[Denied]Application No.3

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[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Below are suggestions I have listed that you should implement into your application before reapplying.

 

Your roleplaying and power-emoting definitions are incorrect. Feel free to look up the definitions but make sure you put them in your own words. Plagiarism will result in an application ban.

 

Make sure you post your application on the Lord of the Craft Minecraft Forums thread as well as our forums here.

 

As far as I know the village of Coterie does not exist on the server. Try to add an actual city in your biography. I'd also like to see other things pertaining to lore put into the bio. All of this information can be found on our extensive server lore page listed above under the the gameplay tab. You can also check the forums for any lore.

 

Describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

I'd like to see you expand on all three of your ORQs and add more dialogue and emotes throughout. This is one of the most important sections of the application as it really shows how you are able to present yourself in a roleplaying situation.

 

Your character seems a bit overpowered. Try to limit his strengths and add a few more weaknesses it him.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial post before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

 

[cruzazul 2815]

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