Dwarf Application For Lord Of The Craft

[Bofauk 19]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name:

lovetrolls

How old are you?:

13

Time-Zone/Country of Residence

Arizonza,USA

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

yes and i have good gramer for my age

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

Im a good builder at minecraft.I have a good grip on consel commands.I dont use hack clinets on minecraft.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

6-14 hours but it real depeands if im on vaction and stuff like that.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:

U are playing in a other world and not has you're self.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:

i've had some but not much, i hope i have a chance to learn on you're server.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:

Meta-Gaming is knowing information that youre charcter would not know and trying to use it to his advantage .

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Emoting is:

Is forcing another character to react in a way that is not in there control with youe comments.

What do you expect this server will be like?:

I exepect it to be very fun and i hope to find out.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

I have mostly played on raid servers but i left them because there are to many hackers/xrayers.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

yes,yes and yes

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:

I will.

How did you hear about us?:

Alot of the youtube videos so i decidide to try youre server and it looks great.

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?:

Yes i have hears the link http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/63880-dwarf-application/

In-Character:

Character Name: orezy age: 29

What Race are you? (You may only be Human, Orc, Elf or Dwarf!) :

Dwarf

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race :

None

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

I was born in a small under ground house my mum died in child brith having me. my dad worked 24/7 in the mines to try to suppot me by he died when i was 16 in a mining accident.i travled all over after my dad died.

When i was 19 i met the love of my life. My love and me lived a happy life, I even had son tell that horrible day, I was harvesting the wheat in my field a good 2 miles from my house when i see smoke coming from over the hill where my home is so i drop every thing and run. I RUN as hard as I can for hours on end. I final see my house after hours of runing and then i see it, my wife and kids dead bodies, and it looks like they wear killied by orks, no i know they were killied by orks.After they died i became a drunk it toke me 3 years to relise that becoming a drunk will not help so i decide to come to arms and kill every ork i see.

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?

Mining and killing orks.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format, if you do not know how to acquire one, copy and paste this link into your browser:

I don't know how to do this so the screenshot of my skin is in attachments thing. it will not work if u would like to see my skin check my last application it will be in the attacment thing.

Other Information about your Character:

He will kill every ork he see's even if it's a women or child.

Open-Response-Questions

Each and every question must be answered with a minimum of a single full paragraph and entirely in RP.

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

As i walk up 2 the warriors 1 of them pulls a sword to my head so i caimly ask them what do they wont and they respawn ur gold drop it now so i do and so does the habbiat o the warriors pick up the gold and walk away as they do that i pull out my dow and kill both of them and pick up the gold and give the halfling his gold and i walk away.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

great i say to my self anther sales man trying me to sell me over prised dia swords but I respawn in a freindly voice, im doing just fine how about u, he respawn great would u like to buy a diamond sword for 1000 mina. Oh great i say to my self I was right, so i say no thank u in a freindly voice. He respawns in a despret voice ok name a price i real need money bad if i dont pay of some ork they will kill me so i say wear are they and he shacks his head kowing what i will do to them and he respawns dont try killing them ull just end up died. i ask him over and over but he will not tell me all he will tell me is that he need 1000 mina to pay them off. I give him 1000 mina and move on, i say to him best of luck to u my lad and i move on.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

I was walking in the wood and come to a old run down cobban so i walk in side and theres cob webs all over and its dark so i light the old fire place and set down to warm up, then i see a old chest so i get up to lock in side it. I see a old gold sword and some rusty iron ingots i leave the ingot wear they are, and i take the sword back to my seat i spead hours looking at it tell my tried soul falls a sleep. i wake up in the moring and i think about taking it but then i think to my self it should say wear it was because it been there for years, so i move on.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

Ello they shout at me when im at the gate i shut back can u open the gate, so they open the gate with there bows pointed at me. They must have thought i was a bandit. I ask them if i can have any food i take out my gold but they refuse and they give me some free food. i thank them for the food and i move on.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

I was staying in a INN when i got the news about the bandits and that the guards were paying u to help them kill the bandits so i accept. There were only 10 guards and 15 peaple like me. Bravily we march up to the bandits camp. WE reach the camp at dawn, and we get ready for the battle. CHARGE the head guard screams, the bandits shoot arrows at us when we charge. many of us die before we get to the bandits, i luckly made it to the bandits and take out 5 banditss tell i get hit in the head. i wake up 2 weeks later in the hospital they tell me i got knocked out during the fight, and that after the fight the remaning guasrds rushed me to this hosital. After my head heald i moveds on to the next town.

Anything else you would like to say?:

thank u for you'r time and i hope the skin thing is not a big deal.

[Cappy 1599]

Reasons:

• Your spelling and grammar needs work.
  
• Please refrain from using "txt tlk" in your application. This includes "u" instead of "you".
  
• Your role-playing, metagaming and power-emoting definitions all need to be expanded.
  
• Your biography is still too short. It is required to be at least two reasonable paragraphs long.
  
• You need to include more server lore in your biography. Show us that you are at least a little familiar with the places and major events of our world. You can research the lore on our Wiki here.
  
• You have mis-spelled "orcs" many times in your application.
  
• Nonsensical Open Response Questions. Why are you using the word "respawn" in your Open Response Questions? That is an out-of-character term that should not be used in-character.
  
• Powergaming in your Open Response Questions.
  -Killing two armed warriors with a bow in a single moment is powergaming. In addition, you are powergaming by suddenly giving your character legendary bowmanship, which was never mentioned anywhere previously.
  -You never mentioned your character having any combat training in your biography, so how does he eliminate five bandits in the bandit raid?
  
• Villainous activity in the Open Reponse Questions and villainous character. All unprovoked murder (you cannot simply see someone and kill them to count as provoked) requires an accepted villain application to commit. Make sure you read over the villain rules (here) so that you are aware of what you can and cannot do without applying for a villain application.
  
• Your Open Response Questions need to be expanded. They are all required to be at least one paragraph, and written in full role-play. Some ways to expand on them would be to explain in more detail what your character does, and also explain why they do it, and "what's going through their head" at the moment. You should also include both detailed actions and dialogue in your answers. You should not include "if"s in your response. You are narrating a scenario, not listing the possible courses of events.
  
• Incorrect formatting.
  

Please use the correct formatting in your next application as it makes the application significantly easier to read. You can do that by finding the application format here, and copying everything inside the white box. Then paste it somewhere, and begin filling in your answers outside the tags, like so:

[b][color="#add8e6"]Minecraft Account Name:[/color][/b] <Your answer here>

Do not change the application format in any way.

If you have any queries relating to this application, please do not hesitate to PM me on the forums!

You may reapply in 24 hours from the time of this post.

Why not browse the forums or read up on some helpful guides while you wait?

[Cappy 1599]

Moved to Denied Forum