Maxo's 1St Application

[maxomillion547 0]

Out-Of-Character:

Minecraft Account Name: Maxomillion547

Did you attend minecon and sign up at the LOTC booth?: No, I was unable to attend Minecon.

How old are you?: I am only 15, but very mature.

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: EST - USA

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: I do completely.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am a bright 15 year-old young man that attends a very high level private preparatory school in Florida. My most favorite hobbies are Minecraft, surfing, practicing guitar, and tennis. I am very experienced in Minecraft, but I'm rather new to role-play.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: I will most likely be on the server anywhere from 10 - 15 hours a week. This may vary on the weekends.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you.: Although I am new to the idea of Roleplaying, I think I have a good grasp on the what it is. My definition of roleplaying to me would be to act in the ways of your character rather than as your real self. Also, to play and say what is supposed to happen to the character and not base your character's actions on what I want to happen. My gameplay should include me resulting to fall to an enemy and play what is meant to occur.

In your own Words, describe what Metagaming and Powergaming are. My best definition of Metagaming is to use out of character information to your advantage in any role-play situation. This includes giving the coordinates to a place when they should have been guiding the person with directions, as if a real life situation. Powergaming is to play the role of your character but by means of having yourself be stronger than another without means of reason in an RP situation.

What do you expect this server will be like?: I expect to see good, serious role-players who like to have a fun time. I also believe I will see some great architecture.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I have played on a server called Herocraft. I do still play it but I'm just getting bored of the style of gameplay.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes, I have read and agree to all the rules.

How did you hear about us?: I heard about this server from a Herocraft friend Twidger.

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you? Yes, I am 1,304

What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?: maxomillion547

In-Character:

Character Name: Maxo_Oynn

What is your Race?: Dwarf

Biography(This should include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.): He was born as the only child in a small wooden cabin in his home kingdom. All of them were rambunctious and immature but Maxo stood out by being timid and shy. At the age of 21, Kal'Urguan was under attack and he was given his first bow to help defend. Unaware of what was happening Maxo was caught from behind by an intruding thief. The enemies sword slashed but nearly hit, only creating a light cut on his face. Anger raged out of him as he drew his bow back for the first time and let the arrow fly at his opponent. After they had moved all the raiders out of the village Maxo knew he wanted to practice his skills as a ranger. Working for many decades he became a master of stealth and trickery. While in battle Maxo took a different approach to attack his enemies. He would sneak through the trees unseen and take out enemies from afar. To this day Maxo is 255 years-old and still learning the ways of the bow. He is always dressed into camouflage clothing because he believes battle can break out any time. Maxo still has the scar on his face from his first encounter with evil. He mourns his father who has recently been murdered from a poisoned drink that was given to him by a stranger upon a sidewalk. His mother died at birth and he now has no one but his allies in war. Maxo enjoys writing poetry and novels about his unique and horrible childhood.

Your characters ambitions: Maxo wishes to avenge his father by tracking down his killer and making him pay for the sins he caused.

Out in the Wilds, your character comes across a small cottage. Outside, there appears to be an elf struggling combat with two bandits. What does your character do? With bow at hand Maxo hides behind a tree to get closer to the action. Maxo draws his bow back with multiple arrows and kills both of the bandits. He then approaches the Elf and greets him. Maxo tries to make friends with him as well.

Your character walks up to a shop in a quiet market. "Hello, my good sir!" says the shop owner. "What may I help you with today?" How does your character answer? "Why hello there! Have you any bread? I have just run out of arrows to hunt for my own food.

A screenshot of your skin: http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/72/20120208194022.png/

Other Information: I have been playing Minecraft for a very long time and I plan on playing on this server almost every day. I am really looking forward to it! - Thanks

[High Prophetess Mezua~ ♥ ツ 144]

You need to expand more on the biography. You left off a lot of loose ends and you should go back and fix them, to make the biography for believable. Not once did the character get hurt physically.

"Anger raged out of him as he drew his bow back for the first time and let the arrow fly at his opponent."

What happened after this? You don't mention if it hits the raider or not.

What happened between the ages 25 and 255? Surely a lot more happened. Explain more about what happened to his father, how was he tricked into drinking poison?

Expand more on the Open Response questions at the end as well. Go into more detail, use more action. How does he kill the bandits? Does he get hurt?

Same with the shopkeeper. Does anything else happen? Does the shopkeeper respond?

Please wait 2 hours to re-apply and goodluck on your next app~!

[High Prophetess Mezua~ ♥ ツ 144]

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