[Denied][Dwarf]Trueoaks

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[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: TrUeOaKs
How old are you?: 15
Time-Zone: GMT+2
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes 
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: World of Warcraft, LOTRO, D&D etc.
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I saw a video of it on YouTube
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/90609-dwarftrueoaks/
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): Yes I did.
Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: You play a person who is not you, you must listen to rules like in this game you have to Hail every guy you see. You need to look like that person, you have to make the other persons to believe that you are another person.
Meta-gaming: Is information you know that your character don't. For example using my knowledge in math to solve the hard problem. Meta-gaming is wrong because in roleplay you need to play your character and use his knowledge. Like in real life it cannot be that you will know about something you never heard of.
Power-emoting: Is when you do a move without giving the other person to react on it. It's wrong because then goes that one person doing something while the other standing in his place doing nothing and watching him doing it. e.g. "TrUeOaKs sees that the dark knight runs towards him. OaKs taking out his sword. The knight attacks and OaKs falls down. OaKs killing the knight by cutting his legs." That's Meta - Gaming.

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Oaks Drugo
Current Age: 4 seasons (28)
Sub-race (if any): Forest Dwarves
Clan (if any): none
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

Oaks was born in a forest in the nation of  Kal'Urguan at the year of 1336 when the Great War have been started. His father was a lumberjack and his mother was a farmer. Oaks was a fast learner his father taught him how to lumberjack while his mother taught him how to farm. In 1340 when the Chaecus Braveaxe is murdered by the Undead High Prophet the village was taken by the undead. Due to starvation his mother dies and he and his father trying to run away but with no success. 

 

At the year of 1345 Oaks and his father escaping the chaos that happens in Aegis. They are escaping to Asulon and there Oaks's father dies. When Oaks has his fourth season he manages to go back to Aegis to avenge the undead and the orcs for all the sufferings they made. Here where the adventure starts :)

Ambitions for the Future: Kill as many orcs and undead as possible.
Personality: Brave, Wise, Strong.
Skills: He knows how to use sword he learnt it from a traveler that helped him, farming from his mother, lumberjack from his father.
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): http://imgur.com/rIgcAIO

Oaks with the helmet his friend traveler gave him while teaching him how to use sword.

Any other details you wish to share about your character:

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do?[/b]

Answer: I will try to expand the bridge if it won't help I will try to move around check if there is another way. If not I will turn back and go because I promised to revenge the orcs and the undead so that's what I'm going to do.

[b]2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What do you do?[/b]

Answer: I will stand between the dwarf with the knife and between the young dwarf. "What are ye' doin'?" I'll ask the approaching dwarf and he will answer me. If not or if I see that he wants to hurt the guy I'll say "Get to yer' sit and drink yer' ale" If he listens my work is done and I go with the young one out. If not I will defend the little lad.

[b]3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?[/b]

Answer: I'll approach the bar tender and ask him : "Great day isn't it? From what ingredients did you make this ale?" if he answers with a grin on his face I ask him to excuse me and I'm leaving him. If he seems friendly I drink the ale. If I fell bad I'm taking my sword and killing the bar tender. Then I will search for milk and I'll drink it.

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

Your application has been...

 

 

 

Hello! After reading through your application, I've decided to deny it for the reas. Don't be discouraged however, as I'm sure you will be able to fix the issues!

 

 

First off, you've got your roleplaying definition slightly wrong. I suggest reading up on it, but remember, write it in your own words, don't plagiarise. That -can- get you banned!

 

Secondly, you'd need to be far older than twenty-eight (28) to be coming from Aegis. At least about ninety (90) years.

 

Then, I've seen a few wrong things in your biography. You cannot simply return from Aegis back to Asulon, since Aegis was destroyed. And currently, we are in Anthos, that is a different continent since Asulon also got destroyed. I greatly suggest also removing the answer for 'Ambitions for the Future:' question, as it is very cliché.

 

All of your Open Response Questions need a lot of work. Expand on them and say what exactly you're doing in things like this "If not I will defend the little lad.". You could really expand on how you defend the small Dwarf, which makes it longer too!

 

 

Please re-apply in 24 hours from this post or face instant denial. If you have any questions, feel free to pop me a PM!

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

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