[Denied]My Application

[MintyBirds 22]

[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: Cockatricevenom
How old are you?: 12,13 very soon
Time-Zone: Eastern Standard Time
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes, of course!
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I am on other roleplay servers, one of them I was accepted to by doing an application very similar to this. :D
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I was searching for actual roleplay servers, the others weren't my speed.
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: None
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): Yes
Have you read the Elven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: The act of choosing, or being chosen, a role to play in a game. This can include realistic chat, fantasy or not, in Minecraft. Minecraft is not the only way you can roleplay though, you can roleplay with your friends in a park or at your house even. Other games are strictly roleplay such as: Wizard 101, World of Warcraft, or Civilazation V.
Meta-gaming: Turning the tides in your or someone else's favor by using information that is otherwise impossible or unknown to others. Some examples may include: "*Dodges attack, strikes at the hole in the armour right next to the heart with a killing blow*" or just abusing mechanics.
Power-emoting: Power-emoting is a simple concept, a player forces another group/player so that it benefits the player that forces the action. Some examples may include: "*Turns into an ocelot and runs*" or "*Steals 100 Mina from xRpm14x*"

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Ame'ibar Taynuel'lenniel
Current Age: 102
Sub-race (if any): Wood Elf
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): I was raised in a roomy tree with my mom and my dad in Elandriel. I worked with my mom and dad at the local inn we took care of until I was about 18. We lived peacefully, and on my 20th birthday, I got a wolf. I was a hunter in Elandriel, and a decent one with a bow. The hunting was good until around about 50, I was severely wounded by an enderman. I was out in the wilderness at that time, so I used the familiar herbs in the unfamiliar surroundings to temporarily heal the wound. The last thing I knew was a creeper hiss right behind me, I was knocked out.

I woke up in a shabby hut, and along with the hut came with a geriatric human female. The time that I realized that I was almost dead, I asked the woman why she saved me. She said, "I need you for a favor young man, I need you to venture out to the middle of the world, aquire me three wither skelton skulls, and bring them back to me." "Why?" I asked, "Do you want your family never to be hurt by sickness? Do you want your family to be faster than an ocelot? What about having your family being the fastest workers? If you want any of these things, bring the skulls to me, and I will tell you what you need from there." She commanded. There was no point arguing, after all, she did save me out there I thought. So from there I set off to the center of the world, which is where my real story begins.

Ambitions for the Future: To get back to my family, and prosper once I have completed my quest.
Personality: I am very passionate, yet I am an introvert, so I do not get along with others as well as other elves. I am caring, naïve, and timid.
Skills: Good with a bow, redstone, and the hospitality business too
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): Come see it here! http://imgur.com/GdtJ8QR
Any other details you wish to share about your character: My weakness is a good ol' pumpkin pie

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. As you walk through the deep forests you hear the sound of whispering and snickering. Upon inspection you realize that a group of older elves are mocking a small elven child. How do you react?[/b]

Answer: I would very sneakily go behind the older elves. The small elf glances at me taking my bow out and his eyeballs bulge, mouth wide open, and whimpering. I get nervous, and shoot one of the older elves so that the little on gets the point. I hide behind a tree. A skeleton walks up behind me, and fortunately, the older elves attack the skeleton, so I nock my arrow against my bow again. The elves see my arrow poking beside the tree, and come closer to find a wood elf with a bow. I would jump out the other end of the tree, and hand a sword to the small elf. The small elf goes under the older ones, knocking their legs with his sword. I shoot a couple in the eye. One of the group dies, and they run away.

[b]2. Whilst wandering through the Elven forests you come across a frail old man with a walking stick. He collapses in front of you, falling to the ground with a sharp thud. Out of his pocket falls a small pouch of gold coins, which hits the ground and splits open spreading coins across the pathway. The man lies there, defenseless - what do you do?[/b]

Answer: I pick up his coins, put the coins back in the pouch, and notices that his walking stick is broken. I go away and try to find a sturdy mahogany, known for their strong and cherry hued wood. I find a mahogany and break a branch similar in size to the walking stick. I quickly hurry to the old man, and find him still lying there. I help the man up to his new walking stick, and I notice the bag is in my pocket. I give the bag to him, all his money back.

[b]3. Whilst traversing the Elven Woodlands, you come across a small clearing in which a colored carriage sits. A trader stands outside of it and calls you over, telling you of his wares. He points out that his carriage sells just about everything, and that he's willing for you to haggle for a price. What does your character do? (Please include:- item, haggling for prices and the discussion involved).

Answer: I ask, "Well really? If in that case you might have 3 wither skeleton skulls? Tell me how much," "1000 minas each bud, or you can negotiate a bit. It would be smart not to!" I thought about his offer, and shouted, "750 minas!" The man looked at me with disgust. "800 minas, each!" He offered with annoyance. "That's about 2 times the price of a diamond!" I shouted. "I know, but wither skulls are on high demand in the spring, so 775 minas, take it or leave it!" "Leave it," and at that, I left.

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Below are suggestions I have listed that you should implement into your application before reapplying.

 

The example for your meta-gaming definition is incorrect.

 

I'd like to see you add more information to your biography. I like that you've added a good amount of lore but the biography itself it a bit vague.

 

Describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Your first ORQ seems a bit unrealistic. In a sense I could say that you are power-emoting by killing them so easily. I'd like to see you change that accordingly.

 

Expand on all three of your ORQs.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial post before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

 

[cruzazul 2815]

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