[Denied][Dwarf] Wilsonssfc1998 (Resubmission) 1

[WilsonsSFC 0]

[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name:WilsonsSFC1998
How old are you?:14
Time-Zone: (UTC) Dublin, Edinburgh, Lisbon, London
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?:I have role-played on the Elder Scrolls games and on the Fallout series
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?:I heard about ages, when potatoorgy played on it. I just never had the time submit a application.
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:http://www.lordofthe...wilsonssfc1998/
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):http://www.minecraft...9#entry23103859
Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes I have

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Role-playing is when you create a certain character and roleplay their  actions, feelings and thoughts
Meta-gaming: Meta-gaming is when you use OOC information from the internet (or something else) and use it to your advantage. An example would be you know the exact location of a specific treasure, or something, because you read it on the internet. You then go know where the treasure is and this influences your characters actions
Power-emoting: Power-emoting is when you roleplay to your advantage. Example, I'm using a bow and saythat an arrow pierced who I'm fighting in the heart therefore he is dead without a fight

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Thorbar Thunderbeard
Current Age: 24
Sub-race (if any):Cavern Dwarf
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):[/b]

When Thorbar was young he lived with his mum and dad on a small house near Kal'Azgoth. His father was a miner and used to sell his ores to merchants passing by. His mother, she was a farmer, and supplied Thorbar and his father with food. While living with his parents he learn how to mine and to a certain extent, farm. During is younger life he rarely ever played with anyone, being on the outskirts of Kal'Azgoth, not ever really wanted to leave the city and play with him. With one his age to talk to he spent a lot of time exploring small caves and caverns. He began to exploring caves. He loved seeing all the wonders, the giant ravines. But what he loved the most was the ores. He loved seeing them glistering in the dark. On his 14 birthday his father got him his own iron pick axe. He was soo happy. Later that day they went mining, which was one of the first times Thorbar had ever went mining. Whilst down there he mined his first ever iron ore. This was one of he happiest days of his life. One day he thought to impress his father he should go to the mine by himself and mine a diamond. After a long day Thorbar finally came out the mine feeling sad that he never got a diamond, but everything wasn't what it used to be up above. His house brunt down, arrows impaled into the front door, blood on the floor. His house had been raided by bandits. His parents gone, nowhere to be seen, he ran to the mountains to live with his fellow cavern dwarfs. Filled with angry and regret he wished he never left the house that day his parents died. He swore that from that day, that he was going to mine a diamond, then become the greatest miner that ever lived 
Ambitions for the Future: To become the best miner in all the lands
Personality:Angry, not very sociable, talks to himself.  He is sympathetic and has a laugh when he feels good. He doesn't mind elves, but finds humans very distrustful. He is pretty greedy: if he found a lot of gold he would only share a small portion of it to anyone. He loves to drink and enjoys spending time at pubs and taverns
Skills: Can mine with good skill and can kind of farm. He is not very skill with a sword though and only rarely ever used an axe, expect from a couple of times. Combat he usually avoids, if he can. Sometimes his temper gets the best of him
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):http://www.minecraft...zer-dwarf-skin/. He is has a very long, brown beard and is no taller than the average dwarf at a height of 4'7" His eyes are a dark but they have yet to become used to the dark. His face looks very rough and has an alright complexion. His face also looks menacing. Also, on his back he has a small battle axe that he recovered from the ruins of his house.

Any other details you wish to share about your character:  

Open-Response-Questions
Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.
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1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do?

Answer: I look at the bridge and think about the odds. "It doesn't matter" I said to myself. I steadily walk across the path way whilst looking straight ahead. A bit of the bridge crumbles. I turn around looking back wondering whether I should go back or keep going. The bridge becomes even more unstable as more pieces fall. Panicking I run back to the other side. The bridge collapses. I stare at the diamonds. "If only I could have.... just made over there...... I would have got it... the diamond. I fell back on the ground against the stone wall. "Oi, you!" shouted a dwarf that was above me. "Yes?" I responded. "I'd been watching you try get them diamonds... shame you didn't get em" " Anyway I'd be wondering if you could tell me the way out of here?" he asked. "Only if I get paid" I said sounding very greedy. "Aye, you will.... just help me get outa here first, ok?" the other dwarf asked. "Ok then, wait till I get up there"! he said to him. I then walk back up the path that came down to the unstable bridge and I went off with the dwarf. 

2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and beginto approach the young dwarf. What do you do?

Answer: I look at the young dwarf and the two men. " Serves the wee'in right. Making noise while I'd be thinking" I say to myself. I then look away. I stop drinking and look back at the boy. I have memories of me when I was young and when I used to cry. And how my parents would take care of me. I stand up the stare at the two shady dwarves. "Put that dagger down you lowlife scum" I say with an intimidating tone. "What you go'in do, eh!" says the dwarf with the dagger. "I call the guard if you don't stop" I respond. The owner then burst in and shouts "ENOUGH! You two shady dwarfs get out my tavern. I'll be having no blood spilled here. NOW GO BE OF WE YA!" The two dwarfs storm of staring at me on the way out. I sat back down and think about what I did. "You ok there lad?" the owner asked me. "Aye, I'll be alright" I said. "Well the was a very noble thing to do, sticking up for the poor wee'in" "Here have another drink for free" he barmen said in a very kind tone. "O' why thanks!" I said back. I finished my last drink and drank the other one.

3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?

Answer:"Me?" I say sounding confused. "Yea you, c'mere!" the barmen says. "I suppose I wouldn't mind a drink" I respond. "Aye that's it c'mere and share a drink with me" says the barman cheerfully. I sat there with the barman drinking. "Where'd you be go'in?" the barman asks. "Em, I'd just be wandering about" I said. "Aye, well you'd be careful going through these cavern, ok?" The barman said sounding very caring. "Aye, I will" I said. "I don't suppose you'd be having a map of these caverns?" I asked. "Em, maybe. I'd have tae check may bag" The barman opened his bag while I drank the last of the ale. "Ah!" said the barman. "Here'd be a map of these caverns" he said. I put out my hand to take it. "Uh, these things don't come without a price eh?" said the barman with a different more sinister tone of voice. "Oh, k then 25 minas?" I said. "45 minas" said the barman. "Em, 32 minas, cmon can't go any higher than that" I responded. "Hmm 32 minas, well ok then" said the barman. I handed him over the minas and he gave me the map.  "Well I guess I'd better be off now" I said in a kind voice. "Just c'mere any time you'd be needing a drink" said the barmen. "Will do" I said back. I continued on my way through the caverns.

[Ford 1996]

 

-Your power-gaming definition is vague and-in my own opinion-rather incorrect. 

 

-Everything about your application is pretty average, but one thing that struck me as unpleasant was the end to your biography. Too many times has a player's parents died or been kidnapped by bandits. This story has been used an inordinate amount of times throughout all the applications read and reviewed, and many of them have been denied due to unoriginality. Your application, I'm afraid, is no exception. There are many other stories and character backgrounds that I'm sure you can think of other than the generic "my-parents-were-killed-by-bandits-and-my-house-was-burned-down-by-them-to" biography. I do like how Thorbar's childhood went, but until I came across the bandit part, I cringed. It's not your fault if you didn't know how overused that story was, but now I'm telling you: Think of something else, please.

 

You may re-apply after 24 hours. Please send me a PM if you have any questions.

[Ford 1996]

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