[Denied]Application Submission

[DarkCloud96 0]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible,
and ensure the essential details are accurate.

 

Minecraft Account Name: XxDarkCloud96xX

How old are you?: 17

Time-Zone: Australian EST

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I have played
Dungeons and Dragons with my friends.

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: My friend who plays
on your server.

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: None

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then
please do so (link above): Yes

http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-anthos-officially-t-h-e-1-roleplay-server/page__st__3620#entry23847306

Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it
and follow it in your biography?: Yes I will.

 

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any
definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing: To play to role of a specific person or character in a
fictional universe. To think as they would and react to situations as they
would.

Meta-gaming: Using out of character information to help yourself or
other players in game.

Power-emoting: Deciding the outcome of your emoting. i.e: *Larry stabs
Albert in the head and wins the fight*

 

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:

 

Full Name: Drew Serax

Current Age: 23

Sub-race (if any): Northerner

Past / History: Drew Serax grew up in the town Kastoria with his older brother Jayce and
his younger brother Fenair. From an early age Drew had always admired the
guards and aspired to join the Holy Oren Empire. Up until the age of 16 Drew
worked the farm with his father Borasker and his brother Jayce whilst his
younger brother Fenair played with his silly plants inside. As soon as he
became of age he was instantly accepted into the Militia. When Drew and his
family moved to Abresi he left the farm and found a place within the Holy Oren
Army military ranks.

As soon as the alliance between the Kingdom of Urguan and the Holy Oren Empire
collapsed Drew’s General ordered him to ask his father to supply provisions and
resources to the crown in these times of war and Drew obliged. He was then sent
to fight and fight he did. He fought with much courage and bravery before his
battalion was forced to retreat back to Abresi. Seeing as the Holy Oren Empire
lost the war Drew’s father was never repaid. When Jayce left to find their
father a fortune Drew stayed to look after his troublesome brother Fenair. He
then set out with his brother one year later to rendezvous with Jayce and
assist him with his righteous quest.

Ambitions for the Future: He feels somewhat guilty for staying back and not assisting his brother
with his quest to save his father’s business. He one day hopes to restore his
father’s coffers and his honour to their once former glories.  

Personality: Strong minded, witty, courageous, loyal, submissive.   

Skills: Archery skills, Swordsmanship, farming. 

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):

Drew has long golden hair partially covering his right eye. He has dark
blue eyes like his brothers. He is wearing light-grey adventurer’s cloth armour
with a brown sash holding his quiver tightly to his back.

Any other details you wish to share about your character: Has a thirst for justice and values honour
highly.

 

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the
event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

____

 

1. Whilst in the mighty human capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards
the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?

 

Answer: I notice this shadowy figure and decide that no chances must be taken
when it comes to the safety of the emperor. I shout out to the guards, calling
them by name as know the guards of Abresi well. I pursue the shady figure and
tackle him to the ground. I then pin his arms behind his back and hold him down
until the guards arrive to take them away for questioning.

 

2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?

 

Answer: I notice that this man’s life is in immediate danger and waste no time
in assisting him. I run towards them brandishing my longsword overhead letting
out a ferocious battle cry. If they are surprised I get the tactical advantage
over them for the first few seconds of combat, eliminating the advantages they
get from numbers. I dispatch the first as quickly as possible whilst with my
off-hand I shove the old man out of harms way. I then tend to the second bandit
hoping that he is still surprised and I am able to fight back effectively.

If they are not surprised and have already noticed me I shout to the old man to
run. I then step in and hold off the bandits for as long as possible before
fleeing the scene myself.

 

 

3. You are standing within the mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind
a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).

 

Answer: I approach the man with a friendly smile and a cheerful greeting. He
has a variety of long and short composite bows available. I say to the man
“Hello, my name is Drew and I am an avid archer and I wish to purchase one of
your many fine combat bows” He replies with “We have a composite short bow for
one hundred and fifty minas and a composite longbow for two hundred and seventy
five minas” I respond by saying “That seems a little steep for an ex-soldier
who fought in the war, what wood are the bows made of?” He replies by informing
me that they are made from the finest spruce wood crafted by Abresi’s best bowyer.
He then turns back to me with a look of disgust. I respond by telling him I
only have 250 minas with me and make an offer for the long bow. If he accepts
my offer I gladly pay the man, take my goods and walk away. If he declines my
offer I realise he won’t go any lower and leave to find another stall with more
affordable goods.

[IrishPerson 693]

~Under Review~

 

 

Sadly I have had to deny your application, here are some suggestions on things you could improve on:

 

• Your definitions are incorrect and/or need to be expanded on with added examples.
• Your biography is too short. Go into detail about your characters past and how he acts and was raised, things like that. So that your character is more fleshed out.
• You also didn't have any lore in your biography again. Thus I think you need to go and read it once again. 
• All three of your ORQs are too short and need to be expanded on greatly with dialogue.

Please wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post's edit (seen below) before posting your next attempt. If you have any questions, feel free to send me a message. Good luck with your next application.

[IrishPerson 693]

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