[Denied][Orc] Phanaton

[phanaton 0]

[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: phanaton
How old are you?:16
Time-Zone:United States. West Coast time
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: aye
What
previous experience have you had in role-playing?: Skyrim, Uthrandir
Minecraft server, World of Warcraft, Oblivion. Mass Effect 1, 2, and 3
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I googled minecraft Roleplay servers, and saw you guys
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: none

 

MC Forums link )) : http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-anthos-officially-t-h-e-1-roleplay-server/

http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-anthos-officially-t-h-e-1-roleplay-server/

 

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): aye
 

Have you read the Orcish lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?:
aye

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing:
A means by which a person intends to escape the real world by entering
and creating their own world of fantasy of their making and experience
it through action, effectively making their own story
Meta-gaming:
you're in pandaria and no one is there, so you go online to battle.net
and look at a dynmap to see where a ton of people are converging, and
then you go there even though your character would not have known that
in reality
 

Power-emoting:you are
shot through the head with an arrow when you consented to fight, and act
as if it did nothing despite it piercing all the way through,
afterwards you claim it didnt work in the slightest way and had no
effect what so ever even though it should've killed you

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Megar Thirkel'Lur
Current Age: 43
Appearance: s1314.photobucket.com/user/phanaton/media/2013-07-17_225919_zps5f7b94e0.png.html

 

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

 

The
tent was filled with the smell of acacia wood and almond burning in the
fire in the center of the small tent. A leg of Jabbernack roasting over
the fire, the fat sizzling as it fell into the fire with a satisfying
pop. A loud but not deafening groan echoes through the tent, as an
orcish woman gives birth to her son, the pain of many scorpion stings
felt all over her body from the birth. She continues grunting and
groaning for about three hours before the orc child is born with naught a
cry sounding from it. The Orc Womans husband comes over trying to help
her up but is waved off, the woman almost shouting "ger' off, ye' tink'
eh' can'it move meh' sef, Bah! shove off, buh gimme da' kid, ah' wan'
ta' look at is' face," she says as the husband grumbles and and
carefully hand the baby to her, the woman once more speaking "es' nah
scrawneh' fank God fer' dat, e' looks strongah' den uddahs' too, mebbe
dats' me though' eh," she says a small smile tugging at her lips as she
nurses the baby.

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Megar
stood in the arenas ring arms spread and legs wide, staring into the
eys of his opponent, a large wolf with a thirst for blood looking back,
growling and occasionally snarling as it paces. Megar, growls back and
beats his chest in a 'Come On!' gesture, making taunting whimpers and
barks, the wolfs eye getting wider and rage filling its eyes. Megar
sneers, laughing, the wolf lunges at Megar, teeth bared and aimed for
his throat, Megar tumbles to the ground the wolf digging its claws into
his chest and trying to snap at his face. Megar snarls and Bites down on
the wolfs snout, creating a few deep cuts that bleed lightly as the
wolf disengages, batting its snout in pain, Megar makes taunting whimper
sounds as he laughs. The wolf snarls and howls, Megar charging the wolf
and wrapping his arms about its neck, wrestling the beast into a hold,
Megar looks to the crowd and then to his mother, the woman shouting and
swinging her fist, crying "Blood! Blood! Blood!" Megar smiles grabs the
snout of the wolf. The wolf thrashes, its mouth held tight, as Megar
swings the beast onto a sharp rock nearby, piercing it almost through as
the beast howls and stops thrashing, its blood pools around it, Megar
yells to the sky as the crowd cheers, banging on the bone wall
separating them from the ring.

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Megar
yawned, leaning against an acacia tree, watching as the sun set
painting the sands as if it were a sea of specks of dried blood. Megar
thought of this day he had gone through, he had killed a jabbernack and
made a nice pair of boots, pants, and cushioning for his lethal
gauntlets insides. He had raided that abandoned ruin and killed the
miserable hermit that lived there and brought a healthy chunk of loot
back to his tent in the camp careful to give some to Krug as thanks for
his strength. And he had beaten the local drunkard in a chugging contest
by one drink, but Megar meditated most of all on the hermit he had
killed, and the color of the sands. Megar yawned, thinking about how his
life was and sighed, leaning all the way back and falling asleep,
images of pillaging and destruction of human villages and cities playing
through his head.
 

Ambitions for the Future:
He wants to be the best brawler in the world, He wants to eventually
become a chieftain of his own clan, and he really wants to become the
best hunter
 

Personality:
competitive and brave, Megar will often charge into situations where he
is outnumbered or possibly outmatched, one who always wants to improve
his skill in brawling, and one who is deeply dedicated to the
continuation of his race as a whole and he likes to make beers and ales
from animal blood.
 

Skills:an
amateur brawler at best always trying to improve his fighting prowess,
he also has a fighting spirit that makes him most effective when hes
competing against someone who may be stronger than him, he has good
tracking and hunting skills also
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):
Any other details you wish to share about your character:

 

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. You are roaming the mighty capital of the War Nation Of Uruks, as you near the Arena you spot an Orc, wearing what seems to be human garbs as he looks at you he smiles and say out loud in common not in blah “Come friend let me teach you of civilization and break your mind from this orcish savagery!”, how do you react?[/b]

Answer:
Megar lets him finish his sentence and then cracks his knuckles and neck
smiling widely, "ye' er' needin' a bit' a' knockin' te get yer ead' on
straight 'eh? And one o' dem' orcs dat' joins a humie ain' nuh friend o'
mine, and anudder fing'" Megar says as he walks up, slamming the orc in
the gut and slamming him to the ground hard enough to knock him down,
Megar spits into the street and continues walking.
 

[b]2. As you are watching an Arena fight between two Orcs, the Goj of Krug walks towards the Arena, and shouts “Mi brudderz da Feztivel ob Krug iz coummeh! We needz zacrifizez tu zummun da Zpirit ob Krug un diz uzg, go gadder da Warbandz nd raid da landz nd bring mi buck zacrifizez, twiggy nd pinky dat we kan zlauhater upun da alter ob Krug nuw go mi Brudderz!” How do you react to this?[/b]

 

Answer:
"untin' pinkys? Ha! les' do' it den! been too long since I unted
somefin' worth me' time. Megar says, walkin checking his backpack to
make sure hes stocked up enough. Megar looks to the Goj of Krug and
smiles widely, shouting "les' go untin' eh' boys?".
 

[b]3. As you are travelling in the barren Orcish deserts you come across a quiet oasis. Beside it sits a small tent where a young orc is preparing a meal of roasted halfling. He calls you over, offering you to join in with his meal. What does your character do?[/b]

Answer:

Megar smells the intoxicating meal and walks up, licking his lips and salivating slightly over it, smiling and thanking the orc with a nod of his head.  Megar takes a seat and pulls out a carving knife cutting off the arm and beginning to eat it like a chicken leg eating noisily. Megar finishes, belching loudly and tossing the bone behind him into the water, belching again, even louder. "das' gud' halflin' orky, thank ye'." Megar says, with another satisfied belch.

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Below are suggestions I have listed that you should implement into your application before reapplying.

 

Your ORQs contain a bit of power-emoting. One example would be the first. Having your character slam and knock the air out of someone is somewhat categorized as such. I'd like you to add more emotes to that attack to show your character actually went through some sort of effort to do so.

 

I'd like you to expand on all three of your ORQs. You have a good amount of dialogue just add a bit to it.

 

Describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial post before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

 

[cruzazul 2815]

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