would
go out, deep into the woods, to find the freshest apples. Then we would
eat them. They were always delicous. Because of my diet, I grew to be
very strong. I didn't know it at the time, but this was very important.
Life continued this way, until I turned 11. When I was 11, men came into
the forest we lived. They chopped down the trees, and began a village
near our house. It was about 2 or 3 miles off. The villagers were kind
enough, so we welcomed them, and we were invited to join one of there
feasts. There was meat there. My mom was horrified, and my father had to
take her home. I knew they wouldn't return. The villagers appoligized
and said they did not know she valued the lives of animals so much. I
told them it was okay, and after a while, things began to settle down. I
had had a delicous dinner, consisting of much fruit, and much salad. As
usual. I had begun to like these villagers. I thought they were all
knife. But then the man appeared, the man who was not nice. His name as
Herun. I smiled at him. thinking he was kind. He turned to me. In his
hands, was a very, very, large sword. I stepped back. Before I could do
anything, he brought the hilt of his sword down on my head. I crumpled
to the ground.

 

When
I awoke, my money had been taken. Everything had been taken from me.
Not that I had much, but it angered me. It angered me enough to convince
my parents to let me practice archery. I was a natural. And so I
learned archery for 7 years. I was an expert by my 18th birthday. Up to
this date, I still live in the cottage in the woods, near the village.

 

 

Ambitions for the Future: I plan to set up my own elfish village, and make sure no criminals like the man I met get into it.

Personality:
I am a kind, well natured elf, but I am also very determined, and it is
not good to get on my bad side. Behind all this, I love to read books.

Skills:
I am very good at archery, and picking foods such as apples, grapes,
and other fruits. I also can survive in the wilderness well, because of
the 18 years I spent living in the wilderness.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):

Any other details you wish to share about your character: http://i.imgur.com/kkK0bN7.png

 

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]

[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]

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[b]1. As you walk through the deep forests you hear the sound of whispering and snickering. Upon inspection you realize that a group of older elves are mocking a small elven child. How do you react?[/b]
I approach the older elves and shout at them to stop that nonsense. One of the larger elves turns on me, and laughs. I draw my bow threateningly. "Lay off this boy. Why don't you pick on someone your own size?" I see the boy scurrying away, and watching from a safe distance. Two of the largest elves turn on me. "Ha! How about you, bud?" They crack their knuckles. Only then do I realize they are unarmed and will rely on brute force. Fools, I think to myself. I sprint towards them, and at the last second dive to my left. The elf had swung his fist where I was standing, and stumbled. I am much faster than the rest of them, and I run towards where the boy was watching. Do to my 18 years in the woods, I am very strong. I pick up the boy and run off before they can realize what happens. Once i'm sure were safe, I walk with the boy home, and tell him to keep clear of those men.

 

Answer:

 

[b]2. Whilst wandering through the Elven forests you come across a frail old man with a walking stick. He collapses in front of you, falling to the ground with a sharp thud. Out of his pocket falls a small pouch of gold coins, which hits the ground and splits open spreading coins across the pathway. The man lies there, defenseless - what do you do?[/b] The old man hits the ground with a thud. I dash over to the man, and help him up. "Thank.. thank you,sir..." Murmers the dreary old man. I realize he's hurt. I hand him the cain, and return his pouch of money. I tear off some cloth from my shirt, and use it to repair the coin sack. I walk with him to a hospital, where I watch his recovery for about an hour, until I am sure he will be okay, and leave.

 

Answer:

 

[b]3. Whilst traversing the Elven Woodlands, you come across a small clearing in which a colored carriage sits. A trader stands outside of it and calls you over, telling you of his wares. He points out that his carriage sells just about everything, and that he's
willing for you to haggle for a price. What does your character do?
(Please include:- item, haggling for prices and the discussion
involved).

 

Answer:
"Ah, well, I was just taking a walk, so I don't have many Minas on me. But I suppose.. How much would'ya do for a nice cold ale?" I ask, suddenly in need of an ale. The man laughs. "A good old ale. How about 15 Minas, if you don't got much. "How did you know?" I ask, laughing. "I only have 15 Minas." I hand over the money and he returns the ale. he pulls one out for himself. "Cheers!" we clang our glasses together. I drink some of the ale, and continue my walk through the forest, sipping ale as I go.

[cruzazul 2815]

 

This was a very good app and very closer to acceptance but, Unfortunately your application has been denied. Here are some things that need to be improved if you are wanting to reapply.

 

Your power-emoting definition is incorrect. Feel free to use the wiki to find the correct definition but don't plagiarize, and I can tell you god emoting and power emoting are the same thing.

 

Your biography is a good length and has a nice story behind it but it does not include enough server lore. Try to include town names or notable events pertaining to your race. You can find all of this information on our lovely wiki.

 

You could describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Please post an actual picture of your character's skin, not the layout of it.

 

Make sure to post your application on the Lord of the Craft thread on the minecraft forums. You've seemed to leave that part out of your application.

 

I would also suggest that you fill out everything in a third person point of view.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

[cruzazul 2815]

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