Cruzor's Re-Application

[Cruzor 0]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name: Elementalord99

How old are you?:12

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Mountain Time-Zone, United States of America

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: English is my native tongue.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I'm a person who enjoys RP games and medieval style games. I can be ambitious and creative and also a good builder.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: Dependent on school work. (Likely 7 hours a week possibly more)

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: Roleplaying is when a person acts like a different person either through a game or play or other means.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: Most games I play are RPG.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is: Meta-Gaming takes place in a character where it is rarely noticed by the player, such things in LOTC would be your race.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is: Power Gaming is when a player forces another player to do something that requires two or more participants. In most cases you can be banned for this.

What do you expect this server will be like?: A server with actual goals such as quests and adventures and not just a survival type server.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I have played Shadowraze and left it because it had no overall goal.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules: Yes

How did you hear about us?: Youtube

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?: Yes, I was number 3,051

Have you posted this application on our minecraft forum thread yet? If not, just finish it up on here and then copy + paste is over there. (http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-%E2%96%91%E2%96%92%E2%96%93-the-lord-of-the-craft-%E2%96%93%E2%96%92%E2%96%91-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r/):

In-Character:

Character Name: Cruzor

What Race are you?: Human

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race): N/A

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.): His mother gave Cruzor to a local family in the village of which she was passing. The father is unknown to him and his adopted family. He grew up in the fields of a farm and continued throughout for most of his life. At the age of 18 he planned leave to find quests, adventure, and thrills. Before that could happen at the age of 14 his village was attacked. There were few survivors and his family was the only one left intact. Mentally his parents were weakened though the opposite happened for Cruzor. It droze him to find quests not for the adventure and thrill (Yet still wanting that) but to help other villages.

A year later he began practicing swordsmanship.. After 7 years he finally finished his training. He continued to want to help his village and others. On the road traveling beck home he was attacked by a highwayman. This was Cruzor’s first battle. Quickly disabling the man he left him where he lay till the man woke up. Cruzor then continued his travels. He became a type of happy-go-lucky person but a darker more depressing side would emerge occasionally. He doesn’t seem to strong and is surprisingly light. Having black hair he seems like a normal human.

What is your Character's ambitions?: Quests, Swordsmanship, weaponry, crafting, education, and a good life

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc): Sword

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents? Swordsmanship

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):

Other Information about your Character: He would like to become a Knight or even better get a girl.

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond? In a loud and somewhat authoritative voice say, “ Halt” And charge the two with a sword and engage them. If necessary he would kill them. If killing them he would give whatever the warriors carried with them to the halfling. If not killing them he would hand them over to the authorities.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response? “Ello, what do you have?” and buy what ever is of interest or say “Nothing I’m just passing through.”

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?: My character would take the few Iron bars but leave the sword and with the bars craft a sword or whatever he may require.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond? In a hoarse voice say “Ello, could you spare some food and water? I’m lost and starved.”

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?: He would be excited and volunteer for the act. Preparing before going to eliminate the bandits. When attacking the bandits He would be on the front-lines.

[James Undercroft 129]

I am very sorry, but your application has been moved to the denied section of the forums. There are numerous reasons for this, all of which I have included in my feedback below this message. In the mean time there is an abundant source of information, stories, guides and other helpful tips to get you on your way to being accepted; all you need to do is look around. I would suggest the lord of the craft wiki and application submissions section of the forums to start off your little quest to make the best application. Good luck!

The reasons that I have denied you are:

Your definition of Roleplaying is not what we are after.

Your current definition of Roleplaying displays to me that you do not fully understand what Roleplaying is all about. Please go back and so some research as to what Roleplaying is. I needn’t remind you that this is a Roleplaying server, if you do not know how to role-play or do not show evidence that you are keen to learn how to role-play I suggest you find a Minecraft server better suited to your needs.

You did not give valid examples of RP, or you did not describe how your examples are RP.

You need to describe to us how the games or locations you have talked about pertain to an RP environment.

RPGs or Role-Playing Games are not RP’s.

Games such as World of Warcraft, Skyrim, Rift or similar do not count as Roleplaying as there is no person to person interaction within a Roleplaying scenario (unless of course you were on a Roleplaying server in which you need to explain where and how you role-played to show your understanding of the term).

Your definition of power-gaming is incorrect.

In lord of the craft we use an RP definition of power-gaming, rather than an RPG definition. While these may seem like the same thing, we can loosely judge that an RPG definition would fit in with games such as World of Warcraft or Skyrim, and the RP definition would fit in with games such as D&D or other person to person Roleplaying. Please do not confuse the definition we use to the definition that other Roleplaying groups may use, relating to creating a character which is too powerful, or doing an “overpowered” action; this is not the definition we use. To make sure you have the correct definition you can either have a look at the Lord of the Craft wiki, or by joining our Team Speak channel (send me a message if you need help getting started) and asking an experienced member. I would also like you to include an example of the term as it demonstrates your understanding of the concept.

Your definition of meta-gaming is incorrect.

There are very few definitions of meta-gaming so it would be rare that you could confuse meta-gaming with another term. I would suggest that you go back to researching (or perhaps begin to research if you guessed the definition) and find out a correct definition pertaining to Roleplaying. I suggest that you do a Google search for the term, look on the Lord of the Craft wiki or join our Team Speak channel. Please do remember that plagiarising (copying someone else’s work) may warrant you a temporary or permanent ban from applying to the server: so don’t do it! I would also like you to include an example of the term as it demonstrates your understanding of the concept.

You need to have a character last name.

Unless you have a specific reason for why you do not have a last name of your character, you need to write a last name to show that you have put some in-depth thought processes into developing and creating your character.

Your biography has a lot of errors.

Your biography contains powergaming. In the context of your biography this can be anything from encountering an enemy and just beating it without explaining how, or just defeating it unrealistically.

You have not included any lore from the world of Asulon/the lore you did include contradicts that of Asulon. I recommend that you do a lot of research as to what you race is and how they act, as well as towns and places that you could use in your biography. Do note this is not Skyrim or Lord of the Rings, we have our own universe with our own races. For ideas and lore you can look on the Lord of the Craft wiki (link on the main page), the Role-play or History sections of the forums or better yet;

talk to the people themselves. Just join in our Team Speak channel and ask around! We welcome new people :)

Your story does not make too much sense.

Your biography is less than two paragraphs long. You need to write a minimum of two paragraphs (which in themselves must contain at least five full sentences).

You need to complete the entire biography, detailing all your characters history, age, personality and description. We also like to see little role-play quirks such as habits like the constant brushing back of a fringe, or the scratching of an itchy palm.

Every single thing in your application must have a justification. For example:

John’s father taught him swordsman ship and the lay of the land. X BAD

John’s father was a retired swordsman in the Oren military, after the undead attacks and the moving to Asulon he decided it was time that he lay down the sword for more important matters, family. Now days John’s father teaches John the way of the sword, not so that he can join any particular military, but so that he can defend himself for future experiences to come. √GOOD

Your ambitions are underdeveloped.

You need to show some advanced thought processes. What would your character like to do in the near and distant futures? What is your character planning? You also need to justify your decisions. Why does your character want to do this?

Your answers to the favourite tool/best skill questions are underdeveloped.

You need to justify why you have chosen the choices you have. It is all well and good that your character can run really fast, or is light on their feet: but why?

Your answers to the Open Response questions need a lot of improvement.

Instead of describing what your character would do, you need to assume that your character is in the situation and acting as they would in that situation. You need to describe a scene of RP. This means that you cannot write “If this happens, then my character would do that.” As this shows that you are not Roleplaying, you are answering the question from what you think that your character might do. You need to show us that you know who your character is, you know what the situation is and you know how your character is going to react.

This also means that you need to write in full RP. For example:

Josh talks to the shopkeeper, buys a few apples, pays the shop keeper and leaves. X BAD

Josh walks up to the man standing behind the rough oaken market stand. The sounds of a busy market can be heard all around him. An annoying fly buzzes around his head, so he absent-mindedly begins to inefficiently swat it away. “Ah, greetings shopkeeper! I was just browsing your wares.” The shopkeeper nods at Josh and then turns towards another customer to attempt to assist them the way all market shopkeepers must. Suddenly Josh felt a slight tugging sensation on his belt. He was about to brush it off as nothing, perhaps just someone bumping into him until he realised his belt was slightly lighter. He noticed a man beginning to run off in the opposite direction of himself. He glanced down to see that his coin purse was missing. He put two and two together and then shouted at the top of his lungs. “STOP THEIF!”… √ GOOD!

We expect that you write in full RP and that you write a full paragraph or more for each question.

If you have any questions about my feedback, or would like to create some constructive criticism about the way I give feedback (I.E am I being TOO blunt, or am I coming across rude) then please send me a message! I take all questions, none are stupid! :)

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum