bane344 0 Share Posted July 25, 2011 Name: (bane344)Bane Title: The Strong Gender: Male Age: 48 Race: Dwarven Occupation: soldier of the free dwarf army, and the Vanguard. hobbies: Hunting, farming, sleeping, drinking, some more drinking, eating, fighting, sharpening and cleaning Hati(my Axe), laying with women. History: Born on the Kings Road he given the name of Gorem by his mother in her last breath. his father Bronn, a great warrior, never loved Gorem in fact he never used Gorem's real name and just called out "Oi Bane of meh existence" to grab the attention of Gorem. Gorem showed promise in all the jobs that were given to him, but he never was given an ounce of respect or gratitude from his father even when he saved his father form a skeletal archer, in the process he was wounded in each limb there were several arrows. When they returned home Gorem was lashed 30 times for being hit with a single arrow. Out of anger from all the beatings in his life, Gorem turned around and caught the whip ass his father attempted to lash him again, As Gorem wrapped the whip up dragging his father closer to him. when they were within a foot of each other Bronn threw a punch but Gorem dogged and took his massive hand and grabbed Bronn's face and threw him to the ground and Gorem beat him until there was just a sliver of life in Bronn's eye. Then Gorem took Haiti (his axe) and severed his father’s head, a guard heard the commotion in their house and rushed in to see what was wrong when he saw Gorem holding Haiti and Bronn's head standing in a puddle of blood. The guard asked Gorem what happened, though he had a pretty good idea. Gorem just stood there with a blank stare, after a few moments he snapped back to reality. The guard asked again, "Gorem what happened here?" Gorem responded with a cold strong voice, "Meh name be Gorem no longer I shall now be known as Bane!" The guard walked up to Bane and grabbed his shoulder and whispered something of comfort to Bane. The other guards were wondering what was taking so long for there comrade to return, so they went to check. When the other guards arrived and saw Bronn's body, the guard that had been there said that Bronn went mad and that Bane had killed him in self defense, and that is how Bane's story begins. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slayer15855 3 Share Posted July 25, 2011 This shows some real promise. I am going to recommend some things. Firstly fix up the spelling errors and perhaps flesh it out a bit, with feelings and thoughts. Also add a bit more on him beginning etc... Then write that up into a book. I would love to have a copy in-game for my library, you will know me as the arcane mage Slayer (Slayer15855). Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luchian 214 Share Posted July 25, 2011 Nice story Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bane344 0 Author Share Posted July 25, 2011 fixed the spelling, im working on the other things. and thanks Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bane344 0 Author Share Posted December 26, 2011 Bane has been found dead at the edge of a lava pit, his body was burnt almost beyond recognition Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
steelersfan1221 300 Share Posted December 19, 2012 Moved to the Great Library. It shall be sorted into appropriate category shortly. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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