First Application

[Philmorai 2]

Minecraft Account Name:littlemattyb

How old are you?:18

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:UTC/GMT +10 hours melbourne, australia

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: yes I do.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: ok, first I like drawing and making games on computers. I am currenlty doing and It at tafe certificate 4 in game development. I like making and creating stuff. i found minecraft is to be very fun and entertaining.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: time in hours over 20 hours a week

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: a Roleplaying means we role play as if we were at that time, so we use the language and do all the stuff we would of done if we were in the time or place. so for example if we were doing a play. we would follow certain rules and scripts to have a better and real experience

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: i have had experience with wow rp, and other minecraft servers

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is: well meta gaming having a strategised action based on what someone from that time or period would do.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is: to aim for a goal to work hard and to get things done, to have a check list

What do you expect this server will be like?: i expect it to have a good community and be enjoyable. and it to have good people and no trolls..

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: i was playing havoc, but it seemed that there was not alot of people on there. = boring

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: yes i have and i agree

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:

yes i do, i agree to the terms

How did you hear about us?: i googled best minecraft server

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?: no.

In-Character:

Character Name:Philmorai

What Race are you?:man

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

Philmorai grew up in a quiet town by a large lake. Philmorai was a very weak looking boy, but his courage and mite made him strong. not long after his 15 birthday his parent were murdered bring him to grief. He did little for 1 year, as the year passed by he realized he should get revenge. but first he need a plan, he needed to get alot of respect from other people so they can help him. make a town build a community and keep them safe. so that what would happen, not happen to anyone else...

when he turned 18 he left the small town to go off to start his adventure and to avenge his parents death...

What is your Character's ambitions?: to overcome his trials and find out who killed his parents

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):my favourite is a sword

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?i like hunting

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):

Other Information about your Character:

he is strong minded and can complete any job, doesn't matter how big

[Trouvo 205]

I am very sorry, but your application has been moved to the denied section of the forums. There are numerous reasons for this, all of which I have included in my feedback below this message. In the mean time there is an abundant source of information, stories, guides and other helpful tips to get you on your way to being accepted; all you need to do is look around. I would suggest the lord of the craft wiki and application submissions section of the forums to start off your little quest to make the best application. Good luck!

The reasons that I have denied you are:

Your have used incorrect formatting of the application.

You need to re-copy the application format. Make sure you have copied the text from the white box and not anywhere else. Also make sure that you do not delete anything in [these square brackets] as they are vital to keep the colour, boldness and size of the text. If you are having trouble because your entire application turns out in funny colours, make sure that you are writing your answers on a line underneath the question, as this is a common error and can mess up the formatting of your application.

Your grammar makes sections of your application hard to understand.

While grammar is not a vital part to becoming accepted, we require a certain standard of grammar to be used so that you can be understood during an RP interaction. When posting your application please check and double check what you have written to make sure it is of the best standard possible. Some other solutions are to use a word processing program which spell check capabilities or to use www.spellcheckplus.com . The latter is a very useful website which gives detailed descriptions on how to impove upon your grammar and spelling, without the option of just fixing something with a single (or double) click.

Your definition of Roleplaying is not what we are after.

Your current definition of Roleplaying displays to me that you do not fully understand what Roleplaying is all about. It is either too short and needs expansion, or it contains information which goes against what Roleplaying is all about. Please go back and so some research as to what Roleplaying is. I needn’t remind you that this is a Roleplaying server, if you do not know how to role-play or do not show evidence that you are keen to learn how to role-play I suggest you find a Minecraft server better suited to your needs.

You did not give valid examples of RP, or you did not describe how your examples are RP.

You need to give us specific examples on how the games or locations you have talked about pertain to an RP environment.

You need to expand on your both of your powergaming and metagaming definitions.

Currently your definitions are very basic. You need to write more than just a sentence or two. You need to really describe what these things are and how they relate to role-play. Also remember to never plagiarise and to always include an example to display your understanding of the concept.

You need to have a character last name.

Unless you have a specific reason for why you do not have a last name of your character, you need to write a last name to show that you have put some in-depth thought processes into developing and creating your character.

Your biography has a lot of errors.

You need to completely re-write your biography. Please include lore from the server (you cannot come from "another land"), your grammar is terrible as I can hardly understand what you are trying to write, this needs to be fixed. You also need to include the ENTIRE question, please re-read it.

You need to embed the screenshot of your skin.

For me to accept you I must be able to view your skin as I need to judge whether it is acceptable for this server, reason being if someone joins this server, but do not show their skin but they have a Tron skin on I would be in big trouble, but for me to be able to view your skin it must also be embedded. The reason your skin needs to be embedded is because recently people have been linking some dangerous websites to where the image of their skin has been hosted. To avoid this we request that the image is directly linked to this website either as an upload or being embedded into the post itself. You can do this by following this tutorial:

1. Go in-game and press the “F5” button TWICE. (Not once as this will show the back of your character)

2. Take a screen shot by pressing the "PrntScr" button on a windows computer or press F2 on the keyboard, then go to start => Run and type in this: %appdata%/.minecraft/screenshots

3. Find the screenshot and open it in an image manipulation program such as Paint or Gimp.

4. Crop the image so that only the area close to your skin (including the skin) remains.

5. Save the file and go to tinypic.com

6. Upload the file

7. Click ONCE on the text box underneath: "IMG Code for Forums & Message Boards"

8. Right click and copy the entire text

9. Paste in your new application

*Note* If you want a tutorial for Macs, please send me a message on the forums.

Some or all of your answers to the Open Response questions need a lot of improvement.

Instead of describing what your character would do, you need to assume that your character is in the situation and acting as they would in that situation. You need to describe a scene of RP. This means that you cannot write “If this happens, then my character would do that.” As this shows that you are not Roleplaying, you are answering the question from what you think that your character might do. You need to show us that you know who your character is, you know what the situation is and you know how your character is going to react.

This also means that you need to write in full RP.

_{(lucas's feedback....cbf'd)}

[Lirinya 4036]

Moved to Denied Forum