[Denied]Redpen900's Application [Elf]

[TheRedPengu 0]

[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name:Redpen900
How old are you?:17
Time-Zone:Southern
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes I agree and I have read the rules.
What previous experience have you had in role play?:Yes plenty of times once on another server like this one and through some Chatzy harry potter role plays.
How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?: I saw a YouTube video on it and I thought it looked cool.
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: this one : http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/85578-redpen900s-application-human/ and this one: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/83719-elf-redpen900s-application/
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-anthos-officially-t-h-e-1-roleplay-server/page__st__3240#entry22817834
Have you read the Elven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes I will try my best.

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Being someone your not a fictional character in a fictional world.
Meta-gaming: Making your character know something they are not supposed to know like when you see someone's nametag through a wall your not allowed to turn the corner and start hurting them when your in war.
Power-emoting: Forceful or powerful Role playing. Power-emoting is when you do an action like *Kills bob* before giving the other player a chance to react.  

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Kronus Calverius
Current Age:200
Sub-race (if any):
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long

 

):Kronus was born to two elves named Millisa and Fronar Calverius on an island in a lake in the realm of Anthos. Kronus was born with a small heart condition. Little did they know this would affect him later in life. After a couple of years Kronus was then taught how to a wield a sword. Kronus praticed for years to develope his skills. Then the family got robbed when Kronus was around 50 years old, thus making them move to an Elvish slum so they could find work. Then 10 years later when Kronus was 60 his father and mother could not support the family even with they're other child Somnius. So Kronus was sent off to the city of Laurelin to find work for his family.
 

 

After days of wandering the streets of the city cold and hungry Kronus sat on a bench infront of a blacksmith's forge. "What are you staring at boy?" said a man behind him. "I wasn't staring at anything sir." and for some reason the man smiled. "I like your attitude boy, would you care for a bit of supper at my house later tonight? You look very hungry."  "Yes please." Kronus replied then the young elf followed him into the forge. That night Kronus ate a marvelous home cooked meal. "What's your name?" the man asked at the table after dinner. "I'm Kronus what's yours?" asked Kronus not knowing this would be the start of a long friendship between the human and the elf.  "I am Allan but you can call me Al." Al said smiling. "Well I best be going now." Kronus said looking grimly. "Oh ok do your parents know your here?" Kronus looked at him the only reason he was here was because of his parents a surge of anger went through him his blue eyes looking up at him. "My parents are in another place I best be going to my allyway and sleep there." Kronus opened the door that lead out of the house then the Al (Who was a Human by the way.) stood up putting a hand on Kronus's shoulder and said "You can stay with us if you like I could get you a job at the forge aswell." Kronus looked at him with wide eyes and nodded slowly how could he ever repay Al for his generosity. The very next day Kronus started to work on small things like nails and horse shoes for local farmers and builders. 10 years later Kronus was at his full potential for smithing make axes, war hammers, swords and knifes. Kronus then later made enough profit to buy a small home near the smith so he could easily get to work in the morning. He then started to get offers from the elvish army to make more and more weapons. Kronus started to get overwhelmed and took a leave of absence for a while. Kronus traveled to The slum where his parents lived and there was no sign of them. Kronus soon found out that his family left to move to one of the higher elvish communities and left him behind.

 

Sad and angry Kronus traveled home to Laurelin and continued working for Al. Then 20 years passed and Al was growing old. Kronus saw that Al could hardly work the forge anymore and that it was killing him. Kronus tried to convince Al to stop working the forge. He didn't suceed until a year went by and Al died infront of the forge right before Kronus's eyes. Kronus was mad and confused why Al didn't heed is warning. Kronus then later at the age of 199 set off on an adventure to clear his mind of the rage and sadness he had inside him, hoping all his problems will be solved.

 

Ambitions for the Future: To solve his emotional problems and clear his mind of Rage.
Personality: Gets angry very easily. Kronus is very polite (As you can see when Al offered him to come over for dinner.) he usually keeps his anger inside and try's to  never inflict it on people.
Skills: Swords, crafting, Archery
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): He has Blonde hair and blue eyes. He isn't very beefy but average muscle tone. Very beat up hands form working at the forge for a long period of time. Dear Lord of the craft staff the uploading thing says that "I do not have enough allotted disk space for attachments" SO therefore I cannot attach the in game skin screenshot I can give you the link though :http://www.minecraftskinspro.com/default.asp?action=readreviews&link=26788 It's a simple elf skin with normal square eyes and blonde hair wearing green clothes skin is pale.
 

Any other details you wish to share about your character: Sorry about the inconvenience i'll try not to have it happen again, please consider this and look at the link.

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. As you walk through the deep forests you hear the sound of whispering and snickering. Upon inspection you realize that a group of older elves are mocking a small elven child. How do you react?[/b]

Answer: I walk through the forest minding my own business when I hear snickering and whispering. I peer over the bushes to see a small group of older elves mocking a small elf. I walk over to them "Now, now kids play nice." I say to them calmly all of the group members turn me and glare at me one of them says "And why should we?" the group start to look at me in anger. "What did this young one ever do to you it's not like he's a dreaded monster waiting to eat you." Some of the group members spit on the ground. "Yeah what if your a monster? Let's get him!" They run towards me I unsheathe my sword they quickly move back and glare at me angrily one last time and run away. "T-thank you.." The little elf says looking at me with wide eyes. "No problem now return home little one." I watch as the small elf returns to his mother and father waving at me as I walk down the road of the forest.

[b]2. Whilst wandering through the Elven forests you come across a frail old man with a walking stick. He collapses in front of you, falling to the ground with a sharp thud. Out of his pocket falls a small pouch of gold coins, which hits the ground and splits open spreading coins across the pathway. The man lies there, defenseless - what do you do?[/b]

Answer: After the Old man fell I offer him my hand to get him up. "Are you ok?" I ask he looks at me with a grateful smile "Yes I'm fine guess I'm not what I used to be." the man starts to pick up his coins I begin to help him and put them  in a small leather bag and give it to the man. "Here is your money back." the man looks at me smiling, "Thank you, kind sir" he says as he walks away towards his home not very far from here. "No problem" I say and walk away looking back at the old man to make sure he does not fall again.

[b]3. Whilst traversing the Elven Woodlands, you come across a small clearing in which a colored carriage sits. A trader stands outside of it and calls you over, telling you of his wares. He points out that his carriage sells just about everything, and that he's willing for you to haggle for a price. What does your character do? (Please include:- item, haggling for prices and the discussion involved).

Answer: "Welcome, welcome to Bjorn's fine goods we sell everything that you could possibly need!" I walk over to the trade caravan. "Anything, do you sell food?" "Yes I do got carrots and apples bread and meat I even sell cake as a little treat!" I look at the food some of it looks rotten "How much for the apples?" I ask "I will go 20 Minas For 6 of them." I look at him this didn't seem like a fair deal. "How about 10 Minas for 6 of them?" I ask him starring him down "I'll go 5 for fifteen" He said "Five for twelve final offer." "Fine, fine you have yourself a deal." He hands me the apples and I pay the money. Then  later that night I noticed they were rotting I run back to the trade caravan only to see it was gone.
 

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Here are some things that need to be improved if you are wanting to reapply.

 

To say your character was born on an island in the middle of a lake is a bit vague. Try to name an actual area from our lore instead of putting a vague lake. There of a ton of lakes in the world of Anthos. You don't have to put the name of the lake but maybe the area the lake is in. The Realm of Anthos is the entire continent so try to get into more detail.

 

Describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Expand on your second and third ORQs.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

[cruzazul 2815]

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