[✗] RagnakTheFat Application

[RagnakTheFat 1]

What's your Minecraft account name?: NunchuKid
What timezone are you in?: Eastern Standard Time
How old are you?: 15
Are you aware the content and interactions on this server may not be appropriate for children under the age of 13? (You won't be denied for being under 13): yes
Have you read and agreed to the rules?: yes
What's the rule you agree with the most?: all of them
Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don't make sense? (if so we can help clear it up!): no
How did you find out about Lord of the Craft?: Drumruuk 
Link(s) to past Whitelist Applications (If applicable): 
Have you logged into the server yet? (You cannot be whitelisted without logging in at least once): yes

 

 

 

Character's name: Ragnak
Character's sex: male
Character's race: Mountain Dwarf
Character's age: 127

 

Biography: Ragnak, is originally from the Mountain's, he was the best fighter you could possibly be, but with a bunch of mental disabilities, no one has heard of.  One day after
his daily feast, the king called for him, and asked Ragnak to go find the "Great Lake".  Ragnak heard it as "The Great Cake", so his entire journey has been to find "The Great Cake".
75 years later, he came across a fellow named Jamberry and a follower of his whose name is feared across the lands. So Ragnak joined them and they all became "best buddies"
(Ragnak's words not mine).  Long story short, they did horrible horrendous things together, one-time Ragnak even killed a king that he chopped up, just for fun. 
He made good friends but nonetheless, they did horrible things together. Now due to his mental conditions, he is wandering around Axios, still trying to find "The Great Cake".

 

Personality Traits: He loves cake, he loves friendly people, he hates bullies, and loves to hug.

Ambitions: The man to find the Great Cake

Strengths/Talents: eating cake, hugging, killing, and loving.

Weaknesses/Inabilities: Social skills

Appearance: Ragnak is 4'6", Insanly fat, brown hair, brown eys, white skin, and fat

Skin: 

[LordCommander 163]

[LordCommander 163]

So sorry for the slow response, I sadly wish the bad news ended there, but your application is not acceptable to the standards that are needed for Lord of the Craft. However, I do wish to do something to make up for the time you have spent waiting for a response. Normally a Denial based on wrong application format would be 6 hours. Since you have waited almost 6 hours, I'll say that you can reapply as soon as possible. I will be writing down the reasons for your denial and will give you the chance to fix them, once done so, you will hopefully be accepted and I hope to see you joining us in our adventures through Axios.

 

1) Wrong Application Format: The ultimate reason for your app's denial is due to missing a few things in your application. This link will provide you the format you need. 

 

2) Backstory fixes: You are sadly missing the two paragraph minimum requirement on your application, as well as missing the three mentions of Lord of the Craft Lore, I recommend reading up more on Dwarven lore either on the wiki or on the forums themselves. 

 

3) Personality Traits: Perhaps go into more detail on your character's traits, why do they love cake so much? why are they awkward? Why does he hate bullies? perhaps you can explain why in your backstory, it could help bulk up the backstory and flesh out the character more.

 

I sincerely hope you will reapply and take my words into consideration, I hope you the best of luck and do not give up on Hope!

 

 

[LordCommander 163]

This application has been denied.

 

Moved to the Denied Applications forum.