[Denied]Lord Adrani's Edited Application

[Devland99 180]

Out-Of-Character Information

The simplest section of the application! Simply answer these questions so we can get to know you a bit better.

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: - devland99
How old are you?: - 14
What time-zone do you live in?: - US East


Have you ever roleplayed before - if you have, how?: -  Yes,Gmod and other games that I can't remember
Have you been on any other roleplaying servers?: - Negative
Have you applied to this server before?(Please link past applications): -  No


How did you hear about us?: - Your the best Minecraft RP there is
What do you think the server will be like? - A great roleplaying server
Have you read and agreed to the rules?: - Yes
What’s your favourite rule / the rule you agree with the most?: -

• Make sure you don't break any of the server's lore - it's there for a reason!

Definitions

This is simply so that we can get an understanding of how much you know about roleplaying. Feel free to Google the answers, but make sure that you write the reply in your own words, not another website / person's!

What is roleplaying?: - Where players act a certain time period in real life
What’s metagaming?: - Telling something in character over out of character

What’s powergaming?: - Forcing actions upon others

In-Character Information

Now you actually make your character - be creative but stay reasonable! Make sure they make sense and that they follow lore. Try to come up with a character that you actually want to play.

What’s your character called?: - Adarin Colin

What race are they (and sub-race)?: - Human and sub elf

What sex are they?: - Male

How old are they?: - 20

Give us a brief description of their life - their story, childhood, family (Include server lore when writing): Living in the town of Aeriel, he began practicing with a wooden sword at the age of 18. He visited the tavern often to drink and plan his next day. He met some elves occasionally  and would drink with them, after being at the tavern he'd go home and sleep for the next day. On his 19th birthday he was becoming a very good warrior and decided he would see if he could become a guard, sadly he wasn't accepted but this didn't damper him. The next year at the tavern after practicing, he decided to set out from Aeriel and start  a band of protectors to save and keep people save from all over Aegis. 
What are they like (personality)?: -  Possessive, Kind, Smart, Hyperactive.

What are their ambitions?: -  Becoming the greatest protector that has ever lived.

Do they have any special skills?: - He can withstand some damage along with learning opponents weakness
What are their weaknesses?: - Not very quick on his feet
Give us a description of how they look (not a screenshot yet!)?: - Long white cape over his head with a brown shirt,belt and pants.

Anything else you want to say about them?: - Enjoys life

Please give us a screenshot of your character’s skin: - 

[Lita 677]

First off, you haven't improved your definitions at all, like you were requested to in your last denial. So that needs to be done immediately.

 

You also failed to link your previous applications, and although this in and of itself is not grounds for a denial, it's inconveniencing for us and looks lazy on your part.

 

Third, the majority of your in-character information needs work. We haven't been in Aegis for over 150 years is the first thing that jumps out of me. I also do not know what 'Human and sub elf' means. Your special skills should be elaborated upon further, and so should your weaknesses.

 

Remember to wait 24 hours after the denial time below before reapplying, and if you have any questions, I'd be glad to assist in a PM.

Edited November 12, 2013 by Escharian
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[Lita 677]

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