[Denied][Dwarf] Retsuwolf

[FlowUster 99]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

 

Minecraft Account Name: RetsuWolf

How old are you?: 13

Time-Zone: Central Time Zone (US)

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: None in Minecraft Servers. Only in video games such as Fallout 3.

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: CaptainSheepy, formerly known as sionthesheep, who plays on this server told me about it on enjin.

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-anthos-officially-t-h-e-1-roleplay-server/page__st__3080#entry22472568

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): Yes, the link is above. 

Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes, I have read the Dwarven lore and I will be certain to use it in my biography in some ways.

 

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing: Playing as a fictional character who is playing in a fictional world.

Meta-gaming: Game that uses more information than just what is provided to vary the players decisions. 

Power-emoting: Using fake emotions to gain more power or control over someone. 

 

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:

 

Full Name: Yedvric Lagor

Current Age: 54

Sub-race (if any): Mountain Dwarf

Clan (if any): No but I intend to join a pre-existing clan on the server if I am accepted.

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

    Yedvric Lagor was born to a loving father and mother. In his early life Yedvric his mother had taught him more table manners and polite traits than any dwarf could dream of. His father had taught him how to act towards aggressive people and how to save himself from becoming a drunken dwarf like his father used to be. He taught him many different combat skills needed to survive while in battle against the hated orcs. Yedvric was taught to hate orcs and long for their death. The family didn't have much money so he was forced to help his father mine to sell the jewels that were found and to chop wood for fires every night. All this time spent alone in the forest cutting trees and in the mine collecting jewels had made him love animals more than most people. He would never tell anyone but he secretly wished that everyone, even the orcs and dwarves, would get along. 

    As years rolled on his father eventually died in the mines from a large gravel pit which had broken a weak spot in the cave he had been in. His mother went into a great deppression and one day when Yedvric woke up she was gone. There was a note saying she had headed east in search of a wizard who could cure her from her mournfulness. He later found out that she had been hunted down by a pack of orcs who had smelled her as she went by. This had given him his pure hatred for orcs and hardened any soft spots in his heart. He no longer wished that orcs and dwarves could live in peace together. He had a wish to find those orcs and slay them just as they did his mother. 

 

Ambitions for the Future: Create the great underground city of Yedvric.

Personality: Curiosity usually gets the best of him. If there is something shiny than he wants it. He doesn't have any family left and will seek the ores that the ground has to offer over any woman. He likes to watch sunsets on the highest mountains and prefers animals over most humans.  

Skills: Climbing mountains, has a keen eyesight, it had been said to him that he would make a great thief. Though he would never admit, he secretly agrees. Hand to hand combat is one of his mastered skills.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): His hair is red and he likes to grow his beard very long. His pants are of worn leather and his shirt is a very ragged blue. He has big eyebrows and elfish looking ears. One large stripe of red hair goes from his forehead, through the middle of the top of his head, and down the middle of the back of his head. He has a lighter skin tone, as most Mountain Dwarves do. 

Screenshots: 

    Front: http://25.media.tumblr.com/186296a3dd28f0a348e43bdec3e3ed0d/tumblr_mn0u91WYw41s9pcq9o1_400.png

    Back: http://25.media.tumblr.com/ab5c6dfa414bb255d9aac43e5d98f6f3/tumblr_mn0u91WYw41s9pcq9o2_400.png

Any other details you wish to share about your character: Beacause of his father's death by gravel Yedvric will never step foot in a cave with gravel above it. He often dreams of how his would be if she hadn't died.

 

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

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1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do?

 

Answer: As I was deep in the caverns of Kalos I had spotted a deposit of diamonds shimmering in the light of my torch. As I searched for a way to get accross the ravine to the deposit I noticed a small bridge of rock and stone. I knew the bridge would be too small and unstable to hold a muscular keg pounding dwarf like me. Even just the thought hurts but I knew that I had to let go and act like I never saw those diamonds. 

 

2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What do you do?

 

Answer: As I was drinking my first pint of ale after a long day of mining I notice a small boy sitting next to me crying. 

"And what is the matter now young man?" I asked the little boy.

"I broke one of the local barter's prized vases while playing with a toy father has made." The boy says while still sniffling.

"Does he know it was you who broke the vase?" I ask.

"I don't think so but father tells me that he has secret men who survey the scene to make sure nobody is stealing from the barter" the boy says in a scared voice.

"Well why don't we go find the barter and tell him about this incident. Perhaps he will let you work for him to pay off the price of the vase" I say while getting up.

I then notice two shady looking men in the corner getting up and walking towards us. One has a small dagger. He begins to approach the young dwarf. This is not the first time I have encountered someone with a dagger. I am experienced in the art of hand to hand combat and know I can protect the boy.

"What do you want dwarf!" I shout at the man with the dagger.

"That young child has broken my bosses vase and I must take him to the king to be thrown in the dungeon at once!" The man says back to me stearnly.

"I am taking this child to the barter so he can work off the damages causes" I say back to the man.

"Fine I will let you go this once, but you better choose your moves wisely next time young man! Or it will be the dungeons for you!" 

I don't want to cause a scene so I tell the boy to follow me as we make our way to the barter.

 

3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?

 

Answer: It surprises me to see a dwarf this far down in the caverns who has managed to sustain enough ale to share with others. I have been wandering through these caves for quite a while and have built up a strong thirst for some ale. 

"Well hello there Ulgrau! You are just the person I wanted to see after so long in the mine!" I say to the bar owner.

"Ahh Yedvric, a regular customer. How about another pint of ale to calm quench your thirst?" He says as he hands over a pint of ale.

"Well these mines are no place for a drunken dwarf like you. Why don't you get back to serving those other customers of yours" I say while drinking my pint.

"I suppose I should be on my way back. I don't want to pass out in these caverns" He says.

We wave goodbye as he sets off back up the caverns and I get back to my usual mining.

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Here are some things that need to be improved if you are wanting to reapply.

 

Add more lore to your biography. You hardly mention anything pertaining to our LotC unique lore. If you need help finding the lore page click here.

 

Expand on your first and third ORQs, adding dialogue to them both.

 

Describe your character in more detail. Right now his attitude and personality is vague and could definitely use some revising.

 

Your power-emoting definition is somewhat correct but could be expanded on. Try to add examples to all three of your definitions.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

[cruzazul 2815]

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