my properly dated 3rd app

[dragonrider 0]

Minecraft Account Name:draconainmaster

-How old are you?: 11

-Time-Zone/Country of Residence: usa

-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:YES

-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: always looking for adventure, love danger,and always am daring for a fight. i love being a teen charachter. like to mine, herd, farm & FIGHT!!!

-How much time could you be on the server weekly?:about 7-14 hours a week

-How long have you played minecraft?: about a few weeks, give or take.

-What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?:i know ALOT about roleplaying. roleplaying is using your imagination to a ceirtain extent, and playing the role of a charachter.usually it consits of people using words, or actions, to tell a story. i roleplay ALL THE TIME!! me and my brother think of like,3-10 diferent roleplaying stories per month.

-What do you expect this server will be like?:a medevil server, filled with action, roleplaying(duh), and a world of many nations

-What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:i have played on softegg, which i left, for

it was to small and i am doubtful you can farm in it, or have a ranch. i also played in mutt’s world and citycraft, wich i left due to little,or no building space

-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?:yes

-Name the 4 races on this server.they are humans,elves,dwarves and orcs

-How did you hear about us?:my brother, PhantomComet, told me about this server, and it looked AWESOME

-Did you vote?:i think so,but if i did not, i would vote

-What was your favourite Law?:i am stuck between no griefing and no stealing, for i have been minorly griefed in the past, and robbed.

-What was your least favourite Law?:all laws are important, but i don’t like the architexture rule, for i am not the best builder when i am being rushed when the sun is setting

-What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?dragonrider

In-Character:

-Character Name:Elrond Telemmaitë

-What is your Race?:elf

-Lordofthecraft.net/forum forum account:draconainmaster

-Biography: I was a happy elf. I have a soft spot for sad people and crying people. i think swords are pretty cool, and if i had to choose just 2 weapons, they would be the sword, and the bow. I was born happy, and if there was anything i loved, it vas destroying evil. I also like to help people in need. but, as i was saying, i spent my days learning about nature, and lore, and practicing my sword skill, and archery. By the time i was five, i could hit a PERFECT bulls-eye on the target. But, my parents were short on money. That meant i needed to farm, and ranch, for food, which both i came to enjoy. Although, i hated being alone, or left out. I think if you are gonna do something, it can only be enjoyed to the fullest if there is someone else with you. I had a "dream" though. I dreamed to someday, be a successful trader with the humans. As i said i love helping others! I also hope to own a ranch someday, for i love nature and animals. So by the time i was 10, i was brave enough to engage in combat with monsters. I also feel, that endermen are misunderstood, because if you don't look at them directly, they will not attack you. Although, by the time i was 15, monsters killed my parents. So i moved, for i hoped for a new start, and wanted to banish all evil from this world!

-Character Age:17

-Character Appearance:elvish

-Character Personality:heroic, loves to work with others

-Your ambitions:be a powerful elf, and explore all of lore ,and reign victorious over all evil!!!

-Can your character read or write?:i write as good as you see here, but in Real Life i stink with neatly writing

-Can your character mine?:not really, i can mine if a mine is prepared

-Are you a capable builder?: i can make a very small fort the best, but i usually make alot of my buildings underground, to save material, for i ration any materials so i make them last longer

-Can you wield a sword?:I LOVE SWORDS and can weild one with ease

-Enjoy Farming?:yes

-Does your character have any special skills?:alot of courage, and usually never stops till the job is done

-A screenshot of your skin:

-Other Information: I LOVE LORD OF THE CRAFT, and accually do have a soft spot for crying-people.

[Blawharag 277]

Please do not repost your application within 48 hours. Take this time to expand upon your character, proof-read your application, read up on server lore and rules and fix the problems with your app.

#1 There are elements of powergaming in your application. You could drop bull's eyes at 5 years of age? Most children would struggle to draw a bow at 3, much less string it. Yet if we assume you trained in archery straight from your mother's womb there is no reason you should be a master archer after 5 years of practice as an infant. This is not the only bit of powergaming, only the most glaringly obvious, go through and fix them.

#2 While on the subject of traits your character should not realistically possess, you still have included that your character can build, mine, ect. without giving a thorough description as to why. Who taught your elf to build and why does he prefer subterranean structures? When did he learn to mine?

#3 Skin screen shot is too small to be visible to me. Please try a different format.

#4 "Elvish" is not an acceptable character appearance description. Put a bit more effort into your application than that, it's the least you can do considering the detail I give you regarding why you are being denied.