denserion application

[denserion 1]

Out-Of-Character:

-Minecraft Account Name:alex56151

-How old are you?:13

-Time-Zone/Country of Residence:GMT/England

-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:Yes.

-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a 12 year old student, living in England. I love gaming and role playing in gaming because it makes it more fun to have your own sort of story. I have a lot of free time to play video games and its usually what I spend my time doing.

-How much time could you be on the server weekly?:20 hours. 3 hour a day.

-How long have you played Minecraft?: Since beta 1.2 came out.

-What do you know about Roleplaying? What is it?: I say roleplaying is when you put your self in a different characters shoes or mind. Roleplaying is telling a story your own way with fun and games along the way.

-What do you expect this server will be like?:I expect the server to be a lot of mature people enjoying themselves. I expect the server to be one big story with everyone talking and roleplaying with each other

-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes

- in the game

-Name the 4 races on this server:Human, Orc, Elf and Dwarf

-How did you hear about us?:I saw your trailer on youtube.

-What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?:denserion

In-Character:

-Character Name: denserion

-What is your Race?: Human

-Biography: At a young age denserion's father did not seem to care at all about him. His mother left him at the age of 7 and his father had to keep care of the child. His father was a blacksmith in their small village and all his father cared about was his work. Monki grew tired of this and wanted to become something of his own. Years later when he was 18 His father taught Monki to read, write, mine and craft just so he could help his father work. At the age of 23 his father passed away, as the start of a new beginning, Monki realized he could now leave. So Monki left and now after travelling for 4 years he has come here.

-Character Age:25

-Character Appearance: a woodland rager of a hidden type

-Character Personality: denserion is a quite relaxed and friendly guy. But his temper is easily broken, annoy him and he will be fierce.

-Your ambitions: To find something else in his life. To help others and be a part of the big picture.

-Can your character read or write?: Yes, both as it was used in a past job.

-Can your character mine?: Yes

-Are you a capable builder?: yes

-Can you wield a sword?: Yes,and epic

-Enjoy Farming?: No

[Porkour. 235]

Give the GM's and the people of the Application team a little more time, as they are in preparation for Native's presentation for MineCon. I know we can all be a little antsy to play, but if a GM/App member approves it, you shouldnt have anything else to worry about.

Work on refining the application to make sure that it is so good, we want to read it over and over again.

[Porkour. 235]

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-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:Yes.

-Biography: At a young age denserion's father did not seem to care at all about him. His mother left him at the age of 7 and his father had to keep care of the child. His father was a blacksmith in their small village and all his father cared about was his work. Monki grew tired of this and wanted to become something of his own. Years later when he was 18 His father taught Monki to read, write, mine and craft just so he could help his father work. At the age of 23 his father passed away, as the start of a new beginning, Monki realized he could now leave. So Monki left and now after travelling for 4 years he has come here.

Build the story up more, your first sentence just says "at a young age". What I did to make my application worth reading, was starting off to how the character's life started. Then digressed to what changed about his/her life afterwards, now leading up to the age of seven. You also need to introduce who Monki is. On the fourth sentence, who the hell is Monki and how did Monki become a part of Denserion's life? Spell out your numbers, anything higher than 100 can be typed with numbers, otherwise type out 'seven' 'eighteen' 'twenty-three' 'four'. Your storyline is butchered, first you are talking about one thing, then changing to another. Write a story, not a short answer. Then lastly, work on proper grammar. Use a Word processor, then spellcheck your errors. Your story should be like a lady's skirt, long enough to cover the essentials but short enough to keep it interesting.

-Character Appearance: a woodland rager of a hidden type

What do you mean by hidden type?

-Can you wield a sword?: Yes,and epic

Dont use the word epic...it makes no sense.