[Denied]Cccp_Zhulik's First Human Application

[Zhulik 3559]

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Below are suggestions I have listed that you should implement into your application before reapplying.

 

Your application is very good and very close to acceptance. I like that you've implemented a lot of lore into the biography but I think it is a bit vague. I feel like you can add a bit more to your character's story. And interesting event or notable person he met perhaps?

 

Describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Expand on your second and third ORQ and add a bit more dialogue throughout the answers.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial post before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

 

[cruzazul 2815]

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