[Denied][Cavern Dwarf] Patar15 Take 2

[patar15 0]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

 

Minecraft Account Name: patar15

How old are you?: 16

Time-Zone: EST

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: yes

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: Dungeon Realms Role-play server Us-11

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: on the Dungeon Realms forums here: http://www.dungeonre...ealms-Role-Play

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/90909-cavern-dwarf-patar15/

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): I will once I'm done filling out this application on this site.

Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: yes I have. It gave me more information than I knew about Dwarves

 

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing: to assume action upon something or someone. Mainly in make believe sceneos

Meta-gaming:  you knowing something about your character out of game that your character in the game does not know about and using it to your advantage. 

Power-emoting: putting your character in an un fair situation that no other charecter can control the outcome accept for you ooc. And you ignore roleplay most of the time.

Ex. Kevster snaped his fingers and all of a sudden he had million of troops to kill germany and theres nother they can do. (the example is a bit of a strech in story wise, but I think you get the point.)

 

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:

 

Full Name: Kevster Goldbludgeon

Current Age: beginning of my Fourth cycle. In human years:22

Sub-race (if any): Cavern Dwarf

Clan (if any): planning to join one. (maybe)

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

    Before my grandpapy was born our family was the richest of Kal'Urguan, Kal'Urguan. My parents have told me of many of these stories. I was inspired by my ancestry so much that I'm going to get my family's riches any way I can. I finally got my family's riches back at the age of two (cycles). I was walking back to my home Kal'Azgoth, Anthos and a rogue robbed me. I finally got home and I told my familly of the bad news they were crying and my dad banished me to the streets for my second cycle (seven years), because I said I promise to get our family's riches back. All I had left was the two gold rings in my red hair and the close on my back. There was no way for me to make money and since it was only a seventh of a cycle I decided to stay in Kal'Azgoth until my banishment from my family was over.

 

   I studied in mining and being a merchant trying to find the most efficient way to make money. Three-fourths of the way in my first cycle I have started on my adventure. I have travel to the nearest town and started my business as a worker of any kind that I can do at my age. When I was bansished for my second cycle I studied more in mining and being a merchant and any other way I can make money. When I was finally unbanished from my familly I told them what I have learned and they sent me to a school of merchanting with the little money tey had. This period of my life was the best part, But now my birthday is coming up and it will be my fourth cycle and I have graduated the school of merchanting. I have new gear now to make traveling as a merchant easier and I still have the two gold rings in my hair, because it reminds me when I got banished and I learn and studied alot at that time. Now my Adventure awaits to make my family's riches and to make my own economic empire! 

 

Ambitions for the Future: to make the largest economic empire "anyone has ever known".

Personality: very stubborn Dwarf that will do anything to get his family's riches back even

Skills: Mining and trading 

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):With armor as a prop:

<a href="http://imgur.com/j8SkMK8"><img src="http://i.imgur.com/j8SkMK8.png" title="Hosted by imgur.com"/></a>

Without armor as a prop:

<a href="http://imgur.com/gKsJmiV"><img src="http://i.imgur.com/gKsJmiV.png" title="Hosted by imgur.com"/></a>

Any other details you wish to share about your character:

I might even make my own inn, but still debating on it.

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

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1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do?

 

Answer: "Hmm seems way to dangerous for me to cross by myself. Maybe I can scam people some people to go get it for me." I say I go back up to the surface to get more people in the tavern, but before I do I get a contract to make a scam legal.

[i enter the tavern] "hey I have a great deal for some fearless treasure hunter. They will get all the money and glory you can imagine."

"I will take the challenge puny hiccup. What do I have to do?" says the strongest person in the tavern.

"Just sign this contract here" I say. He looks at the contract  and sees that he has to read a lot so he skips the reading and he signs it.

"Great I say now all you have to do is hire some people with your money to carry this contract out."

"You puny little..." just as he was about to punch me in the face I say

"Its part of the contract itself"

"Fine" with a mean look on his face. So we go down with the people he hired into the mines and he mines the diamond and he gives them to me. once he does that I said

"Great now you get nothing"

"Umm..... NO!"

"Its part of the contract. Nice doing business with YOU!"

 

 

2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What do you do?

 

Answer:

"Hey you!" I say

"Me?"

"Yes you! come with me!" I pull on his arm and leave the tavern as fast as I can.

"Why are you doing this? where are you taking me?"

"Those two men were about to kill you. I'm taking you anywhere that is safe"

they are on the side of the building against the wall as the two men run past them.

"Oh no! your going to get killed as well. Just leave me here please."

"No! i'm not going to let you die"

"Please! they already killed my friends and family I have nothing to live for *weeps more*"

"Who are they?"

"Men that I have Got a loan from"

"Number one tip in life never mess with them loan sharks"

"Yeah, I know now"

"Well.... no life is worth leaving behind to die for any reason and on top of that I'm willing to be your friend and maybe my family can adopt you as their own kin." we run to my home in Holm and change his name so he can start a whole new life.

 

3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?

 

Answer:

"Who are you?" I say.

"I'm a bar-owner of course the greatest in the land. I'm surprised you never heard of me"

"That's because bar-owners aren't that famous." *with the look of >.> on my face*

"I'm Kakashi. Remember me now"

"Yeah I do actually. I read about you in books that I have studied"

"I'm the one and only!"

"Why are you down here?"

"I got knocked out and mugged and I lost everything and I don't know how to get out."

"Come on I can show you the way out If you can teach me how to make the most money out of being a bar-owner"

"Sure, I'll do anything to get out of here in fact I will not only just Teach you how to make money, but I will make you my apprentice."

I work as kakahi's apprentice for several years then I continues my journey to get my family's riches back.

 

 

(NOTE: when you have dialog your supossed to make it in like a list don't believe me look it up.)

[IrishPerson 693]

~Under Review~

 

 

 

Sadly I have had to deny your application, the reasons are as follows:

 

• Your definitions are still too short and one of them could do with an example.
• You need to expand on your bio a bit more, paint me a picture with your character. Add more detail to the in-character questions.
• You need to expand on your ORQ's, add some more detail to them.

 

Please wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post's edit (seen below) before posting your next attempt. If you have any questions, feel free to send me a message. Good luck with your next application.

Edited June 27, 2013 by MrGreene

[IrishPerson 693]

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