elderceleo's first applacation

[ClassyDryad 2367]

Out-Of-Character Details

Minecraft Account Name:Elder_Celeo

How old are you?:15

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:America

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?:Yes

Have you had any previous experience in roleplaying?:Very little

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?:Yes

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?:YouTube

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft:

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here: http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r-100-unique-gameplay/! :yes

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is:To act out a adopted role.

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is:To cheat by using information your character does not know.

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is:Forcing the result of one's actions on another character and not letting them stop it.

In-Character Details

Character Name:Donovan

Character Race:Dark Elf

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary:Donovan is an odd elf. He has violet eyes which is rare among elves. Donovan has twilight grey skin and dark grey hair under red hood. He is 70 years of age. Donovan always has his father's trusty Sword at his side.

Donovan grew up in the Wilds with his father, Jarvis. Jarvis showed Donovan how to wield a sword wisely and how to survive in the Wilds. Jarvis told Donovan that it's best to not go anywhere alone. He also taught Donovan the religion of the reformed church. Donovan had many good days with his father. But one day when Donovan came back from hunting Jarvis was gone. The only thing left was his father's sword swaddled in fine yellow cloth. Donovan pledged that he would find out what came of his father.

What are your characters ambitions?:Hunting, sword fighting, cleaning his fathers sword, and searching for clues of his fathers disappearance.

Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here:My Skin

Is there anything else you would like to say about your character:No.

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response?"Hello dwarf" I say"hello"says the grumpy dwarf"Can I see your Wares"I say"Oh Sure"says the dwarf in a jolly manner."I will take the set of leather boots"I say"Ok 40 minas"says the dwarf.I give him the minas and get on my way.

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?I pull my sword on the orc and yell "I will have your hide orc","I'll crush your skull elf". We clashed and started Fighting.Eventually I parried his sword and stabbed him in the chest. The orc gasped and fell to the ground, crimson blood gushing from his open wound."Thanks elf"says the dwarf.I nod to him and get on my way.

Whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins spill out, you peer down at the defenceless man. What does your character do?:I rap cloth around the break in his walking stick and help him to his feet."Thank you...can you help me pick my minas"says the old man."sure"I say.I pick up all the minas and the old man gives me 10 minas for my help.After we bid are farewells I continue on my journey.

[Taiga 764]

Your Application has been...

DENIED [X]

Put on PENDING [ ]

Reason(s)Why Your Application Was Denied:

[[X's mark the parts you need to rectify.]]

Role Play:

Missing Biography [ ]

-Short Biography [ ]

Insufficient Information in OOC [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Metagaming Definition [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Powergaming Definition [ ]

-Insufficient Knowledge on Role Play [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge about the Lore [X]

Incorrect Lore / Other-Worldly Lore [ ]

-Fabricated Places/Large-Scale Events [ ]

-Unreal Scenarios [ ]

Bouts of Powergaming [ ]

Bouts of Metagaming [ ]

Requires a Villain Application [ ]

Open Ended Responses Require Elaboration [X]

Did not post on MinecraftForums [ ]

Form:

Missing Areas [ ]

Bad Spelling/Grammar [ ]

Breaking Rules [ ]

Plagiarized [ ]

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Skin:

Missing Skin [ ]

-Skin Doesn't Fit Character [ ]

-Incorrect Character Description [ ]

-Incorrect Skin Format [ ]

-Unloreful Skin [ ]

Other Comments:

First and foremost, your application is missing any indication about knowledge of the server's lore. Pleasse remember, it is a necessary and integral part of your application. This tells us that you have read and understood the server's setting, our background lore, and gives your character the necessary information. It is not necessary to read everything about the server— simply read anything that may pertain to your character's race, background, and any additional tidbits you may want to add to deepen your character's background. Suggestions include names of large cities, some information about the move to Asulon [if your character is of the right age], large events, and knowledge about notable landmarks.

Here are some useful links:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/wikka.php?wakka=HomePage

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/?page_id=10

Secondly, I would like you to improve your Open Response Questions. They require further elaboration, such as character dialogue, your character's emotions, what they are thinking, etc. This will indubitably aid in the progression of your application. Be aware that every scenario will be seen at an in-game approach, so no powergaming or metagaming is allowed. The lore included (if you so happen to include some) must also be applicable to our server as well.

I wish you good luck on your next application!

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If you have any Questions or concerns, feel free to send a Private Message to my account!

Noteworthy Hints and Resources:

You come to Asulon to Develop a Character, not have one Developed already

Just because you play RPG's, doesn't mean you have RPed before.

Don't post another application in a period of one (1) day. It clogs up the applications section, and doesn't prove to us that you have improved upon your application.

Definition of Metagaming and Powergaming : http://sm-rp.forumotion.com/t32-powergaming-metagaming-ic-and-ooc

[Taiga 764]

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