[Denied][Dwarf] Ignotis Application 2

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Out-Of-Character
Information





Please
fill out the following questions as accurately as

possible, and ensure the
essential details are accurate.











Minecraft
Account Name:Ian Smith





How
old are you?: 13





Time-Zone:
Eastern Standard





Have
you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes





What
previous experience have you had in role-playing?: SWTOR





How
did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: In my

minecraft clan





Link
any applications that you have previously made for the

server:
http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/90423-application-dwarf-ignotis/





Have
you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not,

then please do so
(link above):Yes





Have
you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make

use of it and follow
it in your biography?: Yes











Definitions





In
your own words define the following terms. Do not take any

definitions from
elsewhere!:











Role-playing:
Role playing is acting as something you are not

such as a super
hero.





Meta-gaming:
Using knowledge you would not have as your

character. For
instance if your friends warn you of a traitor you randomly kill

this person with no
reason.





Power-emoting:
Forcing your the actions of your character on to

others. For
instances Bobby speaks the magic words and all fall to their knees

and listen to his
every command.











In-Character
Information:





Complete
the following biography on your character:











Full
Name: Ignotis (Unknown)





Current
Age: estimated 9 seasons old





Sub-race
(if any):50% 50% Cave Dwarf/Mountain Dwarf





Clan
(if any):





Past
/ History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+

paragraphs long):


 

 

Life Before Loss of Memory: His father, Lon  Irongut, was a powerful member of the Irongut
clan. He had been preparing his son to become his heir as the Grand Engineer
when he died. His mother, Helen Grandaxe (Maiden name) was an unimportant part
of the Grandaxe clan. His mother and father met when Helen traveled to
Kal’Azgoth looking for a better life because she was down on her times.
Ignotis’ father took her in and they soon married and had one single child.

 

-There the story of Ignotis begins

 

Ignotis
does not know much about his early life. Ignotis was pulled out

of a pile of rubble
outside Kal'Azgoth at the age of around 7 seasons. He has no

recollection of
anything before this time. A man (assumed to be his

father) was also
pulled out. He was dead. It is thought that the two were

mining in this'
remote area for rare minerals when the tunnel collapsed.











After
this he is given food and was provided with some money and

a first name.
Without a clan he sets out to find a place where he belongs. Now

he has a great fear
of mining and will not under any circumstance go into the mines.

Somewhere in his
past he must have been training as an engineer or builder

because now Ignotis
is most comfortable building. It is his only connection to

the past. It also
keeps him out of the mines. He runs a shop where he creates custom inventions.
However business has not been coming lately and he is frustrated he wants to
make a change in the world. He wants to be remembered. 











Ambitions
for the Future: Find his mother if she is still alive,

Build equipment of
all sorts from farming to military and make a living with

his passion. Fit in.
Be great (be remembered)





Personality:
Generally friendly but if you have acute senses you

might notice a scar
still unhealed from the trauma of the accident. Sometimes

distant. Brash and
inexperienced in the workings of the world due to his

adolescence.











Skills:
Building can build military equipment and other devices.

Keen mind. Can use a
sword but is by no means a skilled swordsman.











Appearance
(this must include an in-game screenshot of your

skin):





Height
4'5





Eye
Color: Amber 





Braided
Beard





http://i.imgur.com/ZyiLcpI.png





Any
other details you wish to share about your character:











Open-Response-Questions





Each
question in this section must be answered with a minimum

of one paragraph which
must describe the event in full. Please be as

descriptive as possible
and do not break character or lore at any point.





____











1.
Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a

large deposit of
diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There

is a very thin rock
bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only

way to access the
deposit. What do you do?











A
large deposit of diamonds sits tantalizingly close across that

treacherous sone
bridge. Ignotis decides that the risk is worth the reward and he calls upon his
to friends. "Ye will get half profit for insuring my safety.

. By using a safety
rope recently created by Ignotis

they help him
across. The cross over passes with no

incident however
Ignotis’ legs tremble as he crosses. On the way back he grumbles about mining
under his breath. Then all of a sudden the bridge crumbles. Ignotis curses
"Gailuk" as he is left hanging in the middle of the canyon. However
his friends manage to reel him back to safety. He stands there brushes off his
clothing and says “hat was fun”. Inside he thinks how he would never want to do
anytig like that again. His friends stare admiring his courage one speaks up
“you are the bravest of us all”. Ignotis smiles in his head he thinks “I wish”









Answer:











2.
You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of

ale in your hand -
sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going

through a bad time.
He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden

hammer toy. In the
other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting

whispering to each
other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up,

one with a small
dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What

do you do?











Ignotis
steps between the scum and the innocent boy and draws his sword

hoping to not have
to use it. He knows if it comes down to it he will lose a

fight. Ignotis has
only one option, intimidation. So he bellows "If either of

you cowards dare
touch this boy then I think you will find it hard to enjoy

your gains with your
heads sitting separated from your shoulders". The two

dwarfs look at each
other then at Ignotis one sheathes the dagger and then they both bolt

quicker than
lightning. The boy says "Do ye have anythin at all to give" Ignotis
gives

him money and then
leaves, there is nothing more he can do for the boy.











Answer:











3.
Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a

voice call out to
you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on

your heel and see a
heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on

his face, and a mug
of ale in his hand. How do you react?









Ignotis
stroked his gruff beard as he continued through the cavern. A drunk bartender
says from behind “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!” Ignotis hates
alcohol but no self-respecting dwarf would say no so to keep Image he follows. There
are

men drinking away
the troubles of the day. The bar owner hands Ignotis a mug and he chugs it
down. When he finishes he shouts "The next round is on me"! He hopes
that that will keep their respect even if he can only drink 1 or 2 pints. After
sitting watching as the men drank 5, 10, and then 12 pints of bear he begins to
stagger home. He vomits up the 2 pints of bear he drank. At least the men
respected him now.

Answer:

[IrishPerson 693]

~Under Review~

 

 

 

Sadly I have had to deny your application, the reasons are as follows:

 

• Your definitions need to be expanded upon slightly.
• Your biography lacks quite a bit of detail, I would suggest expanding on it.
• Your ORQ's are very short and need to be expanded on vastly.

I would also suggest fixing this formatting, it make it very hard to read. 

 

Please wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post's edit (seen below) before posting your next attempt. If you have any questions, feel free to send me a message. Good luck with your next application.

Edited June 20, 2013 by MrGreene

[IrishPerson 693]

Moved to Denied Forum