[Denied] My character app.

[Malaral Hedeki 21]

((any suggestions will be appreciated so I can further improve my character.Also sorry for any grammatical errors grammar is something I really struggle with.)) 

Minecraft username: ErwinScoutSmith

Age:14

I am fully aware of the pg13 aspect.

I have indeed read the rules and I agree fully. The rule I agree with the most is the “no loopholing” rule.

As for the rules confusing me some of them did not quite stick very well, but I still plan to learn them entirely.

I found out about LOTC by youtube ((link https://youtu.be/P3AMm0f25d0 ))

Roleplay: Roleplay is the action of playing a fictional character in a (often)fictional setting.

Metagaming: This is using OOC ((out of character)) information to your advantage. Mainly information your character can’t possibly know. Or has not learned yet.

Powergaming: Powergaming is pushing your way to a goal or setting without the consent or care of other’s opinions. ((please correct if I am wrong))

 

Character Information.

Character name: Achranack Shade

Character sex: Male

Character Race: Wood Elf

Character age: 650

Biography: Achrancak Shade was born deep in the woods isolated from many cities and groups of other elves. As a young elf he grew to love the calm peace and tranquility that came with the quiet forest. In his times of peace he would always read himself poetry. His poems formed how he saw the world,himself ,and life as a whole. His brother Durza shade had always been one to act and was fond of swordplay.

 The two brothers had but themselves for most of their lives in the forest they were born in. Ignorant of the world around them and wishing to fully understand the land and it’s cultures they finally decide that it’s time to see the world. Armed with nothing more than a sword a book and wit they set out to be free in the world they know so little about.

Personality traits: Achranack is a very loyal person and often will trust someone quickly. He always looks for new things to learn about. He always ask questions and always very friendly. He is always very open about his passions and is never afraid to show his true self. But once angered can and will become very violent and aggressive for even as a poet has his hidden claws.

Strengths/talents: Achranack can often be seen as an intelligent elf. Not only this but his many years of study in poetry allows him to think creatively and quickly in most situations. He has trained with his brother to become a excellent swordsman, but he favors the power of the pen over the sword.

Weaknesses/inabilities: Though he has training with a sword he wishes not to kill another being making him unable to be effect in a death match. Often times he will start a conversation but won’t ever know when to stop talking and can easy get very annoying with constant rambling.

As said before he tends to trust others quickly this can be dangerous for he does not know what lies might be hidden. He will also refuse all meat given to him unless he hunted the animal.

Achranack weighs about 120 pounds, he’s tall (6’6) and thin like many elfs. He has chestnut brown hair with emerald green eyes. Often wearing a green cloths he blends in well with the leaves of the forest that surrounds him. At other times he wears a red and white coat he found one day with a yellow and black mask. The origins of the coat is unknown but he wears the thick covering anyways.

skin pic: http://imgur.com/zadvBqx

[Quavinir_Twiceborn 1050]

Denied.

 

-You need to expand upon both your meta-gaming and power-gaming definitions.

 

-Your character's biography is incoherent, and doesnt make sense. He studied... Poetry far away and isolated from society in a forest?

 

-Your character's biography is too short, especially for an elf over 600 years old.

 

-Your character's biography includes no server lore.

 

-Durza Shade was/is a dark elf to my reckoning.

 

-You dont mention in your character's biography him randomly finding a bright coat and a mask that he just wears for the heck of it, nor explain why he wears such.

 

-You may re-apply in 24 hours.

 

-Feel free to send me a PM if you have any questions.

Edited November 24, 2015 by Quavinir_Tinuvial

[Quavinir_Twiceborn 1050]

Moved to Denied Application Forum.